iusername wrote:first of all, there is time you should use "-ah" and should not. like when there is verb after the name then you shouldn't use "-ah" with your name. "-ah" is used to call someone. "Hanbyul-ah" is equivalent to "hey, Hanbyul"
for example, you wrote "after separating with Hanbyul-ah" but there shouldn't be "-ah" because it means "after separating with hey, Hanbyul" which doesn't make sense.
when you say "BB-yah," "-yah" is equivalent to "-ah"
you should recheck everywhere that you wrote names with "-ah" and "-yah" and think it with "hey" and see if it makes sense or not.
also, there are some grammar errors too. i'm also not that good with English, but in Hanbyul route, i read "if i'm okay with you" when it should be "if you're okay with me."
in Lune route, i read "if it's okay to you" when it should be "if it's okay with you"
you used names and noona a lot in sentences. we don't constantly call each other's names. If it was written in Korean, maybe i would feel less irritated by it, but this is written in English, and English speakers usually don't call names so much when they are already speaking to each other, especially when there are only two people. Even when "I" am thinking, instead of name, try to use the word, "he" when you can.
K's korean name is misspelled. you wrote 게이 (gay). it should be 케이.
my favorite list: Hanbyul > Yu > BB > K > Lune
Hanbyul is my bias <3 but i still like all the characters
also, they look quite distinguished in my eyes!
I hope you make longer version. can you tell me how old each of the members are? Are BB and K underage?
and does group name QUAR'X have meaning? what does it mean?
Are they like... ugh i forgot the word people use for it. what do you call it? fan-created idol group? fanidols? i just can't remember what they call the animated idol characters in internet.
Thank you! I will take note of these.... ;_; ) I'm still struggling with Hangeul aigoo, but will research and study more in the future! I hope I didn't offend or anything...
Ah, as said beforehand, there weren't any proofreading done. This was done pretty quick. >//w//<
I also have no idea what they are called but uhm.... we call them our 'idol persona' / 'idol counterparts' but other than that, idk how people call it- I'm sorry-
QUAR'X has a pretty funny history- but here's what Lune has to say- "I wanted to capture the image of stars and sphinx/phoenix and quacks in one word"
Lune and Hanbyeol are 96z, BB and K are 99z, yes underaged ^q^ ), Yu is the oldest, 95z