The Doll and the Spider (NaNoRenO 2016, Horror, KN)

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The Doll and the Spider (NaNoRenO 2016, Horror, KN)

#1 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Thu Mar 24, 2016 8:19 pm

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Warning! I suggest putting your volume low!

Update! New Build Available! At the suggestion of my friend Maelstrom-Fenrir, I've added more to the ending. I have now achieved the "Maria has Pleased Mama Rosa Achievement". To go with the new writing, I've made one more (super quick) cg as well. Plus...since the gallery refused to unlock the Credits cg, I just gave it its own screen. So no more worries about that.

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PS: Builds 2.1 and 2.2 are just minor spelling fixes, that's all. So no need to redownload AGAIN if you already have build 2. This should hopefully be the very last updated build.
Summary: Carolyn has forgotten her doll outside in the backyard and is now deep asleep. With the upcoming witch's hour, her doll worries that she might not be able to find a way to return inside the house to protect Carolyn. To her luck, the brother's pet tarantula appears after a hunt. With some persuasion, the tarantula reluctantly agrees to carry her back to Carolyn, hopefully before it is the witch's hour.
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Carolyn's precious doll, passed down from her mother, who received it from her grandmother. Just like she has done for those two, she protects Carolyn every single night from deadly creatures when the witch's hour approaches. Is her only toy, so she's the only line of defense.
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Spider

The brother's pet tarantula. Enjoys escaping his tank from time to time whenever the boy forgets to fully close the top. Has a habit of hunting for frogs and mice. Doesn't believe in monsters, ghosts, and so on. Used to talking toys though, but not moving ones. Biggest fear is scorpions.
Note1: I have removed Auto Toggle from the Quick Menu, and I won't be adding it back in.

Note2: If there are any errors, please let me know as soon as possible and I'll attempt to fix them. (Although I'm pretty sure I got everything running smoothly.)

Note3: My friend just told me when he downloaded my nano it was "flagged" as a virus. It's obviously a false, but yeah, giving a heads up about that.
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#2 Post by YzzaPizzaIsCheezy » Fri Mar 25, 2016 2:44 am

Congrats on finishing NaNo! :)

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#3 Post by valoodx » Fri Mar 25, 2016 4:36 pm

wow loved the story, and also
(Spoiler)
I felt bad for Herc the spider...
even if i do suffer from arachophobia...
i hoped Herc could had a happy ending.
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#4 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Fri Mar 25, 2016 7:08 pm

D8 Valoo! The spoiler isn't in the spoiler box! Quick, edit and hide it! (And glad you love the story! I MIGHT be adding more onto it and possibly add another cg, but it will still pretty much stay the same)

And thank you Pizza.

I've spotted a couple errors, so will be uploading a new build either today or tomorrow.
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#5 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Sat Mar 26, 2016 2:58 am

Update: After fixing a tiny amount of errors and making a few changes, I have now uploaded a new (better) build! I apologize to those who have already downloaded the first one. I'm sorry, I sorta rewrote the ending. (Thank Maelstrom-Fenrir, because of him, I MADE IT BETTAH.)

Anyway...Valoo you still need to hide spoiler! D8
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#6 Post by valoodx » Sat Mar 26, 2016 7:45 pm

sorry for that ...

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#7 Post by valoodx » Sat Mar 26, 2016 7:46 pm

but seariously that was the best visual novel story i ever had read

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#8 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Sat Mar 26, 2016 8:06 pm

Thanks for editing it! (And it's all right, you did try to put it in spoiler box earlier after all)

I can only wonder right now if those who had downloaded the first build, saw my post about the new build having a rewritten ending (It still ends the same way though, just added more...."substance"). Oh well, I won't force people to redownload again. (Since dropbox can take quite a while) And it IS a kn, not a vn.

Either way, I hope that both versions are enjoyed.
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#9 Post by Kayber » Mon Mar 28, 2016 2:54 pm

Great little story you had here! I enjoyed it. Nice job on this :) The head thing made me jump, hah.

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#10 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Mon Mar 28, 2016 4:33 pm

Yes, Jump Achievement attained! Glad you liked it! (Now if only I could stop finding out that I have missing words here and there, blargh.)
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#11 Post by Amiralo » Mon Mar 28, 2016 9:36 pm

best visual novel i have read this year. everything from the plot to the characterization was PERFECT. Expect fanart soon =v=
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#12 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Mon Mar 28, 2016 10:15 pm

Amiralo wrote:best visual novel i have read this year. everything from the plot to the characterization was PERFECT. Expect fanart soon =v=
You Amiralo have just attained the "Make Someone Do the Squee Face In Real Life".

I am so happeh right now I am not even kidding have all my internet cookies TAKE THEM DANG IT!

*looking forward to that fanart* Nyaaaaaa~ *has never gotten fanart before, thus the squee face*
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#13 Post by ebi-hime » Tue Mar 29, 2016 9:50 am

Herc the spider was particularly cute... His sprite is really adorable, haha XD; And I liked the sprite of Bernie on his back, too - and the fact
Bernie got a new sprite after her spider legs power up.
I think my favourite thing about this VN was the music. It set the tone really nicely, and lent itself well to the creepy atmosphere you were trying to establish. Also, the thing with the monster faces and the sound effects managed to make me jump, so that was done well XD
Oh, I liked the yes/no menu a lot as well. Putting the yes/no buttons in place of Bernie's eyes was a really nice idea. I didn't expect it, so it surprised me, haha XD
And the fact the buttons go red when you hover over them... Maybe linked the rather gruesome ending?
I liked the buttons that were used as sliders in the preferences menu, too. It was a good idea!

This was a nicely put together VN, and it was pretty atmospheric. Good job! n_n;
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#14 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Tue Mar 29, 2016 5:23 pm

ebi-hime wrote:Herc the spider was particularly cute... His sprite is really adorable, haha XD; And I liked the sprite of Bernie on his back, too - and the fact
Bernie got a new sprite after her spider legs power up.
I think my favourite thing about this VN was the music. It set the tone really nicely, and lent itself well to the creepy atmosphere you were trying to establish. Also, the thing with the monster faces and the sound effects managed to make me jump, so that was done well XD
Oh, I liked the yes/no menu a lot as well. Putting the yes/no buttons in place of Bernie's eyes was a really nice idea. I didn't expect it, so it surprised me, haha XD
And the fact the buttons go red when you hover over them... Maybe linked the rather gruesome ending?
I liked the buttons that were used as sliders in the preferences menu, too. It was a good idea!

This was a nicely put together VN, and it was pretty atmospheric. Good job! n_n;
*hears I made an adorable spider sprite, looks at said sprite, then at real tarantulas*...Yeah definitely easier on the eyes for people afraid of spiders such myself! (But not to the point of arachnophobia haha) It took me a while to figure out how to place her, I didn't want to make her too small, but not too big either. Poor Herc. XF
Hahaha, pretty much why I couldn't really post anymore of their sprites in my wip thread since it would spoil her power up via "Mario" style. Or should I say Popeye style?
Phew, was worried that the music wouldn't fit. It took me FOREVER to find some of them. And perfect. :twisted:
I wanted to keep the creep factor up as much as possible in all my menus, so why not provide some type of hint to the ending? *insert evil laughter please* :twisted:
*makes it rain buttons* Just like in that movie Coraline-wait it didn't rain buttons in there at all.

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#15 Post by Amiralo » Wed Mar 30, 2016 6:37 pm

the promised fanart. Hopefully it shows up. I drew bernie and herc as humans. Bernie would be childlike and proper, while herc would be an imtougherthanyoubutnotreally punk.

if it doesn't, you can view it here.

http://amiralo.deviantart.com/art/Fanar ... 1459377408

Hope you like it! and thank you for such an awesome visual novel!
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