The Dreamweaver [NaNoRenO 2016]

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The Dreamweaver [NaNoRenO 2016]

#1 Post by RumRat » Mon Mar 28, 2016 4:55 pm

"I am the Dreamweaver. It is my occupation, my title and my name."
"It is my very existence."
The Dreamweaver is a short kinetic novel featuring animated sprites and backgrounds. It is the first visual novel I've ever made so I hope you'll forgive me for it not being very polished.
Story
"A child's footsteps echo through the vast hallways of dreams."
Curious and playful, as only a child can be, the little girl ventures into a vast chamber, where she meets a man of smoke and stardust.
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Kali
A little girl with golden locks.
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The Dreamweaver
The one who weaves the silver threads of your subconscious mind.
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(sorry for the gif quality, actual bg quality is not diminished in the vn)
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Music by Alcaknight
Due to being busy and a nasty pc virus, the story had to be shortened and I couldn't do some art I had in mind for it, but hopefully some will still find it enjoyable. :D
Thanks to everyone on lemma for being awesome and supportive! :D
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#2 Post by ebi-hime » Tue Mar 29, 2016 10:45 am

Ooh, this was a really pretty VN. I loved the animated backgrounds, and that Kali had so many sprites to showcase her walking around, peering about corners, looking all curious... It added a lot of life to the VN, and was a really nice touch.
The design of the Dreamweaver was also really pretty - I love how elaborate his clothes are, and all the whites...
Actually, the aesthetic of the whole VN was very pretty. The whole thing felt very 'dream-like', which I guess fits the theme of the story perfectly? XD

I imagine the very cursive font would be a pain to read if the story was any longer, but since it was short and sweet, it wasn't a problem - and went well with the general atmosphere of the story.

Though it was short, I think there was some nice depth to the story:
the conversation about the importance of names was especially nice. Kali has some good characterisation - she's very believable for a young girl, and asks a lot of complex questions about the world in a very simple and innocent way. She contrasts nicely with the Dreamweaver, who seems more cynical (about the fact people don't often remember him/come back), so their interactions were interesting. It's nice to have characters who can play off each other like this.
The music, too, was really pretty - it suits the story well.

All in all, this was a really enjoyable experience. It's clear a lot of effort went into it, and I think you did a really good job! u///u
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#3 Post by RumRat » Wed Mar 30, 2016 8:56 pm

Hey, thanks a lot for the comment ebi-hime! :D
Originally, they were both supposed to have even more sprites, but I had to cut those, and some scenes out, since I shortened the story due to being too busy during March. XP

I was wondering about changing the font, but most of my friends I had test-play it said it wasn't too hard to read so I decided to leave it, since it fit the mood I was going for.

Regarding Kali being believable, I have a 6-year old sister, so that probably contributed some to writing her personality. though she's a lot brattier than Kali XD

Thank you again, I'm really glad you liked it. :)
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#4 Post by minyan » Thu Apr 07, 2016 10:08 pm

I commented on itch.io but Imma post it here too ^^

Can I just say I love the music... and the backgrounds (those candelabras omg -drools- ...ahem). The atmosphere was really lovely. His- his spinning wheel and- and his outfit and... I'm really geeking out over the art... you're so talented. My one complaint was the bolded font on the names- it didn't quite fit with the rest, but... I'm really just nitpicking now xD The font was also a bit hard to read at times, but it was so pretty and fit so well I wouldn't say change it.

Kali's poses were adorable, and the whole thing was just very sweet. Great job!
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#5 Post by Kumiho » Fri Apr 08, 2016 12:12 am

Oh gosh, this was so amazing ;u; Please have REALLY BAD fanart ;u; I'd draw something digitally but I can't find my tablet pen OTL

I was amazed by how many variations of sprite positions/sizes there were, and I really love how you had more than the typical "NVL/ADV" styles of display. Your art quality was of course pro as well! Everything felt super polished and, well, surreal. <3 The writing was definitely my favorite part of the VN, though 8') Everything felt so poignant, and I especially loved the bits about names & about the value of knots in dreams... or, actually, I pretty much loved the whole thing. Congrats on making this VN, and I'm seriously so impressed by the quality I don't even-

I almost want to ask for a sequel, but at the same time, I feel like it's more than beautiful enough as it is... ;u; Conflicts, man.

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#6 Post by RumRat » Sun Apr 10, 2016 3:10 pm

Thank you so much for the comments! :D

minyan- (replied on itch, but I'll paste it here too) Thanks a lot, I'm glad you liked it. And the font, god, I know, it was either leave it this way and have it fit perfectly but be a bit difficult, or change it to Georgia, which would've made it easy to read, but take a lot out of the feel. After some friends insisting this was better though, I've decided to leave it, hope it wasn't too much of a bother. :"D

and Kumiho- as I said, the fanart is adorable, thank you so much, you're wonderful. <3 <3 <3
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#7 Post by maria-chaaan » Thu Apr 14, 2016 11:12 pm

Hi~! I played/read your VN and it is really gorgeous... quite dreamy to say the least. If you were aiming for a dreamy vibes, you achieved it so easily. I also like both of your characters. The girl is quite a delight with her intelligent questions and innocent remarks. She is just awesome. The Dreamweaver is also a splendid character, kind yet mysterious. I am also happy that he got a friend through Kali, I just hope she finds her way back. Me? I rarely find my way back to the dreams that I like the most. I hope she won't get lost so the Dreamweaver would be happy, too. I felt sad when he said, the most dreamers are not able to find their way back. Made me want to sleep and dream right at the moment I finished the VN... It's gorgeous~! Please keep it up! :3

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#8 Post by RumRat » Sat Apr 16, 2016 6:06 pm

Thank you, I'm really glad you liked it, it's great to know that you liked the characters and that you could feel for them. :D
And I will, thanks, you can definitely look forward to more contributions from me to the visual novel world. :)
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#9 Post by RumRat » Thu May 05, 2016 5:55 pm

'AreYouGaming' did a youtube playthrough video, you can watch it here: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=2zMwYJg7WRk

And I had to do a quick sketch in regards to his 'glocks' joke XD

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#10 Post by ALCOR_etc » Sun May 15, 2016 5:37 am

Just played this, and I loved it. All the assets are very pretty and dreamlike, and I especially appreciated how lively Kali's sprites look--her peering into corners, her poses when talking to the Dreamweaver--and how lovely the animated backgrounds are. It's such a short and sweet story; thank you so much for creating and sharing it!

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#11 Post by RumRat » Wed May 25, 2016 4:54 am

No, thank you for playing it. :D
The backgrounds were a hassle to make, and I'm still pretty insecure with my skill in that department, so I'm glad people seem to be liking them. :)
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#12 Post by SeaOtter » Thu May 26, 2016 8:06 pm

I very much enjoyed this. Very very much. I think you know how awesome you did so I won't bother with going over the details. The art, the music, the dialogue-- all very fitting for the story. Some may say the characters and the ideas are not fleshed out-- that they are archetypes-- but that makes it so that we are not distracted by them and so that we can focus on the overall theme: dreams and imagination. Because you focused on one particular point, the story flowed along very naturally and concisely to its end.

I don't want to rush you but I would very much enjoy another work by you-- perhaps longer and more fleshed out. I understand that making games is arduous but you certainly have the talent for it.

That's all I really have to say. Thank you for the experience.

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#13 Post by philip » Thu Aug 09, 2018 5:38 pm

@RumRat-

Very nice! The art is attractive and ethereal . . . . even though it is not a long story it's very well done and worth seeing . . . and reading.

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