1) I played it because it is my duty as a programmer (and I actually get SEG faults, "new" and "delete" is pure evil)
2) The earliest ending where I meet Aurora and follow her. Then the one with Valentine ending the game.
3) The characters are too bland and their introductions are too quick. Its random in a bad way, not the FLCL way sadly. Its overall RAW!!
4)
Congratz on completing it but..
Its RAW, its so under-cooked!
Writing:
Why.. Why on earth are you using wikipedia to explain the plot of your VN? Thats mental.
You should tell me what a segment fault is because you know what it is don't you? Not wikipedia. This isn't your grade school assignment so stop using the wiki or at best quote a famous scientist.
Or even better try and make one yourself it isn't that hard, that is if you programmed anything that compiles, once you do that you will get a little more insight on how to push that into your story.
And what on earth does this mean?!
"But which smart when they are touched"
What?! Maybe I am just too thick to understand it but it sure is some abstract art to me.
Oh and there is an ALSO in the first few sentences... twice!
"The man besides us also"
What do you mean also... was there a man before? The meaning of the sentence is edited into oblivion! And its the first sentence..
For the love of god please don't use the User name of the PC as your mc's name unless you want them to read
"moms-pc-kitchen2000/Paul"
Sound:
It was painful to listen to, not only did it not fit the theme very well but it made my ears bleed a little, perhaps tone down a little on the piano otherwise most will probably just turn it off.
It didn't fit the cyberpunk style at all if thats what you were going for.
This is what cyberpunk sounds like:
https://youtu.be/u0ow4tGgZWk
Graphics:
First off why did you take Linux mint of all distros.. It doesn't even look that cool. You had the chance to design the look of your own operating system but u went with the most windows like linux ever that most newbies use.. and instead of giving a cool vibe you made me chuckle a little bit.
I found that Jane's skin looked more like burnt bits of wood that you find at the end of a long winter in a wooden cabin, maybe make it look more human and brown rather than charcoal black.
User experience:
Terminal pop ups are always scary but some people don't have a mic/cam and so on so unless you don't care about immersion you should really address this.
The terminal just disappears without letting me read any text.. type something out and grab a buffer while you are at it:
[The extension exe has been deactivated and can no longer be displayed.]
Your CPU has elements of german in it.. those who won the war might not appreciate this.
colors are way off.
Why is the unselected GREEN but selected GRAY.
Final thoughts:
Not only that
it's RAW! It has an inconsistent style, the backgrounds don't match the character sprites and the music doesn't match what the story is trying to say!
I didn't get the cyberpunk vibes either it sounds more like a sloppy sudo-romance series with unrelatable characters. But of-course thats what I got from two bad ends and I probably didn't see the "Good" parts of the game.
However I didn't want to. Why? Because once I made my choices I felt that the other choices where not representative of Me and so I felt that the writer is forcing me to chose things he wants me to do removing my choice entirely and removing me from the equation.
After note
It was quite rough and you probably feel down right now but don't MIA now. Quality comes from the Quantity mainly because of experience. This is your first game and quite frankly its shit but thats okay you will get better the more you do but if you stop now u will be shit forever.