Hi KrystalFlare!KrystalFlare wrote:Darling, let me begin by hugging you until you can't breathe anymore (I really would, if you were in front of me )! This game is AMAZING!!! It's fantastic and wonderful and... I'm still screaming internally. I love EVERYTHING about this game... story, art, music... oh, where do I even begin? But yes, I'll try to give you as detailed of a review as I can, and at the end I'll answer your little questionnaire (if I don't somehow do that throughout my review) This is gonna be a long one, so make yourself comfortable. Okay, comfy? Here we go!
Story:
Now this is the main reason I play VNs and I have a few years under my belt of dabbling in fanfiction and original fiction, so I'm usually very picky about which VNs are worth me spending a full day or more to play through. But yours tickled my fancy from the moment I first saw it, because I've always been interested in myths and ancient cultures. Sadly I couldn't play the first version you made, mostly because I'm not a spastic saver when I play games so I probably would've ended up frustrated beyond belief if the game started crashing on me and I kept losing progress. So I had to wait for the Ren'Py version, but the wait was definitely worth it!
I don't think I've ever had the chance to delve too deeply into myths and stories from that part of the world, other than Japanese ones. The most I knew of Indonesia were a few documentaries I watched about Komodo Dragons and other wildlife on those islands. So your story had me very highly interested even before I had the possibility of actually playing the game.
And then I downloaded the Ren'Py version and started a playthrough and I was so utterly sucked into the world you created that I never wanted to leave again. I did play the guys' routes in the order you suggested - Mitra, Rama and finally Reksa - and the story just flowed so well in that order, it made so much sense and it was like I was discovering a new, unexplored part of the island with each new route. I guess I wouldn't have gotten such a sense of continuous flow, if I'd played Reksa first (as I wanted to, since I first laid eyes on your gorgeous art ). But I'm so glad I took your advice and played them in the correct order.
And yes, we've all seen the "war" thing being used in various ways in VNs over the years, but yours was set in a world where it just fit so naturally with the characters' way of life and their mentality. I was a bit afraid that it would feel forced, or that it would be used as just an excuse for the MC and her "chosen one" to bond and blah blah... However, I was thoroughly caught off guard when I realized you didn't shy away from the brutality and horror of war. Because yes, war is so much more than just a couple of random fights set against a narrated background of a "bigger battle". I loved how personal this war was for each and every one of the characters, and that it wasn't just about the MC and her chosen bachelor; it was about everyone and even the supporting cast got their moments under the spotlight. That was a very pleasant surprise, because it's something I've rarely seen in VNs that include battles/war scenes.
My only tiny gripe (and this is only because I'm a grammar nazi ) is that there are quite a few grammar mistakes here and there, along with a few spelling ones. Fortunately your story overall was so good and the characters so well written, that those mistakes didn't manage to pull me out of it. I was so utterly invested in the characters by the time Chapter II rolled by, that I barely even offered a second of attention to any mistakes I encountered. But as I said, me being the grammar-obsessed freak that I am, I couldn't help but notice them - as I said, it's only a tiny gripe and quite honestly the only one I have with this game; which is weird, because I always find at least a few details I can nitpick about
With that being said, here are my thoughts on the characters... I might put that in spoilers, because I'll probably start rambling about each of them and I don't want to accidentally spoil things for people who have yet to play the game
Characters:
Tamara:Usually I don't comment at all on the MC of a VN because more often than not I feel they're either too generic, or they get on my nerves way too much for me to say anything nice about them. Tamara, however, was a very pleasant surprise because she was so... normal. Yes, she had her silly/stupid moments when I wanted to punch her in the face, but who doesn't have those? What really drew me to her was that most of her behavior was how I imagine any normal and sane person would react in the situations she was put in. She wasn't over the top just for the sake of it, she wasn't annoying and she had that perfect mix of damsel-in-distress and badass-heroine. I don't know how it happened, but darling you did it! You wrote an MC that is completely relatable and likeable!Mitra:Now Mitra - while sadly not my favorite of the bachelors - was like a breath of fresh air for me. It feels like it's been forever since the last time I saw a family-oriented guy in a VN. I may be biased, because I'm very family-oriented as well, but I love Mitra to bits. And I've always enjoyed seeing large guys with very soft and caring personalities, so that was another plus for me. His relationship with the triplets was beyond adorable and every time I saw them together my mind could only focus on one thought: "You're going to be a wonderful father!" That said, I had hoped to see a Mitra jr. in the bonus scene - at least in her belly, if not in her arms. But hey, there's always room for a sequel~Rama:Now Rama isn't exactly my type of guy, so I couldn't get too attached to him at all. Yes he was funny and made me chuckle more than once, and his story arc was really well written. But he just didn't appeal to me personally. That's not a bad thing, I'm sure there are plenty of people who love him as much as I love Mitra or Reksa. So that's not me saying that his route was bad, heaven knows it was very well done; but I loved his bad ending probably more than his good ending, because that was just such a well described descent into insanity.Reksa:And we finally get to my favorite bachelor, the short-tempered Komodo. I don't even know where to start with Reksa... he's adorable and cute and funny and HOT goddamnit! Now, while I said I like big-framed guys with gentle demeanors, I absolutely ADORE the lithe, panther-like type. And Reksa was always just that perfect combination of wild and submissive, gentle and rough. And I'm sure a lot of other girls giggled uncontrollably that his weapon is a whip, because we're all pervy like that As I'm sure many others were tickled to death by his possessive and dominating demeanor - there are VERY few women out there who can say they didn't at least once dream that a guy would just dominate them through and through. And by God, Reksa hit that nail on the head and delivered with a vengeance! I was so eager for the scene in his bedroom to go further than it did, and his bonus scene was perfect but again I had hoped it would go a bit further - but that's just the perv in me talking, so don't mind thatPurba:
But his story arc was by far the one that hit me the deepest, and his death (on the route for his good end) was the one moment in the game that made me cry. And that's saying a lot, because usually I don't cry at VNs, there's just something that keeps me from doing it as I would for a movie. So when a VN is actually good enough to draw tears from me, that is some VERY high quality, compelling writing. My only wish is that there would have been a CG for that moment, like you had for Rama for example. It probably would have shattered my heart to bits to actually see him lying on the ground dead, but it would have made for a much stronger emotional impact and I would have probably started sobbing. Bottom line is, I would adore having a sequel for Reksa alone... I can safely say he was my most favorite character out of the entire cast.Surprised that I would comment on the "bad guy"? Well, too bad, because you wrote one heck of a good villain! Throughout Mitra's and Rama's routes I was a bit disappointed in him because his reasoning seemed so shallow. But then I played Reksa's route and as I suspected, the story shifted quite a bit from the Komodo's point of view... and I discovered a really good, unexpected back story to Purba - what with his father being the previous Chief. It made me see him in a different - much better - light than before, because now his actions actually carried emotional weight and allowed me to get attached to him as a character. And I certainly didn't expect him to be THAT ruthless... his fight with Reksa was simply painful to go through but I do love a well written villain, that's what every story like this needs.Supporting cast:Again, I don't usually comment on the supporting cast either, because they're usually there just for the sake of it and I don't have the chance to get emotionally attached to them. But good heavens, I loved EVERYONE on the supporting cast. Yuda and Asih were such a perfect match, that I loved them as much as I envied them for having such a wonderful relationship. Yuda was the kind of brother I would probably wrestle with on a daily basis, and then cuddle the heck out of him just for the fun of annoying him Asih was an angel... I would pay anything to have a sister like her in real life. Granny Sukma was everything I wanted from a grandmother-figure who also has to be a leader not just for her family, but for her entire community. And I'm still left wondering if back in her day she maybe had some... special feelings for Silva On that note, I would love to learn more of Silva's back story - I know you gave some more details on Reksa's route, but I would love a story arc for him alone, maybe as a flashback to his life back when his wife was alive and maybe some bits of Reksa's childhood after her death and how he and his father interacted. And oh gosh, those triplets... they were just the cutest things EVER! Their interactions with Mitra and then Reksa were heart-melting, and Puspa's crush on Mitra reminded me SO much of my childhood that I couldn't stop giggling like an idiot.Art:
Oh gosh, where do I begin? The artwork was simply gorgeous, and painfully beautiful to look at. Now I said Rama wasn't my kind of guy, butthe CG where he's crying and Tamara is holding him was so, SO beautiful. It just conveyed such closeness and care and gentleness and sorrow that I could stare at it for hours without getting bored. Definitely my most favorite moment of his routeThe other characters were so beautifully drawn as well and I loved the attention to detail that went into each character and background image.
Music/Sound:
Perfect! That's the only word needed to describe the mixture of music and SFX in the game. Even now I have the game open on the main screen because I can't get enough of that song. The SFX was a very welcome addition, because it helped me get SO invested and involved in the scenes - especially the very intense ones likeReksa's fight with Purba. By God, I was on the edge of my seat throughout that sceneI would LOVE a music room in the game, or some website where I could listen to the entire soundtrack. It's so beautiful in its apparent simplicity and each melodic track was such a good fit for the scenes it was used in.
So to conclude... well not sure what else I could say about the game itself, and I've already answered most of your questions in my review. So I'll just wish you all the very best for any future projects. I cannot wait to see more from you, you're insanely talented. I'll still say that I hope someday you'll find inspiration for a sequel to Nusantara, I would be all over it the moment you'd release it! Sadly my current financial situation doesn't allow me to support you in that way, as much as I wish I could But I would very happily help in any other way I can - whether you need a grammar nazi, or just another friend. I know how the process of creation can sometimes weigh someone down, and I've learned from my own experience that more often than not just one kind word can mean the world.
But I've rambled on quite enough, and I apologize for this overly long review; I just wanted to offer as much feedback as possible. May your muse always grace you with inspiration, darling! <3
Thanks for coming and reviewing! Your essay and praise blew me away -you give me too much credits, my artist ego is going to combust >////<
1. I don't know where to begin... but I can say that I also read many fanfics & fictions on fanfiction.com/fictionpress/wattpad so they might be helping me to learn how to write a good story :'3
I'm very happy to hear that the wait is worth it for you <3 It was definitely a challenge for me to learn Ren'Py quickly; but I feel it's worth it so more people can read my VN leisurely :'D
And yup, since not many people know about Indonesia, I'll take this as a chance to slowly introduce them to you :3
In the future, I will implement more Indonesian Culture; but it doesn't mean I will stop there. Myths has a worldwide list and I hope I can implement some of them x'D like, can I implement a pegasus somewhere? Lamias, Harpies, Dragons, Elfs are fascinating myths so I hope I can implement them in my future projects too *sigh*
and lololol, I agree that sometimes it's hard to find otome games that has a good quality of politics/war-elements. Users can sometimes forgot about the real situation when they got too immersed 'bonding' with the bachelors x'D
I, myself, still have so many things to learn and there are rooms for improvements; I'll do my best to meet your expectations my lovely reader! >:'3
and hahahahah, I aware of the fact that my grammar is... x'DD
I think it's because I read it so many times already that my senses became dull OTL
Do you have a facebook account? if yes, PM me your email/FB name so I can add you and then, we can discuss about your offer to proofread ^o^ I plan to use docs google drive so... around 3 people will have access to the script so they can 'fix' and complete each other's proofreading? Tell me what you think about it
As for the characters...
I am BLOWN away by how much you love all the characters! They're like my children; and seeing how much passion you put into analyzing and understanding each character is like a heavenly treat for me :"D
Thank you for giving all of them a chance! I have no words to describe how grateful and satisfied I am with your review about each character!
*Hugs*
About my Art...
Thank you very much!
I'm aware that some background/sprite can sometimes be a little too dark to see some details (like Asih's hair) or a little too bright that it can hurt your eye? (like the afternoon version probably? x'DD) It seems my old laptop's saturation is a little messed up (my VAIO laptop decrease saturation and increase brightness). In my new laptop, I'm surprised how much the color changes!
I will look into quality control and make more better art next time! Just wait and see! >:D
Thanks again and see you around!
xoxo,
SweetChiel