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PostPosted: Mon Jun 05, 2017 3:32 am 
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Deviantart: Reiirin
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!Please note that this visual novel contains depictions of violence, murder, abuse, suicide and other sensitive topics.
Reader discretion is advised. By downloading the files you agree that you are prepared to, and fit to, view such content!


Itch.io:
https://reiirin.itch.io/beneath-a-broken-mirror

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Windows and Linux: https://www.dropbox.com/s/hs1hsqv5vjf0t ... c.zip?dl=0
Mac: https://www.dropbox.com/s/gd4fvmfdqbpw6 ... c.zip?dl=0


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PostPosted: Mon Jun 05, 2017 3:54 am 
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This looks really interesting! I'll definitely give it a try later!

I'm curious as to how the story will unfold, and differently with each perspective. All the best for you! Judging from the screenshots, the art looks splendid as well.


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PostPosted: Mon Jun 05, 2017 5:43 am 
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Wow, it's long! Why is it free??

I love whoddonit stories, so I'll definitely read this one. But you should at least upload it to itch.io, even if it's for free.

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PostPosted: Mon Jun 05, 2017 6:08 am 
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@hyesunxoxo: Glad to hear you're interested. I've put effort into making the story line for each perspective feel distinct. I hope you'll find the read enjoyable!

@Ertal77: I've chosen to make the visual novel available for free because it's a a story I wanted to tell and isn't made with any specific target audience in mind. I also felt that selling it would put obligations on me that I don't have the capacity to handle at present. However, I may check out itch.io.


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PostPosted: Tue Jun 13, 2017 7:52 pm 
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I have no idea if I'm going to have time to commit to 150k words anytime soon, but damn does this look cool. Here's hoping I'll find the time. c:

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PostPosted: Sat Jun 17, 2017 4:46 pm 
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hello! i just played Beneath A Broken Mirror 1.1.

VERY GOOD WORK! i have played about 20 renpy games, and this is the best of them (alongside hierofania 1 and 2)! it is amazing how there are not more comments on it?

plot:
* it is awkward how rarely Henriette is mentioned, or how in the ending scenes noone suggests that she might be lying. any genre-savvy player would be made immediately suspicious of her by that
* whats more, once the player has completed one of the 4 routes, it is clear already that Henriette is the murderer - so when the player plays the other 3 routes, the tension is low
* feels odd that inheritance is not mentioned in most epilogues, although it should be important
* i very much liked how Charlotte was the only one of the 4 siblings whose route does not end in a person wrongly sent to prison. it felt like a good moral, that Charlotte may have been less bright than the other siblings, but her judgement was ultimately better.
* satisfied an Umineko itch


art:
* sprite and background style matched very well!
* Katherine is very thin in splash images and text descriptions, but she (or at least her arm) is thicker on the sprite


misc:
* in the main menu, the final arc is called "bonus arc", which is an unfortunate name - "bonus" suggests that it is not part of the main story, whereas here the "bonus arc" is actually the most important part of the main story.
* differently colored names might have worked well?
* Charlotte and Katherine are a bit too similar names - starting with "c"/"k", similar length, ending in "e"


typos:
* "No, that I wouldn't put past even you" - the expression means the opposite of what it is probably intended to mean here
* "commment" written with 3 m's


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PostPosted: Sat Jun 24, 2017 5:15 pm 
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@Zelan: Thank you! Let's hope some spare time pops up. ;)

@andalusian: Thank you very much, hearing that means a lot to me! I appreciate your feedback as well, and will be taking it into account if applicable for future projects. Thanks for pointing out the typos, I've now made a new build and fixed them (along with adding in one new CG, because why not).

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