*pounces on chance to post after teh Drake*
Here's a little something from my sketchbook
(also done in crayons)
Hehe! I had to guess at the footwear. I hope my fashion sense isn't too lacking.
... poor Jonathan.
JK. Haha!
I have to say, this was a most inspiring piece. I didn't expect it be that way since I initially didn't care much for the characters and setting. I like stories with a little bit of fantasy in them, but then, the elements of the VN just mesh so well together that I found myself paying more and more attention to the story as I went on.
Once I'd subconsciously accepted that the on-screen drawings were mere representations of the actual characters, the story just gradually drew me in and in the end, it turned out to be a nice slice-of-life deviation from the usual VN fare.
I like the little transitions and the change from crayons to pencils on-screen as the story progressed in the same direction. It was a great way to emphasize that the transition was more than just a physical one.
I love the use of the theme of being true to yourself and not letting others walk all over you, which was prevalent throughout the different parts of the story. The sequence of events was a bit predictable, admittedly, but it didn't in any way keep it from being an uplifting read.
I also like your literary style; simple but effective just like the entirety of this VN. I know someone who'd call it an "unpretentious" style >). (you know who you are)
Lastly, I like how you played up your strengths as a creator. Using a fully customized interface (since you can program well) and simple, (not exactly pretty) but effective drawings along with appropriately filtered backgrounds; making it clear that the text should be the main focus of the player. You have excellent design sense and it shows in how well the different elements of this VN go together.
Like I said, this was a most inspiring piece for me. It just helped me make a pivotal choice regarding a future endeavor.
This is an excellent VN. Thank you for sharing. (Oh, and I just love melodrama
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