Vincit, a faceless rest [Free] [Short, Experimental, Friendship] [FR, ENG]

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Vincit, a faceless rest [Free] [Short, Experimental, Friendship] [FR, ENG]

#1 Post by Nighten » Thu May 10, 2018 3:20 pm

Bonjour!
I'm Nighten, a French and hairy creature. I'm proud to present you my first and fully completed Visual Novel: Vincit!
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Vincit is a short Visual Novel about the friendship between two convalescents. It's mean to be abstract and experimental, but the story doesn't put the reader aside; It's easy to understand!
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I made it in one week on my free time, but it takes me a long time to translate it into English. Thanks to AntiquedFae, the translation quality have highly increased; I hope you'll enjoy the work she has put in!

You can download it for free on Itch for Windows, Mac and Linux.
-Game time: 10 to 15 minutes
-1 route and 3 different ending

The download also include all the source files, which you can freely use for inspiration or placeholder for your project.
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If you have any comments or critics to make, please do! It's will help me a lot to do better next time.

Have a good day fellows developers!
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Re: Vincit, a faceless rest [Free] [Short, Experimental, Friendship] [FR, ENG]

#2 Post by Zelan » Thu May 24, 2018 12:36 pm

I like the watercolor art! It's an uncommon style for a VN but I thought it was pretty and fit your story well. c:

I played all three endings. They were very simple, but I liked how they all ended hopefully, and I'm glad the two characters always had each other to lean on.

There were a few grammatical errors in the English translation (one that really stood out was "Everyone have" which should be "Everyone has") but there weren't very many of them and the story was still understandable. You and AntiquatedFae did a wonderful job on the translation. c: I look forward to seeing more work from you!

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#3 Post by AntiquedFae » Sun May 27, 2018 12:40 pm

Zelan wrote:
Thu May 24, 2018 12:36 pm
There were a few grammatical errors in the English translation (one that really stood out was "Everyone have" which should be "Everyone has") but there weren't very many of them and the story was still understandable.
UGH. There is something, always there is something! Why can I not make a perfect script, just once? OTL

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Thu May 24, 2018 12:36 pm
You and AntiquatedFae did a wonderful job on the translation. c:
Thank you so much for enjoying it despite my errors. ;.; That's really sweet of you.
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#4 Post by Zelan » Sun May 27, 2018 1:36 pm

AntiquedFae wrote:
Sun May 27, 2018 12:40 pm
UGH. There is something, always there is something! Why can I not make a perfect script, just once? OTL
Haha, I know the feeling. It's our eternal curse *_*

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#5 Post by AntiquedFae » Sun May 27, 2018 5:42 pm

Zelan wrote:
Sun May 27, 2018 1:36 pm
Haha, I know the feeling. It's our eternal curse *_*
Yep. D:
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#6 Post by Helen » Mon May 28, 2018 2:34 pm

Salut Nighten ! J'ai passé un moment agréable devant ton jeu. À la fois inquiétant car on espère que les personnages vont s'en sortir, et à la fois calme et reposant, avec tout ce blanc. On se demande d'ailleurs si c'est un rêve, ou le paradis, ce qui se rapproche du thème de ton histoire.
Elle m'a plu car elle est courte et elle paraît vraie, vécue. Elle m'a également plu car tu m'as montré qu'on peut raconter une belle histoire avec de simples images. J'ai un combat intérieur face à tous ces bons dessinateurs que j'envie, et j'ai à tout prix envie de faire quelque chose de détaillé pour que mon travail paraisse plus professionnel. Mais non, je ne suis pas obligée de me mettre la pression et de détailler à tout prix.
Faire à sa manière est la meilleure des choses :)
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Re: Vincit, a faceless rest [Free] [Short, Experimental, Friendship] [FR, ENG]

#7 Post by Nighten » Mon May 28, 2018 6:17 pm

First, thank you both so much for your nice feedback on my little game. It’s really mean a lot to me, seen your comment make me breathless (literally). I take good note of your opinion to make my next project better.
Zelan wrote:
Thu May 24, 2018 12:36 pm
I like the watercolor art! It's an uncommon style for a VN but I thought it was pretty and fit your story well. c:

I played all three endings. They were very simple, but I liked how they all ended hopefully, and I'm glad the two characters always had each other to lean on.

There were a few grammatical errors in the English translation (one that really stood out was "Everyone have" which should be "Everyone has") but there weren't very many of them and the story was still understandable. You and AntiquatedFae did a wonderful job on the translation. c: I look forward to seeing more work from you!
As for the grammatical errors, thanks @Zelan to point one of them ; I will correct it in a next update (with some other improvements, I think to add an Android build for example).
Thanks again for your sweet encouragement! c:
Helen wrote:
Mon May 28, 2018 2:34 pm
Salut Nighten ! J'ai passé un moment agréable devant ton jeu. À la fois inquiétant car on espère que les personnages vont s'en sortir, et à la fois calme et reposant, avec tout ce blanc. On se demande d'ailleurs si c'est un rêve, ou le paradis, ce qui se rapproche du thème de ton histoire.
Elle m'a plu car elle est courte et elle paraît vraie, vécue. Elle m'a également plu car tu m'as montré qu'on peut raconter une belle histoire avec de simples images. J'ai un combat intérieur face à tous ces bons dessinateurs que j'envie, et j'ai à tout prix envie de faire quelque chose de détaillé pour que mon travail paraisse plus professionnel. Mais non, je ne suis pas obligée de me mettre la pression et de détailler à tout prix.
Faire à sa manière est la meilleure des choses :)
Merci @Helen! You totally get the point of Vincit, you can’t imagine how it’s make me happy. I send you a pm so we can discuss a little more, you know, in our native language!
And by the way, don’t forget that a lot of peoples can’t read french here; It would be nice to include them in the conversation by translating your message (I know it’s a lot of work when you are not so comfortable with English, but I just remind the forum rule!).

Amour! :D
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