Oh, it's kinetic? I was wondering why there were no branches...
The barista you meet at the Mutual Bean coffeeshop... I thought it was a girl, LOL... I still can't get over the fact that all you see is Mel, it makes it really difficult to tell who is talking for those used to customized character portraits...
That
brb
thing was pretty funny, I had to read it again to make sure! And...
the almost phobic attitude surprised me too... I'm guessing the barista is as gay as the grass is green, but... I wasn't expecting someone to say something like "No matter how much you compliment my hair, I won't blow you!" that's for sure. It's a pretty ridiculous thing to say, I would have just turned around and left... also, working at a pretentious bullshit hipster coffee place gives you an interest in hybrid cars and Macintoshes.
Lloyd was cute...
Standing by my initial impression that his friend and his roommate are utter assholes... they are when they kick him out. I'm confused by what happened, is it Saturday or something? It wasn't very well explained. Mel also says manipulation is his strong point, but the only side of him we've seen is awkward and usually can't manipulate people at all...
I'm being told one thing but shown another.
Josh was the first clue into that side of Mel, I think... and the
man-whore comment
was pretty hilarious. Actually, so is their coffee addiction and weird schedules. They're strangely appropriate.
Even though I'm probably in your target audience, I really don't like your characters or your story right now. I find a "player" seducing a young, naive target to be rather disgusting behavior, actually. And the song playing when they have sex didn't fix the mood.
I like the little brother better than Mel... I'd rather be playing the game from his point of view, I think. Unfortunately, I can already see where this "where am I going to stay?" thing is going from a mile away. Aw, man, I wish we had choices. Fuck Josh, I'd rather be hanging out with Lloyd, even though his character is horribly underdeveloped, like most of them.
Also, on the coffee shop background, it's hard to read Mel's name.
At least me and Kevin agree on one thing... even if I do still think he's an utter irredeemable asshole. And Hawk and Harris are mind-numbingly boring to me...
Wow! Animated rain! LOL. I wasn't expecting that.
Wasn't expecting any MelxKevin moments either, but it was strangely erotic, in retrospect. And Mel is bothered by Kevin being with his brother after sleeping with him? That's so... shallow. And once again, I'm left with the impression that Cory is also an asshole but now I think he's just a foil for Kevin, the ragefuck. I guess that makes Josh the pityfuck.
The music getting louder as you approach the stage was a nice touch. What kind of goodbye is "I have to piss"? Damn. You know, even if you don't show it, this work is very adult... and only immature with the way it develops relationships. I think the Hentai forum may have been a better resting place for this game, in the end.
Having a denouement was nice, but it didn't really completely do it for the me. The ending was definitely the high note. All in all, it took me about an hour and ten minutes to play through, but I'm a slow player. Anyway, you obviously put a lot of hard work into it, so congratulations on finishing this and to your future growth as an artist, coder and a writer.