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One Afternoon

Posted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 4:29 pm
by ForgottenVision
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Luna is an ordinary High School girl on a day out shopping with her best friends. What could possibly go wrong?

This is a small Visual Novel and my first publicly released one. It's also my first attempt at creating a VN with different endings. It's more of a little project to practice writing my own VN since the When Sapphires Cry series has already been scripted (it's based off a Role Play between me and a friend).

It's rather small with 3731 words and 4 endings. You'll find that more often than not it's not the most happy ending.

Credits
Racheya/ForgottenVision - Scripting & Programming
Joseph - Testing

Character Art - Deji's Celeste Doll
BGM - SAM Music
Backgrounds - Samu-kun

Screenshots
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Constructive criticism ect is welcomed and I hope that I can improve from this :)

Re: One Afternoon

Posted: Thu Jun 17, 2010 2:07 am
by wayouthere
I just played the game it was great I got all 4 endings but the only thing I didn't like was that Luna couldn't get the boy and was always hurting or what happens in the 4th ending and maybe make it a little longer or a sequal. Great work 4/5 stars !!!!!!!!!!!!! :D :D :D :D

Re: One Afternoon

Posted: Thu Jun 17, 2010 4:35 am
by ForgottenVision
Thank you for your lovely comments! ^_^ I was considering having more 'happy' endings, but the whole premise behind the VN was that there wasn't really going to be much of a happy ending.

Re: One Afternoon

Posted: Thu Jun 17, 2010 7:34 am
by Nyu
Waaa~ This looks fun! I should try it ^^

Re: One Afternoon

Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2011 11:31 am
by Arkon
Graphic, music +++
Story ----
It was well done (technicaly), but the story itself was bit lame... I mean, this game could be longer, with better described plot. And these "dramatic" endings...