1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love (Taken down.)

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1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love (Taken down.)

#1 Post by Nyu » Wed Jun 16, 2010 3:29 am

I'll bring this game down. Thanks for playing it, everyone!
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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#2 Post by azureXtwilight » Wed Jun 16, 2010 3:31 am

Two otomes in one day!

*hugs you*

I will play your beautiful game soon! (Will beg for father's laptop)
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#3 Post by Zumi » Wed Jun 16, 2010 4:51 am

Will download and play it later! :D

(I was actually waiting for this too... >u>)

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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#4 Post by Angelique » Wed Jun 16, 2010 7:28 am

I like your game, it's lovely. <3
But I got an error while reaching the end of Long's path. @_@
I'm sorry, but an exception occured while executing your Ren'Py
script.

IOError: Couldn't find file 'basketballstage.jpg'.

While running game code:
- script call at line 163 of C:\Documents and Settings\welcome\Desktop\Folder\renpy-6.10.2\Teenstory/game/main.rpy
- script call at line 297 of C:\Documents and Settings\welcome\Desktop\Folder\renpy-6.10.2\dse/game/event_dispatcher.rpy
- script at line 1192 of C:\Documents and Settings\welcome\Desktop\Folder\renpy-6.10.2\Teenstory/game/events.rpy
Edit: And Quang's path. xD'
I'm sorry, but an exception occured while executing your Ren'Py
script.

IOError: Couldn't find file '0 - Concert 2.jpg'.

While running game code:
- script call at line 123 of C:\Documents and Settings\welcome\Desktop\Folder\renpy-6.10.2\Teenstory/game/main.rpy
- script call at line 297 of C:\Documents and Settings\welcome\Desktop\Folder\renpy-6.10.2\dse/game/event_dispatcher.rpy
- script at line 2128 of C:\Documents and Settings\welcome\Desktop\Folder\renpy-6.10.2\Teenstory/game/events.rpy
Trung's path worked fine and was really cute. <3

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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#5 Post by Nyu » Wed Jun 16, 2010 8:48 am

Thanks so much for playing everyone ^ ^ I'm happy!

Special thanks to Angelique for telling about the mistakes, I've just correct them all and posted the new download link! Thanks so much!

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#6 Post by Riviera » Wed Jun 16, 2010 2:46 pm

So pretty! I'll definitely have to try this later today :D
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#7 Post by Yunome » Thu Jun 17, 2010 8:11 pm

This looks like a great game! just downloaded and can't wait to play it!
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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#8 Post by Starling » Thu Jun 17, 2010 8:33 pm

Played~ I love the interface, and the backgrounds really match the artwork(I loved the style you filtered them in). The artwork was also quite cute :D

I wish the storyline was a bit deeper and well rounded, but it is very adorable and I enjoyed it.

About the English mistakes, it's not really your fault, but they were slightly distracting. I bet that if you ask someone just to look over it they can help you out with that though so that you don't have to worry about that in the future :D
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#9 Post by victorita9 » Fri Jun 18, 2010 1:35 am

I just wanted to say that i love you art in this story. It is very good.

The story was cute. Maybe it would be better to add some dialogue and some more scenes with the guys.

Very cute game!

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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#10 Post by azureXtwilight » Fri Jun 18, 2010 3:50 am

I really like Trung :D
Pretty enjoyable, and I love the cuztomization.
Thank you for making this great game!
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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#11 Post by ludeshka » Fri Jun 18, 2010 10:36 am

Hi! I downloaded this game, and I liked it quite a bit.
The artwork is really colorful and fashionable, I really liked it. :)
The interface too, very profesional looking.
(My favourite boy was Trung, His ending is so cute! ^^)

I have few critiques....
I found the story was too short...I had to keep doing the same things over and over again, and there was very little dialogue...
Perhaps, in your next games, you'll make the story a bit longer?
This one was cute, but I'm sure your next one could be a lot better! :)

Also, I encountered an error, while playing Long's stage...
Here is the traceback...
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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#12 Post by Nyu » Mon Jun 21, 2010 7:08 am

Thanks everyone ^^ I'm so glad that many of you played my game >w<!! Really I am grateful!!

Ummm and about the game....It's short because this is my first dating sim ever...I concentrate more on the interface ^^''And I also wanted to make peaceful and cute love stories, not deep deep ones >_< Like the title says: Lollipop Love, This love feels like the first lollipop you tried, sweet and cute.
There were many errors in the game too...I appologize for that! But now everything is fixed for 100% sure ^^

Thanks everyone again!! I'm so happy!

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Re: 1st Teen Story - Lollipop Love

#13 Post by Riviera » Mon Jun 21, 2010 7:41 am

VERY cute game... however.. uhhh. It really, badly needs a proofread. The grammar is all over the place.

I can help you out with that if you'd like, just send me the stuff and I'll fix it up and send it back so you can look over it again and give it the final okay.

Apart from that, great job, good game. I hope to see another one from you! :)
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#14 Post by Esphirisa » Mon Jun 21, 2010 8:09 am

Hehe, it was a cute game :D and your art is unique. Good job!

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#15 Post by Minachu » Mon Jun 21, 2010 11:34 am

WOOOW!
I enjoyed the game SO much! Thank you very much, thanks to you my evening last night was not so bad than I thought! ;D
Really a cute game and I liked all routes! (...My favorite was Quang. Haha.. |D)

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