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#61 Post by ShiraiJunichi » Mon Nov 07, 2005 2:41 pm

snowshine wrote:This is 4 first pages I completed. Warning you, I don't a official mangaka, so please don't laugh if my drawing is so bad T_____T
Anyone who laughs at that artwork needs help! It looks really good. Though you may want a native English speaker to proof read the text- I'd be happy to do it for you. Also, I'm not exactly sure how I should be reading this... right to left?

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#62 Post by Blue Lemma » Mon Nov 07, 2005 3:21 pm

Good stuff, snowshine! 8) I can feel mikey's excitement all the way from here :shock:

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#63 Post by PyTom » Mon Nov 07, 2005 5:04 pm

Blue Lemma wrote:I can feel mikey's excitement all the way from here :shock:
A grand total of 5617 miles, via a great circle route that takes the excitement over Greenland.

I just felt it necessary to point that out. Let me also disclaim that the distance is between airports, not necessarily physical locations.

(Trying BP again for the first time in a long while. I don't think I've ever gotten the happy ending.)
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#64 Post by mikey » Mon Nov 07, 2005 5:38 pm

PyTom wrote:A grand total of 5617 miles, via a great circle route that takes the excitement over Greenland. I just felt it necessary to point that out
See? You just don't get this kind of service on other forums... :P
PyTom wrote:(Trying BP again for the first time in a long while. I don't think I've ever gotten the happy ending.)
I hope you do reach it, in fact it is the only ending where the actual point is revealed. But that service you provided for us in the previous post taken into account... I can't underestimate you, perhaps you figured it out even when taking other paths (some people have, AFAIK).

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#65 Post by Taavimon » Mon Nov 07, 2005 5:57 pm

That Black Pencil comic looks great. Good work, snowshine. I'm looking forward to seeing more of it.

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#66 Post by PyTom » Mon Nov 07, 2005 6:13 pm

mikey wrote:I hope you do reach it, in fact it is the only ending where the actual point is revealed. But that service you provided for us in the previous post taken into account... I can't underestimate you, perhaps you figured it out even when taking other paths (some people have, AFAIK).
Hm... Got it on my first try. Go figure... I think I may have figured out the secret to mikey's games by now.

I'll have to put it on my pile of secret information, next to the DVD containing the complete contents of the Library at Alexandria.
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#67 Post by musical74 » Mon Nov 07, 2005 11:25 pm

From what I've seen of the comic, it looks GREAT, snowshine! Keep up the good work! Hmmmmm......if it's 5617 from BL's place that makes it about 5637 from mine? I can feel mikey practically glowing with happiness. :)

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#68 Post by snowshine » Mon Nov 07, 2005 11:50 pm

Forgive me. My level of English is low ^^;
* hits her head in the wall several times *

That's why I'm not usually post in forum, and can't translate my game into English >.<

To Pytom: Thank you for your suggestions. Frankly, I want to hate you. But, I can't hate the person pointed out me my mistakes, and, is who created program Renpy I liked .^____^. Please correct me whenever I make a mistake.
mikey wrote:I wish you all the best of luck with it, when you finish it, could I also host it on my site? Pleeeease...

Of course! I like that idea.
ShiraiJunichi wrote:Though you may want a native English speaker to proof read the text- I'd be happy to do it for you.
Nothing can make me happy more than that. When my drawnings are ready, I will ask you for help. Thanks. ^^

note: read from left to right.
Thank you for reading. :oops:

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#69 Post by ShiraiJunichi » Tue Nov 08, 2005 9:43 pm

snowshine wrote:Forgive me. My level of English is low ^^;
* hits her head in the wall several times *
No need to apologize. I'm sure your Vietnamese is a lot better than any of ours ^_^

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#71 Post by Alessio » Tue Nov 15, 2005 7:58 am

Snowshine, it's really beautiful! Looking absolutely professional, congratulations! *lifts hat off*

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#72 Post by Otaku Dash » Tue Nov 15, 2005 8:58 am

It's great!!! I really like it.... keep it up snowshine! I'm looking foward to see more of your work :)
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#73 Post by rioka » Tue Nov 15, 2005 9:51 am

Kawaii!! :3 Well done snowshine! Keep 'em coming!

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#74 Post by mikey » Tue Nov 15, 2005 12:51 pm

It's beautiful!! Great great art, and story. And, according to your estimates, we can look forward to 30 more pages!. Honestly, it's exciting for me as well, because since the story is new I don't know what will happen!

I noticed ShiraiJunichi also edited the previous four pages ^_^. Thanks to you all!

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#75 Post by monele » Tue Nov 15, 2005 1:28 pm

Loving it so far ^.^. And wai for cuteness in the last page :).
Btw, your art style looks *so* familiar it makes my head spin @_@. Do you post artwork at another place by any chance?

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