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#106 Post by musical74 » Wed Nov 23, 2005 12:42 pm

I have to argee with ShiraiJunchi here...sometimes it IS good to cry, and if you make it in a way that causes people to cry...sometimes it's nice to cry, espically for men, since we are brought up to believe that men don't cry. HOWEVER...it is your manga, and do as you see fit. The goal is to make people want to read it - so far NO PROBLEM there, you're doing a great job! - and if you think a sad ending fits it better...(gets the tissues ready).
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#107 Post by snowshine » Wed Nov 23, 2005 10:38 pm

Piroshiki wrote:...Hmm, am I mistaken if I assume that you're a Yoshizumi Wataru fan?
Yup! I love to read Yoshizumi Wataru' s mangas. Her stories are sweet and cute. Maybe because that, my style is influenced by her.
...About the ending, it's so early to ready the tissues, there're still more than 20 pages, though. ^o^. I would almost forget my own saying if you didn't remind. Yes, the stories started and ended by itself, I'm merely the person used my pen to record them. So, I'll draw anything I think it's the best.

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#108 Post by musical74 » Sat Nov 26, 2005 9:22 pm

*thinks snowshine's doing a great job*
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#109 Post by Taavimon » Sun Nov 27, 2005 10:21 am

*agrees with musical74*

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#110 Post by snowshine » Wed Nov 30, 2005 7:57 am

BLACK PENCIL Manga page 21-26

21 22 23 24 25 26

.......*speechless because she's wallowing in her own happy-world*

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#111 Post by monele » Wed Nov 30, 2005 12:29 pm

Gyuuhhh >o<.....
Such a great use of tones!

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#112 Post by mikey » Wed Nov 30, 2005 2:07 pm

Thank you for another beautiful set of pictures :P , I'll upload them next week because I don't have access to my site now. :(

The story is picking up pace...

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#113 Post by Otaku Dash » Wed Nov 30, 2005 2:26 pm

OH GOD!!! I CAN'T LOOK!!


I mean... I can.... but....

WHAT'S GOING TO HAPPEN NEXT!!!!!!
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The story is going wonderfully, you make the history so emersive. It's wonderfull.... keep it up! :D
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#114 Post by Chuck » Wed Nov 30, 2005 6:18 pm

NOOOOO.

Crap, I hate cliff hangers >.<

What will happen next time on Black Pencil: The Manga Series -_-
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#115 Post by snowshine » Wed Dec 07, 2005 10:02 am

BLACK PENCIL MANGA Pages 27-31

27 28 29 30 31

The hero must be happier if he died in page 26. 8)
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#116 Post by monele » Wed Dec 07, 2005 10:41 am

Wai~ That was really cool :D. It's over right >.> ? *expecting anything XD*. I'm happy to know you'll be working on a game project from now on too :D

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#117 Post by ShiraiJunichi » Wed Dec 07, 2005 12:35 pm

...over? ...it's over....? ;_; ... I was expecting more... I think it may not be over yet- at least, snowshine hasn't told me yet...

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#118 Post by PyTom » Wed Dec 07, 2005 12:37 pm

I don't think it's over... this is Black Pencil after all, and so it's a little more twisted than that. Although I still don't totally know which ending the manga is going for...

Anyway, snowshine, while the art and composition are extremely well done, there are a few spelling errors on the first page:

numerus -> numerous
seriuos -> serious

There is also one incorrect use of a homophone:

breaks -> brakes

I have to say that, having just replayed BP a few weeks ago, I'm really interested in seeing where this is going, since like the original, it's not telegraphing much.
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#119 Post by ShiraiJunichi » Wed Dec 07, 2005 2:47 pm

PyTom wrote:Anyway, snowshine, while the art and composition are extremely well done, there are a few spelling errors on the first page:

numerus -> numerous
seriuos -> serious

There is also one incorrect use of a homophone:

breaks -> brakes
0_o !!!! Well... I feel pretty dumb... It's all my fault... The great artwork? Snowshine... The horrible spelling? Me... I'm so sorry everyone. Especially to snowshine- I feel like I've failed >_< . I didn't read closely enough to catch those spelling errors. Worse yet, I actually created the "break" error...

Thanks for bringing this to my attention, PyTom. I'll be more thorough next time (assuming snowshine can forgive me ;_; [and that there is more left ~_^])

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#120 Post by mikey » Wed Dec 07, 2005 3:27 pm

It can't end like this, of course... or can it? I believe not, because the whole point of Black Pencil is indeed... about what happens next ^_^.

Snowshine >> Looking forward to the conclusion! :P I'll update my page as soon as possible, right now I have to sort out some other things around it :) fantastic work,... but you're already tired of hearing that, I can imagine. :oops:

ShiraiJunichi >> no worries, take your time and all. 8)

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