Just finished the game! I've played through everyone's good ending, two bad endings and two neutral endings.
The game was definitely entertaining, although the pacing was a bit shaky and there were a few grammar and spelling problems. Otherwise, though, it was fun =) The music you picked out was good. Very suitable for the scenes it was used for.
Anyway, onto the guys:
I went for Jun first xDD I'm a sucker for playboy types. Anyway, what I liked about the relationship between Miyuki and Jun is that they seemed genuinely like best friends, as if the idea of being romantically involved was totally out of the question. However, that being said, I felt as if his 'good' romance path should have been longer. When
Jun invites her to the basketball game, the good/neutral ending is determined on how hesitant Miyuki is to go. It's kind of strange. So he'd be more certain of his feelings for her if she ignored him? That makes sense, but I feel like you should've had her 'ignoring' him more, if that makes sense. Otherwise, when he talks about how he was scared to lose her due to the fact that she was ignoring him all the time, I was kind of like... 'bwuh? She barely ignored you at all o_o.' I felt like the ignoring aspect should have been more emphasised, like her intentionally going to school without him and maybe sitting across the room from him in class, or ignoring his calls... that kind of thing. But his good ending really did make me 'awwwww'. And the scene in the pool was brilliant.
Jun's bad ending alert!
I think his neutral ending was the most realistic. It really is difficult to go from that transition from friends to boyfriend/girlfriend, after all.
Eh... this kind of turned me off, because Jun was a lot more of a jerk in this one than he was in the other ones. In this one, when she confesses to him and runs away, I actually thought it'd be a good ending or something because he's like "I told you to fucking wait!" and I thought they were going to have one of those angry "DON'T YOU GET IT? I LOVE YOU!" arguments or something. But then he becomes a jerk, especially when he's like, "Aw, playing the sympathy card, are we?" I was kind of like... "Dude, this girl is your VERY BEST FRIEND who helps you with everything, and yet you're treating her like this when she's so vulnerable?" Granted, Miyuki did say "I hate you!" but I think it's common sense that she was very vulnerable and therefore wasn't really in a position to be rational.
Oh, Kan. I went for him second. I found the shirt incident very cute xD Although...
when you get his good ending and she confesses to him, he's like, "This is going to be so hard for me because I HATE PEOPLE!! ...But I like you! <3"
I was like "...Lol." I was a little confused as to why he's seen as a total delinquent, though. I mean, it's not as if he's especially mean. When I was on Jun's path and he complained about how loud Miyuki and Jun were, he reminded me of those old men who yelled at kids to get off his lawns. Still, he was very adorable. I think there should've been more talk as to why he didn't like people, though. I think I liked Kan the most, just because of how childish he seemed underneath that cranky old man exterior!
Not much to say on his bad ending, but it was handled pretty well.
Aha... I don't have to say on Ichiro. He was charming, definitely, but there was nothing 'wow-worthy'
Ichiro was the most bland for me, but maybe that's because I've only played through his good ending, which was relatively quick. When he confessed to her, I was surprised because the path ended so quickly. Still, it was sweet!
And one of the bad endings really surprised me:
the one where you stay in the classroom and it immediately goes to the 'No Progress' ending. I was very surprised.
Entertaining? Yes. It's good for your first VN! I would have liked to see more relationship development, however, and maybe even some more interface customisation.
For example, it would have been nice for Miyuki to have some girl friends, and for Jun to still be involved even if Miyuki was pursuing another guy. I mean, he's her best friend, right? Why isn't he still talking with her? o_o;
Anyway. That's the end of my detailed review ;_; Thank you, though, for the game! It was definitely fun.