GViper wrote:Well, I finished reading the whole thing, and wow! I have to admit, it was extremely well written and pretty entertaining too! I have a couple of niggles that i'll describe though.
firstly, is what is your audience? by the style of writing and story, I'd say this could quite easily be a teen novel, without a shadow of a doubt. However, that sex scene did grate with me slightly, surely not many people go into that sort of fanfic level detail on their blog? Not terribly realistic. plus, like i say, it's just very misplaced in terms of audience i think.
Apart from that really, it's fantastic! engaging characters, a good story, nice plot twists, and left me wanting to know how they all got on in the real world afterwards! Congratu-bloody-lations!
Wow, thank you!
I'd say the target audience is twenty-somethings of the digital generation. That's the protagonists' age range. I deliberately didn't want to make them highbrow university students, but just 24-year-olds with jobs.
One other reader commented something about "would someone really go into that much detail on their blog?" The thing is, people don't regurgitate dialogue on their blogs, but the novel needs dialogue or it would be horribly uninteresting. People don't go into as much detail on their blogs as Tessa does, but that's necessary for it to work as a story.
And also, there are
certain blogs where people most definitely
do go into that level of detail on their sexual encounters >.>;;;
But yeah, I could edit the sex scene out without the novel losing much. A number of people really like it, but others seem not to. I've debated putting an edited version online.
Still, thanks for the encouragement and kind words!