[WIP] Tatari

[Kageryu]

I initially posted about Tatari two years ago, but, since the project has made a complete 360 turn, I felt it appropriate to start a new topic than resurrect the old one (mods, please let me know if you'd rather have had me do the latter)

Here's the basic synopsis of the story:

Tatari, by the Otaku-Alliance Creative Group, is the story of a young boy named Takumi Tachibana, an aristocrat from a major land owning family in modern-day Japan, Takumi has lived a sheltered life for his entire youth for reasons he never quite understood. He's accompanied by his bodyguard, a young girl descended from a line of samurai, Tomoe Sasaki, who is also slated as his fiance as a political move by his father, the stern, powerful man named Ryouma Tachibana.

An entropy settles in the deep corners of Takumi's mind, turning him into a brooding, depressed youth until one day, he by chance meets a young foreign girl under the walkway of his school, having both been caught by the sudden spring rain. An enigmatic girl hailing from Iran, she introduces herself as Mahdokht Alamut, and vanishes in the blink of an eye when Takumi turns his head for but a second.

As if driven by a primal urge, Takumi then pursues the strange girl, who leads him into a conspiracy that reveals a 2000 year old conflict that could very well unravel the world as they know it. But will Takumi fight to protect the world he has come to feel is piled up against him? Or move to shape a new order in the forthcoming chaos?

That ink has yet to be scribed in the book that is his fate.

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The nitty-gritty details.

The Otaku-Alliance Creative Group is an all volunteer group, everyone involved is not being paid as an expectation, however depending on how the final product is handled by reviewers, we do have plans to take it to Artist's Alleys in conventions as far as we can get our grubby little hands on. Right now, the project is 40% complete, with two of the major three routes being written, and much of the concept work already done. There is also potential to take it to an actual commercial market, depending on reception, we have our sights on PSN, XBLA, and even Steam. Of course, this means it's a Teen rated project.

That said, we are currently looking for feedback on the various aspects of the project we have nearing completion. Particularly the two major routes that are in the final draft form, as well as the various logos and designs we have in mind.

You can read the respective scripts here.
Tatari - Kasumi's Route (True)
Tatari - Tomoe's Route (True)

Those routes have yet to be edited for final spelling/punctuation, I have those edits in hard copy. Additionally, filler is currently in the planning stages, having not been included for plot redundancy, it's fan service chapters basically.

Here are some samples of the various concept designs and artwork we have already.
Bravo Reignheart Concept by Kuroya
Tatari - Title Logo by Kageryu
Takumi Tachibana - School Uniform by Kageryu
Tomoe Sasaki - Sprite Concept by Kageryu
Ryouma Tachibana Concept by Kuroya

Please let us know what you all think, the opinions of the community is vital to the success of any game, and we're already this far, if we have a crucial flaw we want to know before it's too late.

Regards,
Kageryu

[HikkiPanda]

Bravo Reinhart, the logo, and Ryoma Tachibana looks great

Tomoe also look pretty, but maybe her head is a bit too big?

[Kageryu]

Yeah, that's why I'm not doing the artwork. My artistic talent is far too inconsistent. It's more a concept design than anything else.