A Song for You (GxB Visual Novel WIP + demo)

[lepapillonrouge]

Thank you guys ;w;

A surprise for y'alls is coming soon btw.

[Serendipity]

Oooh I like suprises! *bricked*

[Celestine]

A surprise? I wonder what that's going to be. What kind of a surprise is it?

[lepapillonrouge]

Nee, shitteru?

I think you should check out the first post.

Also would appreciate feedback on anything, please.

[Poketto Kunoichi]

...Pachirisu.

That's my favorite line in the whole thing. Hahahahaha! Akio is my favorite character, he's freaking hilarious. ;_; I keep getting the bad ending though...oh well. But besides that, the best part about your visual novel is the characters. They're not the standard types; they're unique and all likeable. The story seems like it'll take an interesting turn too in the future! It'd be great to see a climb from a maid idol to a pop star.

My criticisms would be the textbox and backgrounds. The textbox just seems so...plain? I'd also prefer seeing drawn backgrounds or heavily edited ones such as like Katawa Shoujo, but that's about it. But come to think of it, it makes a nice parallel of fantasy and reality. Being an idol is usually contained in one's dreams, but they can be reality.

All in all, great job! I will be looking forward! -applauds-

[lepapillonrouge]

;w; Thank you for commenting!

...yeah. |D Akio is very...yeah. XD

Ahaha, really? here I thought it'd be relatively easy considering how VNs usually work but well, I guess my hint to you and everyone else is be loyal.

Yeah about the textbox orz - I'm thinking about making someone else do that 'cause the best editing program that I have is Photoshop Elements which doesn't have drop shadow or emboss or all those other beautiful features they have in the full version >_> maybe I'll go ask azure how she does it.
Ah, hmm. I haven't played Katawa Shoujo myself but I guess I should've done more filtering >D;

[OTM]

I played the demo. I have windows and no problems at all for me.
I like the backgrounds. Maybe it's because they were so colorful and pretty and was something different to look at. I don't know but no issues here with the images.

I liked the demo and really loved the characters too *This is the first time I struggled in picking one of the guys to focus more on in the first playthrough* Of course, my favorite character (it was hard picking favorites too ;A; ) is Chihaya.

The mystery shrouded behind all of them too makes them that much more interesting.

It's like they're all secretly some sort of idol while Shizuna is trying to become one. Well, that's my guess. At one point I thought that Ichigo character was Chihaya in some disguise with a bad accent. But that's just me making assumptions ;_;

But i'm definitely keeping watch on this :>

[lepapillonrouge]

owo Good to hear! Most of the downloaders (of course) are Windows players, after all.
xD; I was thinking they weren't really colorful ._.; Well, you could just thank Samu-kun for taking pictures of pretty places too.

Ahahaha, that's funny, I didn't realize people would struggle with choosing a favorite xD
Kurocchi~ he makes me laugh. |D
So far that makes it 1 vote for each character so far. (I gave the demo to a RL friend and voted for Misaki. xD)

It's not a bad guess. owob

\ovo/ Yay!



Also, I just thought this was a funny coincidence:
When I was trying to finish up the demo, I stumbled onto this guy on YT singing the Uta no Prince-sama ED http://youtu.be/13ohl72iYlk
Utapri, for short, if you don't know is an anime about a songwriter trying to write songs for upcoming idol boys.
And the guy who sings all the parts in this cover is named Akio （あきお）.

I can actually see him as Akio Kirishima's singing voice. |D

[Serendipity]

Loved the demo! XD The first thing I noticed was that the music was beautiful. I have to say that I like all the guys but my fave would have to be Misaki. He so cute...and kind of scary? ._. but then again all the guys are kind of shady but Misaki just gives me chills with his dialogue sometimes! Ummm, the textbox was rather plain but I liked it that way! XD I'm easy to please as you can tell and oh I keep getting the bad ending. RAWR! Misaki may be my fave but I still wantz my harem.

Can't wait for the full version!

[lepapillonrouge]

\ovo/ For the music, you can thank konaa. owob They're quite cheery, which is good for this VN.
xD; shady. Best words to describe these guys. XD Ya, Misaki is a bit...ahahaha...

xD Just be loyal. That's all. owob

XD pfft harem end? We'll see, we'll see.

Edit: Since people were suggesting a nicer textbox...


How is that?

[Serendipity]

*O* Awesome! That text box fits perfectly!

[lepapillonrouge]

Hi, rouge here, reminding people that this isn't dead ahahaha

Updates:
- Updated textbox again
- Redoing a certain story
- melyui is working on new sprites owob

Wishlist:
- A composer who could make poppish music for a certain part of the game
- A guitarist
- Three guys who could sing

XD

[k_arashi]

Just played the demo! I loved it and can't wait until the final release!
Oh, you probably are going to have a proofreader I presume? I came across one thing that really stood out, and I just thought you might want to correct it.
When Misaki says "Oh, and there's also the maid cafes! I spend a good deal of my time and money on the arcade, so I've unfortunately never been to one. (highlighted in red, is what you should add to the sentence).
Sorry if I'm sounding a little bit picky, I don't usually do that. I just wanted to help in some way! And I just happened to see a sentence missing a few words.
If you ever need a proofreader I'd be happy to volunteer.

[lepapillonrouge]

Oh...thanks! I didn't know people were still playing the demo |D
Oh, that would be greatly appreciated, if you could spare the time, actually.

...I don't know, sometimes people do say 'I've never been'. But I guess that is kind of weird to say it that way in that particular sentence...

[ixWishing]

Played the demo, loved itttttttt <3

Are all the guys singers with a disguise or something? ;w;

Gosh it was short O: !
Cant wait till it's out <3