A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]

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Re: A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]

#76 Post by Death_HUG » Wed Oct 12, 2011 5:59 pm

Lumen_Astrum wrote:I haven't played the whole demo yet, but I have to say, I really like Eunmi. :)
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Goodluck! :')
Thank you ^_^ I hope you enjoyed the demo~
dollssoulkirie wrote:Just played the demo today~ (even tho I've had it downloaded for awhile now... *sweatdrop*)

1. Who's your favorite character and why? At the moment, I really don't have one. Not all the characters had a lot of screen time in the demo. Tho I do like Eunmi a lot. Especially her relationship with her twin brother. lol I am curious about Kang Jiseung. Can't wait to see more of him.
2. Is there anything I should fix? Besides some grammar/spelling/double words that I saw, I didn't have that much of an issue with anything. I do like the little design in the text box. It's really cute.
3. Your opinion of the demo? I enjoyed the demo and the story that you've come up with so far. I can't wait to see more. Tho, I do kind of agree with some people about Bora. Even tho she is a jerk (which is great), she should at least be panicking a bit more about her situation at least. Even if it's just mentally panicking while she's alone, so she won't show any weakness in front of everyone.

Good luck with your visual novel~! Can't wait to see more of it!
Thank you! Sorry they didn't have equal screen time, I'm still trying to balance it out >3> I fixed Bora so that she would panick some more in the game, though ^-^ I'm trying my best to finish this VN as fast as possible ^-^

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Re: A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]

#77 Post by Death_HUG » Sun Oct 23, 2011 11:15 pm

Introducing a new character!!! Her name's Nicole and she's a famous actress in Korea, and she's about to make her debut in an American. You'll meet her the next day and she's friends with Eunmi and Minho dislikes her. She's 18 years old and is very cheerful and humble.
This is just a really bad sketch of her, it would look better if school wasn't killing me orz She has long orange hair and she probably has the most clothes out of all my characters....
Next I'll be sketching the idiot trio! xD
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Re: A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]

#78 Post by poppyrocks » Mon Oct 24, 2011 12:53 am

=3= hehe i dont remember if i told you...but i love your demoo
I want to finish all my sprites too >=/
n u've improved ur art!!
YAY!

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#79 Post by Death_HUG » Mon Oct 24, 2011 11:16 pm

poppyrocks wrote:=3= hehe i dont remember if i told you...but i love your demoo
I want to finish all my sprites too >=/
n u've improved ur art!!
YAY!
lol you did tell me and thanksss xD
man, I only finished the main sprites but I'll probably have to redo them so they'll match the new sprites I plan on makeing :/
Really?? My art has improved?? Thanks ;^;

*cough* Introducing the idiot trio~! They don't have names yet... so they're numbered 1,2, and 3 xD As you can see... they're not very good sketches... I gave up like right after I finished delinquent 2... Anyway, they're part of Minho's gang! They're all around 16~17 years old, but they don't go to Nabbuen High School.
Since I really don't know how to describe each of them really well.... I'll give you some dialogue of them talking to figure out what they're like~;D
"Delinquent 1" "Yo! Idn't that Jiseung!?"
"Delinquent 2" "It's 'isn't,' you imbecile."
"Delinquent 1" "Owchie!"
Jiseung "Crap, I forgot..."
"I turn around and see three guys."
"Delinquent 2" "Affirmative, that’s Jiseung. It is superb to observe that he has finally thrown away all his memories of Sarang."
"Delinquent 1" "So... is that a yeah or naw?"
"Delinquent 2" "It is indeed Jiseung."
"Delinquent 3" "Of course it's Jiseung. And no way has he forgotten about Sarang! They were so lovey-dovey together! Ohohoho!"
Jiseung "Just ignore them and go in."
"Delinquent 1" "Don't act so cold, man. So, you comin’ back to the gang or not?"
Jiseung "Didn't I tell you guys that I would never rejoin the gang?"
"Delinquent 1" "I know you and Minho had a fight, but we need you! You were Minho's right hand man!"
"Jiseung was part of Minho's gang?!"
Jiseung "No thanks. Come on, let's go inside."
me "Okay."
"Before I can take another step, one of the gangsters blocks my way."
"Delinquent 1" "Hey, doesn't she look a lot like Sarang?"
"Delinquent 2" "Now that you mention it, she does..."
"Delinquent 3" "Guuurl, you are so unlucky! Or maybe you're lucky? Not even Sarang's little sister looks like her. Ohohoho!"
Jiseung "Shut up and let us go in."
"The delinquents ignore him and refuse to budge."
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#80 Post by Snow Blossom » Tue Oct 25, 2011 7:11 pm

O_O And I thought they were all guys... Btw, is #2 a guy? I can't tell... @_@

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#81 Post by Death_HUG » Tue Oct 25, 2011 8:49 pm

Snow Blossom wrote:O_O And I thought they were all guys... Btw, is #2 a guy? I can't tell... @_@
All of them are guys xD ... #2?? Do you mean #3? #3 was the only that was meant to sorta look like girl >3>

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#82 Post by PockieHoshi » Mon Nov 07, 2011 9:19 am

Yay! Finally got around to playing the demo today =]

1. Who's your favorite character and why?
Well,I can't say for sure right now but my favourite currently is Minho~
2. Is there anything I should fix?
Well,not exactly fix but the text-box could probably be tweaked slightly ^^
3. Your opinion of the demo?
I think the demo was really,really good.It got me hooked onto the story and makes me want to know more.I'm also REALLY curious about the letter and who sent it *v*.

Overall,I can't wait to see the finished vn :mrgreen: .Really love mysteries 8D.I'm sure you'll do a good job at it too ^.^!

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Re: A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]

#83 Post by Death_HUG » Wed Nov 09, 2011 10:34 am

PockieHoshi wrote:Yay! Finally got around to playing the demo today =]

1. Who's your favorite character and why?
Well,I can't say for sure right now but my favourite currently is Minho~
2. Is there anything I should fix?
Well,not exactly fix but the text-box could probably be tweaked slightly ^^
3. Your opinion of the demo?
I think the demo was really,really good.It got me hooked onto the story and makes me want to know more.I'm also REALLY curious about the letter and who sent it *v*.

Overall,I can't wait to see the finished vn :mrgreen: .Really love mysteries 8D.I'm sure you'll do a good job at it too ^.^!
lol everyone seems like to Minho xD ugh, probably because I gave him to much screen time orz
Yeah, I still have to tweak the text-box some more... o3o
Thank you so much >.< Hopefully I won't disappoint you >3<

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#84 Post by Melinoe » Thu Nov 10, 2011 8:09 pm

Death_HUG wrote:ol everyone seems like to Minho xD ugh, probably because I gave him to much screen time orz
Nah, I think it's because MINHO IS AWESOME AND ANYONE WHO DISPUTES THAT WILL DIE. Also, Minho is awesome.

Also, remember when you asked for suggestions on the textbox? If you're still wondering (I always meant to suggest this but never got around to it), why not use paper? Ripped paper, looseleaf, yellowed paper, whatever. This did begin with a mysterious note. That was written on paper.

Just a suggestion, anyway. It sounds kind of hard.

By the way, do you have a proofreader?
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#85 Post by Death_HUG » Thu Nov 10, 2011 9:32 pm

Melinoe wrote:
Death_HUG wrote:ol everyone seems like to Minho xD ugh, probably because I gave him to much screen time orz
Nah, I think it's because MINHO IS AWESOME AND ANYONE WHO DISPUTES THAT WILL DIE. Also, Minho is awesome.

Also, remember when you asked for suggestions on the textbox? If you're still wondering (I always meant to suggest this but never got around to it), why not use paper? Ripped paper, looseleaf, yellowed paper, whatever. This did begin with a mysterious note. That was written on paper.

Just a suggestion, anyway. It sounds kind of hard.

By the way, do you have a proofreader?
lol thanks xD Yeah, Minho is pretty awsome B)
I'm working on a textbox that looks paper... but it's really hard to make it look nice OTL I'm still trying to do something like that do!
Yeah, I have a couple of proofreaders.

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#86 Post by therealrose » Thu Nov 10, 2011 10:20 pm

I LOVE IT!

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#87 Post by Death_HUG » Thu Nov 10, 2011 10:47 pm

therealrose wrote:I LOVE IT!
Thanks, glad you love it ^o^

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#88 Post by Snow Blossom » Fri Nov 11, 2011 9:49 am

Death_HUG wrote:
Snow Blossom wrote:O_O And I thought they were all guys... Btw, is #2 a guy? I can't tell... @_@
All of them are guys xD ... #2?? Do you mean #3? #3 was the only that was meant to sorta look like girl >3>
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*circuits overheating... shutting down... rebooting...*
Uh, wow, that's some intense genderbender... @_@||

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Re: A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]

#89 Post by Death_HUG » Fri Nov 11, 2011 10:44 am

Snow Blossom wrote:
Death_HUG wrote:
Snow Blossom wrote:O_O And I thought they were all guys... Btw, is #2 a guy? I can't tell... @_@
All of them are guys xD ... #2?? Do you mean #3? #3 was the only that was meant to sorta look like girl >3>
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*circuits overheating... shutting down... rebooting...*
Uh, wow, that's some intense genderbender... @_@||
lql xD well, at least they're wearing pants and not skirts xD

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#90 Post by dollssoulkirie » Fri Nov 11, 2011 11:43 am

lol, #2 from the Idiot Trio is my favorite~ >.> I can already tell from his appearance and the dialogue.

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