A Mysterious Note [WIP, GXB] [Demo!]
Posted: Sun Jun 26, 2011 8:38 pm
Demo Link!!!(Also one at the bottom of this post)
Also, I have questions for you to answer about the demo at the bottom of the post (but you don't have to answer if you don't want to)
Plot
What Bora thought was a prank, wasn't a prank at all. Her parents are gone and she doesn't know why. The only hint she has is a ripped note she got from her parents, which tells her to go to Nabbeun High School. Nabbeun High School is known for having the worst students in South Korea. Soon after, she gets a new note. In these notes are hints to figure out the identity of the person who kidnapped her parents. If she can't do this in 6 months, her beloved parents will die, and who knows what else....
There are six obtainable guys and about 13 paths.
Surname is first.
Jung Bora
I'm 16 years old. There is nothing else to say about me.
Kim Minho
According to Sujin he's 17 years old, but I forgot what else Sujin told me.
He's rude, really rude. I think he needs to learn some manners. I try to be nice to him but he is still so rude. I don't see what's to like about him. Though I guess he can be nice sometimes. He has a twin sister. I think he has a sister complex, because he's only and always affectionate towards her. He's a delinquent and he gets into fights all the time. He always win, but I wish he would lose at least once. He is a leader of a gang that most of the whole schools fear, though he doesn't abuse his power.
Oh Seunghyun
According to Sujin he's 16 years old.
He's a stalker. I see him following Minho everywhere. He's taking some kind of notes, but he won't tell me what. When I first met him, I thought he was afraid of girls. He would always studder around girls, but he's perfectly fine around boys. I thought he was gay too, but he has a girlfriend. Juhee did say he was afraid most girls. He tries to look cool, but doesn't that attract more girls? One day I saw him surrounded by girls and I thought he was going pass out. It wasn't my problem, I did warn him, so I walked by ignoring his scream for help.
Takada Hiroki
According to Sujin he's 16 years old.
He's Japanese, but he speaks fluent Korean. He doesn't talk much, though. He ignores everybody. Yoonmi says that when they were younger, he talked a lot and was way nicer. I don't talk to him much but I noticed he is very clumsy. He falls down and up the stairs, he trips on flat surfaces, he hits his head against doors, and so on. Suprisingly, he never gets injured.
Astor Leroy (his surname is last)
According to Sujin he's 17 years old.
He's half French and half Korean. He speaks fluent in both. He moved here a two years ago and is the president of the student council. He's very quiet but if he says something everybody will listen. He sleeps in class but he always gets the highest grade in the class. He is very polite and helped me around the school on my first day. There's not much else to say about him, he's busy so I don't have the chance to talk to him much. He's a pushover, so our homeroom teacher takes advantage of that and makes him grade papers, and other things.
Kang Jiseung
According to Sujin he's 18 years old.
He's very blunt, escpecially when it comes to music. On my first day in music class, I couldn't sing a song right and he told me everything that was wrong. He would stop me in the hallways just to say that I looked like I gained weight. I like honesty, but can't he be a little bit more nicer when saying that I gained weight? Eunmi says he was part of a band, but due to some circumstances, he had to quit. The bad was really popular too. I see him surrounded by girls asking why he quit and other things. But he gets rid of them by saying some mean things. There seems to be bad blood between him and Minho. Jiseung likes to keep promises, even the ones he had with Minho.
Park Kibum
Sujin doesn't have information on him.
He's my homeroom teacher. He seems nice and caring, but I know that it is fake. He takes advantages of students too. He doesn't eat food at school and girls give him their lunches because they feel sorry for him. Even though they give him food, he doesn't eat. When I work at the convenience store he buys ten boxes of pre-made lunches. How rude! Girls give thier lunches to him, yet he doesn't eat it and buys pre-made lunches at a convenience store. He works at a sushi shop near the convenience store.
Girls
Kim Eunmi
Her twin brother is Minho. She always give me lollipops and acts like an older sister to me. Minho is very affectionate towards her. She has a scar on her right cheek but she covers it up with a bandage. She doesn't talk much and she is very emotionless. Just like her brother, she gets into fights. Her hat is very distracting, and she's only wearing it because Minho bought it for her. She dyed her hair the same color as Minho's hair.
Choi Sujin
All I can say about her is she is a stalker. She knows almost everything about a person in the school. But I tend to ignore her "juicy" information about guys. She's the president of the school's newspaper. She gives me the monthly newspaper and tells me to read it. She's always pestering me. Her father owns the Cherrii company,which is the best electronic company in South Korea, so she always get these "stalker" gadgets.(example: her cell phone contains four cameras, records voices at all times, and it can track down any person if it scanned their DNA.)
Nam Yoonmi
She knew Hiroki when they were younger. She was the one who taught him how to speak Korean. She is always trying to talk to him, but he ignores her. She wears a necklace that Hiroki gave to her when they were younger. She's very mature but she wears frilly clothes to get the attention of Hiroki, because apparently he likes "cute" girls. She says she knows this because he plays some kind of game and always go after the cute girls. She is very rich, but she has no manners.
Moon Juhee
She's dating Seunghyun. She's very shy but she wants to be a idol. She is bad at everything, except for singing. She's very polite and I help her with her homework. She doesn't have many friends, but she tries to be nice to everyone. She gets bullied a lot.
Screenshots
This is my first VN, so hopefully the demo isn't too bad! ^-^ Oh and don't click the bonus or help, they won't work!
Demo Link!!!
Just some questions for you to answer after you finish the demo (though you don't have too...)
1. Who's your favorite character and why?
2. Is there anything I should fix?
3. Your opinion of the demo?
Critiques are greatly appreciated!
Also, I have questions for you to answer about the demo at the bottom of the post (but you don't have to answer if you don't want to)
Plot
What Bora thought was a prank, wasn't a prank at all. Her parents are gone and she doesn't know why. The only hint she has is a ripped note she got from her parents, which tells her to go to Nabbeun High School. Nabbeun High School is known for having the worst students in South Korea. Soon after, she gets a new note. In these notes are hints to figure out the identity of the person who kidnapped her parents. If she can't do this in 6 months, her beloved parents will die, and who knows what else....
There are six obtainable guys and about 13 paths.
Surname is first.
Jung Bora
I'm 16 years old. There is nothing else to say about me.
Kim Minho
According to Sujin he's 17 years old, but I forgot what else Sujin told me.
He's rude, really rude. I think he needs to learn some manners. I try to be nice to him but he is still so rude. I don't see what's to like about him. Though I guess he can be nice sometimes. He has a twin sister. I think he has a sister complex, because he's only and always affectionate towards her. He's a delinquent and he gets into fights all the time. He always win, but I wish he would lose at least once. He is a leader of a gang that most of the whole schools fear, though he doesn't abuse his power.
Oh Seunghyun
According to Sujin he's 16 years old.
He's a stalker. I see him following Minho everywhere. He's taking some kind of notes, but he won't tell me what. When I first met him, I thought he was afraid of girls. He would always studder around girls, but he's perfectly fine around boys. I thought he was gay too, but he has a girlfriend. Juhee did say he was afraid most girls. He tries to look cool, but doesn't that attract more girls? One day I saw him surrounded by girls and I thought he was going pass out. It wasn't my problem, I did warn him, so I walked by ignoring his scream for help.
Takada Hiroki
According to Sujin he's 16 years old.
He's Japanese, but he speaks fluent Korean. He doesn't talk much, though. He ignores everybody. Yoonmi says that when they were younger, he talked a lot and was way nicer. I don't talk to him much but I noticed he is very clumsy. He falls down and up the stairs, he trips on flat surfaces, he hits his head against doors, and so on. Suprisingly, he never gets injured.
Astor Leroy (his surname is last)
According to Sujin he's 17 years old.
He's half French and half Korean. He speaks fluent in both. He moved here a two years ago and is the president of the student council. He's very quiet but if he says something everybody will listen. He sleeps in class but he always gets the highest grade in the class. He is very polite and helped me around the school on my first day. There's not much else to say about him, he's busy so I don't have the chance to talk to him much. He's a pushover, so our homeroom teacher takes advantage of that and makes him grade papers, and other things.
Kang Jiseung
According to Sujin he's 18 years old.
He's very blunt, escpecially when it comes to music. On my first day in music class, I couldn't sing a song right and he told me everything that was wrong. He would stop me in the hallways just to say that I looked like I gained weight. I like honesty, but can't he be a little bit more nicer when saying that I gained weight? Eunmi says he was part of a band, but due to some circumstances, he had to quit. The bad was really popular too. I see him surrounded by girls asking why he quit and other things. But he gets rid of them by saying some mean things. There seems to be bad blood between him and Minho. Jiseung likes to keep promises, even the ones he had with Minho.
Park Kibum
Sujin doesn't have information on him.
He's my homeroom teacher. He seems nice and caring, but I know that it is fake. He takes advantages of students too. He doesn't eat food at school and girls give him their lunches because they feel sorry for him. Even though they give him food, he doesn't eat. When I work at the convenience store he buys ten boxes of pre-made lunches. How rude! Girls give thier lunches to him, yet he doesn't eat it and buys pre-made lunches at a convenience store. He works at a sushi shop near the convenience store.
Girls
Kim Eunmi
Her twin brother is Minho. She always give me lollipops and acts like an older sister to me. Minho is very affectionate towards her. She has a scar on her right cheek but she covers it up with a bandage. She doesn't talk much and she is very emotionless. Just like her brother, she gets into fights. Her hat is very distracting, and she's only wearing it because Minho bought it for her. She dyed her hair the same color as Minho's hair.
Choi Sujin
All I can say about her is she is a stalker. She knows almost everything about a person in the school. But I tend to ignore her "juicy" information about guys. She's the president of the school's newspaper. She gives me the monthly newspaper and tells me to read it. She's always pestering me. Her father owns the Cherrii company,which is the best electronic company in South Korea, so she always get these "stalker" gadgets.(example: her cell phone contains four cameras, records voices at all times, and it can track down any person if it scanned their DNA.)
Nam Yoonmi
She knew Hiroki when they were younger. She was the one who taught him how to speak Korean. She is always trying to talk to him, but he ignores her. She wears a necklace that Hiroki gave to her when they were younger. She's very mature but she wears frilly clothes to get the attention of Hiroki, because apparently he likes "cute" girls. She says she knows this because he plays some kind of game and always go after the cute girls. She is very rich, but she has no manners.
Moon Juhee
She's dating Seunghyun. She's very shy but she wants to be a idol. She is bad at everything, except for singing. She's very polite and I help her with her homework. She doesn't have many friends, but she tries to be nice to everyone. She gets bullied a lot.
Screenshots
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Statistics:
The game contains 740 screens of dialogue.
These screens contain a total of 8,143 words,
for an average of 11.0 words per screen.
The game contains 3 menus.Demo Link!!!
Just some questions for you to answer after you finish the demo (though you don't have too...)
1. Who's your favorite character and why?
2. Is there anything I should fix?
3. Your opinion of the demo?
Critiques are greatly appreciated!
