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Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2011 3:08 pm
by Desu_Cake
Hello there, My name is Ben. I'm one of the protragonists of the new game "Cause Without a Rebel".
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It is a fantasy themed Visual Novel set in the city of Destral.
There, I am a member of the rebel army trying to fight the upper class.
This Visual Novel features two protragonists.
The other one is called Sarah.












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No I'm not!
Anyway, you're rubbish at explaining things.
You think anyone would be interested in reading it after that stuffy monologue?
I'll do it instead.
Hi Everybody!
I'd introduce myself, but I don't even know my own name, thanks to someone.
This story is all about ME!
And that moron over there is in it too.
Someone who can't even remember what she was doing last week has no right to call someone else a moron.
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As I was saying, there are two protragonists.
On the first playthrough you will see my point of view...














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And then you get to play as ME!
...Although that does mean you'll have to look at his ugly mug for an entire route.


Oh, I forgot!
We won't look like this in-game, we'll have proper character art.
Here's me:
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And mine, although it's not quite done yet.
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Too right it's not. You don't even look half as moronic as you usually do.
Anyway, I think we've stretched this post far enough, so that's it for now!
See you soon!

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy BxG GxB)

Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2011 3:32 pm
by TakeOverWorld
Amusing post. :) My interested is piqued.
(The shame, I had to google to make sure I spelt that right)

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy BxG GxB)

Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2011 8:08 pm
by xxcautionxx
Haha I really like the intro xD
Oh and BTW, you got yourself a stalker xD
I also really liked the chibi's :3
Keep us updated~

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy BxG GxB)

Posted: Tue Aug 30, 2011 8:54 pm
by Crocosquirrel
Maybe a little bit thinner in her neck, and a bit shorter? She seems a little off. Other than that, it looks like an interesting concept. A New Game+ thing opening a new path. Very RE2.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy BxG GxB)

Posted: Wed Aug 31, 2011 1:08 pm
by Desu_Cake
Progress report!
(Because the first post took a long time and I was feeling lazy.)

Writing:
First draft: ~45% (Should be finished this in a few days)
Second etc. draft: 0% (Obviously)

Art:
Sprites: No percentage since I'm still not sure how many I'll need, but one finished and one half finished.
Backgrounds: 0%
CGs: 0%

Music: 0%

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy BxG GxB)

Posted: Sat Sep 10, 2011 12:01 pm
by Desu_Cake
Finished the first draft of the first route now. Currently about 2k words now. Took longer than expected since I decided to completely change the ending to fit Ben's personality better. Second route should be longer, but take less time to write, since much of the dialogue is repeated from the first.
Art-wise, I've sketched out most of the sprites, but haven't got around to colouring them yet. Also been searching for suitable backgrounds. I'm getting a terrible foreboding that I'll have to draw most of them from scratch anyway.
Music...Don't talk to me about music.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy BxG GxB)

Posted: Sat Sep 10, 2011 12:16 pm
by Cidz
heh, that was a cute and ammusing intro! i look forward to this story <3

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Mon Sep 19, 2011 11:26 am
by Desu_Cake
Woohoo! 3/4 finished the first draft. At 3300 words now. Would be finished already, but I've just recovered from a bad cold.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2011 2:11 pm
by Desu_Cake
Aaaaaaand First draft finished! Woohoo!

Also, art update in first post.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2011 3:08 pm
by Dollywitch
The faces are a little too narrow from that angle I think, they don't quite look mapped onto the heads fully, it's difficult to do things from different perspectives though. I would also try going with more colourful costumes if it's a fantasy type thing, or darker if it's an urban fantasy. I love the "That Feel" guy's face.

The chibis are very cute.

best of luck.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Wed Sep 28, 2011 7:56 pm
by Melinoe
Just a thing about the girl's sprite - I think her, um, boobs are a bit bit droopy and the shading's off. (because she's wearing a bra, right? ...please don't let the answer be no...) Anyway, her sprite is finished and that was very nitpickyish of me, so it's good now, too. (In both I'm still assuming she's wearing a bra. Heh heh.)

Epic intro, by the way.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Thu Sep 29, 2011 4:11 pm
by Desu_Cake
Dollywitch wrote:I would also try going with more colourful costumes if it's a fantasy type thing, or darker if it's an urban fantasy.
The fact that they're wearing normal clothes is sort of the point. :P There will be a character with a more elaborate costume in it though.
Mellinoe wrote:Just a thing about the girl's sprite - I think her, um, boobs are a bit bit droopy and the shading's off. (because she's wearing a bra, right? ...please don't let the answer be no...) Anyway, her sprite is finished and that was very nitpickyish of me, so it's good now, too. (In both I'm still assuming she's wearing a bra. Heh heh.)
Lemme put it this way: At no point in the story is it stated that she isn't wearing a bra.

And thank you everyone for the compliments on the chibi intro. I'm hoping to have a Tiger-Dojo style section featuring them at each bad end.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Thu Sep 29, 2011 5:10 pm
by Riviera
Desu_Cake wrote:
And thank you everyone for the compliments on the chibi intro. I'm hoping to have a Tiger-Dojo style section featuring them at each bad end.
I'll have to play the game now, if only for this. I loved the intro, too. :D

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 7:04 am
by Desu_Cake
I am totally not dead!
Real Life has been getting in the way for a while now, but I have been making (very slow) progress. The second draft is at ~25%, I've revised the sprites slightly, drawn two of the CGs, and started working on some of the music. I'm still not sure how I'm going to create the backgrounds though.

Re: Cause Without a Rebel (Fantasy Romance)

Posted: Mon Nov 07, 2011 10:28 am
by Dollywitch
I am glad you're not dead!

I'm curious as what you mean by "working on the music"...