The Storm - Short Kinetic / sSound novel

[Diced]

Hi! I would like to hear feed backs and comments for this little project I made.



It's a very short Kinetic/sound novel I made back in July 2011. After months of procrastination, here it is.
Please comment about it.

ps. sorry about the mediafire links... The forum doesn;t seem to want me to upload stuff! (T_T)

Windows - http://www.mediafire.com/?nn859xr8w0dcnnn

Linux - http://www.mediafire.com/?3ajvmb330pbfc35

Macintosh - http://www.mediafire.com/?p28uw72du9l2r1t

ps2. If the administrator says I should remove this links, then I will.

NOTE: Edited and finished. go here==> http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 11&t=13060

[Tenxinori]

Isn't this supposed to be in "completed games" section tho ;o *downloading* *_*

[TsukiShima]

What Tenxinori said is right, you should place it in the Completed Games section, but oh well, I'll download this and try this. The background seems interesting though. I'll enjoy it x3

[Diced]

What Tenxinori said is right, you should place it in the Completed Games section, but oh well, I'll download this and try this. The background seems interesting though. I'll enjoy it x3

Isn't this supposed to be in "completed games" section tho ;o *downloading* *_*

Oh! Its like, I need betareaders who can try it and give me feedback like wrong spellings or image problems and the like... After making changes (or maybe its good the way it is,) I'll post this on the completed games section. Thanks for downloading

[Tenxinori]

What Tenxinori said is right, you should place it in the Completed Games section, but oh well, I'll download this and try this. The background seems interesting though. I'll enjoy it x3

Isn't this supposed to be in "completed games" section tho ;o *downloading* *_*

Oh! Its like, I need betareaders who can try it and give me feedback like wrong spellings or image problems and the like... After making changes (or maybe its good the way it is,) I'll post this on the completed games section. Thanks for downloading

oh i c can i proofread it then. ;3

[Diced]

oh i c can i proofread it then. ;3

Yes, thanks~<3

[Tenxinori]

Wow that was awesome Q^Q great choice of words ;o;
Some sentences that you might need to fix o.o (The following is how I would fix it o-o)

Those black clouds roaming on the dark gray sky pouring out buckets of water.
The dark green grass moving along with it.
My cellphone weighted heavily in my pocket.

[Diced]

Wow that was awesome Q^Q great choice of words ;o;
Some sentences that you might need to fix o.o (The following is how I would fix it o-o)

Those black clouds roaming on the dark gray sky pouring out buckets of water.
The dark green grass moving along with it.
My cellphone weighted heavily in my pocket.

Uwaaah! Thanks a lot!~ I"ll make a note and fix it this weekend~~ Thank you so much~!<3

[Tenxinori]

Wow that was awesome Q^Q great choice of words ;o;
Some sentences that you might need to fix o.o (The following is how I would fix it o-o)

Those black clouds roaming on the dark gray sky pouring out buckets of water.
The dark green grass moving along with it.
My cellphone weighted heavily in my pocket.

Uwaaah! Thanks a lot!~ I"ll make a note and fix it this weekend~~ Thank you so much~!<3

np :'D btw is it true story?

[Diced]

Wow that was awesome Q^Q great choice of words ;o;
Some sentences that you might need to fix o.o (The following is how I would fix it o-o)

Those black clouds roaming on the dark gray sky pouring out buckets of water.
The dark green grass moving along with it.
My cellphone weighted heavily in my pocket.

Uwaaah! Thanks a lot!~ I"ll make a note and fix it this weekend~~ Thank you so much~!<3

np :'D btw is it true story?

Nah. ^^" does it feel like one?

Though i got the idea from an accident where a high school student got struck by lightning while texting under a tree during a storm... ^^"

[Tenxinori]

Nah. ^^" does it feel like one?

Though i got the idea from an accident where a high school student got struck by lightning while texting under a tree during a storm... ^^"

*O* cool it feels like rl story O.O

[Diced]

Thank you so much! I've done all the changes (and a little bit more)

I also put your profile link in the credits. Happy holidays~ (Yes, I had to wait for school to end before i could touch this again... T^T)

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