Boyguard [Mystery, Romance, Comedy GxB Game] (on hold)

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Boyguard [Mystery, Romance, Comedy GxB Game] (on hold)

#1 Post by poppyrocks » Fri Oct 14, 2011 5:23 am

OH HOLD!
Sry everyone since im wokring on another project and have exams at the same timee I decided to put a hold on this one since i havent touched this in a while!
But I wil revive it i promise!!! XD

**Hello everyone! This is my first post and VN, so please don't bite >o< Hope you enjoy!
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Title: ~Boyguard~ (It's meant to be spelt Boyguard)
Genre: Mystery, Romance, Comedy
Non-commerical. (FREE GAME :D)


"I silently woke up in the middle of a tidy room. The first thing that popped into my head was...I felt heavy and where the hell am I? Then suddenly the biggest headache hit me causing me to grab my head. Huh? There was an unfamilar feel on my head. But there were no mirror in the room so I couldn't see what it was. Then I realised something big...I couldnt visulise my own apperance! I started to freak out...Big time. A women dressed in an uniform suddenly walks in and is shocked to see my face. She runs out while I try to remember why,who,what,where and how..."

Mei wakes up in the hospital and is told she has been there for one week. She doesn't remember who she is, where she lived, and doesn't recognise any of her friends or family. Aside all of this confusion the doctor explains to her by analyzing her head injury, there were signs of brutal force which also resulted her to loose her memory. Still freaked out the police assigned a bodyguard who is the same age as her for her safety. Together they try to recollect Mei's memories but she must be able to determine whats the lie and the truth before the culprit can attack her again!?

Everyone is holding secrets...

Features!
-No mary-sue protagonist :)
-5 obtainable guys!
-Twist and Turns!
-1 true ending!
-5 normal endings
-5 Good endings
-2(?) Bad endings
-CG art! (mayb a gallery)

Mei's Diary
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(need to edit...)
Mei
Age: 16
Personality: I dunno
Club: Journal?
All I know is that I live with my Aunty who is practically never home...


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(I did another sketch of him, hopefully this one will turn out betterr :P)
Name: Rai
Age: 16
Personality: Serious, Stoner, Stupid Slow...(TRIPLE S)
Club: Told me he joined the Protector club? (wtf)
A guy who hardly talks to me unless he feels like it. Is serious about his job and seems pretty over protective which is driving me crazy! (need an escape plan?)
Note: He is VERY behind society trends....

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Name: Hajime
Age: 16
Personality: Cheeky, prankster, immature...
Club: Baseball
Whenever there is trouble so is Hajime. A happy chap but seems to avoid only me?! (SUSPICIOUS!)

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Name:Masato
Age: 16
Personality: Mysterious, mature?
Club: IT
A boy who is always seen with his laptop. Apparently he's the one that found me injured. (SUSPICIOUS!)

Name: Tadashi
Age 17
Personality: Nice, calm, helpful
Club: Journal (PRESIDENT!)
A helpful senior and also the president of the journal club. He's the last person I talked to before I got attacked?...Heard his popular (suspicious?)

Name: Endo [NEW!]
Age: 16
Personality: Agressive, hot-tempered, gangsta(wannabe)
Club: n/a
This guy seems to hate my guts. Everytime he sees me he does awful things...Is he always like this or is it just me?...

Girls
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Name: Umeko
Age: 16
Personality: Calm, mature, NICE!
Club: Art
Apparently my closest friend in school. The one who knows nearly everything about me..

Name: Ran
Age:15
Personality: Cunning and stingy...
Club: photography
A little brat who claims to have a photo of me and the offender?!

Name: Shika
Age: 16
Personality: Cold, Mean, hates me only?
Club: Dance
She hates me therefore I hate her...What's her problem?!

There are also extras but I'll post them along the threadd

Update 18/10/11
I'm doing everything my self so please bear with me >3<
Script 3%
Story 95%
Art 15%
BG 100% (free resources)
Music 85% (free resources)


**More info will be updated! Feel free to give me feeeedback XD
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Re: ~ Boyguard ~ [Mystery, Romance, Comedy GxB Game]

#2 Post by ofdawnandtwilight » Fri Oct 14, 2011 7:01 am

Oh, sounds interesting! I'm looking forward to the art~
The post seems to have common mistakes though.
I can't comment much since I'm not strict on games but
Good luck~ :D

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#3 Post by poppyrocks » Fri Oct 14, 2011 10:06 am

nero279 wrote:Oh, sounds interesting! I'm looking forward to the art~
The post seems to have common mistakes though.
I can't comment much since I'm not strict on games but
Good luck~ :D
If ur talking about grammer and spelling, yes I totally suck at them :'(. But thank you anyways! XD
My drawing isn't that great so don't expect too much haha.

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#4 Post by ririruetoo » Fri Oct 14, 2011 11:48 am

It sounds okay, the only gripe I have about it is this part-

-attacked on her head

How about hit on her head? Or something? Attacked on her head just sounds really...Weird. After that it says-

Together they try to recollect Mei's memories before the culprit can attack her again!

Um...When did we learn about any culprit? From what I've learned so far from reading, a girl wakes up in hospital, she 'somehow' hit her head, guy comes to guard her...How the hell do she, or we for that matter, know anything about a culprit? Sersouly, if I woke up in a hospital and I lost all my memories my first thought wouldn't be that 'someone' had done this to me. I don't know, just the way you summarized it makes it sort of odd...
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#5 Post by Marcelo_Orlando » Fri Oct 14, 2011 12:43 pm

Welcome and good luck on your game. Art looks really nice, she kinda reminds me of Nanako hehe. I have one question though...is she famous or something? Why would she get a body guard?
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#6 Post by Dakishimete » Fri Oct 14, 2011 1:08 pm

Art seems to be nice and even though it's a mystery it seems pretty light and nice. Will play for sure.

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#7 Post by poppyrocks » Sat Oct 15, 2011 1:45 am

ririruetoo wrote:It sounds okay, the only gripe I have about it is this part-

-attacked on her head

How about hit on her head? Or something? Attacked on her head just sounds really...Weird. After that it says-

Together they try to recollect Mei's memories before the culprit can attack her again!

Um...When did we learn about any culprit? From what I've learned so far from reading, a girl wakes up in hospital, she 'somehow' hit her head, guy comes to guard her...How the hell do she, or we for that matter, know anything about a culprit? Sersouly, if I woke up in a hospital and I lost all my memories my first thought wouldn't be that 'someone' had done this to me. I don't know, just the way you summarized it makes it sort of odd...
=3= yesh I can see what your trying to saay. Excuse my fail writing, I (kind of) wrote this on the spot.
Well........
1. she was found near the school entrance, no sign of her slipping, tripping etc (which i failed to mention sry)
2. The doctors examined her head and found signs of brutal? force.
It's true that there is no precise evidence she was attack but by analzying all the fact they've concluded that she was. Thereforee they've hired her the bodyguard just in case the culprit comes back, or until she's regained her memories and identify the culprit.

But thank you anyways I need some feedback! :D
Marcelo_Orlando wrote:Welcome and good luck on your game. Art looks really nice, she kinda reminds me of Nanako hehe. I have one question though...is she famous or something? Why would she get a body guard?
Thank youu :D:D,
well not really...but MAYBE (dont wanna spoil). Since she's lost her memories she's quiet vulnerable which is why the police lend her a "boy"guard just for safety reasons, until the culpirt is caught.
I know its slighty unrealistic but I'm not the realistic type. :)
Dakishimete wrote:Art seems to be nice and even though it's a mystery it seems pretty light and nice. Will play for sure.
Thank youuuu! :D

** Re-drew Mei, (improved :P)
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#8 Post by SerenaLolipop » Sat Oct 15, 2011 3:47 pm

cuuuuuuuute~
you shouldnt be so hard on yourself-art-wise
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#9 Post by Death_HUG » Sat Oct 15, 2011 7:13 pm

Your art is so cute ^-^ I wish my art was like that XD The story sounds interesting! I wish you good luck on finishing ^_^

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#10 Post by poppyrocks » Sat Oct 15, 2011 10:52 pm

@SerenaLolipop
Thank you!~ >_<" haha yeh when it comes to art im a bit hard on myself

@Death_HUG
Thank youuu! I've played your game beforee and i LOVED IT! Your art is GOOOD! XD

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#11 Post by Death_HUG » Sat Oct 15, 2011 11:20 pm

poppyrocks wrote:@Death_HUG
Thank youuu! I've played your game beforee and i LOVED IT! Your art is GOOOD! XD
Aha, thanks ^-^ I'll be looking forward to your game :3 If you need any help, feel free to ask me ;D

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#12 Post by Joey » Sun Oct 16, 2011 6:19 am

Oh wow, I love the art! >w< Seriously, I think you have a really good eye for facial expressions which is more important than having good anatomy (yours is fine, though!) to me. The story seems really cute, so I'm looking forward to the game, good luck!
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#13 Post by poppyrocks » Sun Oct 16, 2011 6:59 am

@Death_HUG: Awww thanks!
@Joey: Thank you XD! Oh gwad my anatomy is horrible T3T takes me ages to draw a proper body.

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#14 Post by Alera » Sun Oct 16, 2011 8:01 am

*a bit continuation from my comment on DA-with changes*

The main chara looks sweet! I especially like her expression. ^^

The other charas sounds nice too! :'D

The art looks pretty nice, charmy~<3

I read the info, the thingie with the lost memories is pretty often used, a bit sounds like people in real life loose their memories all the time, though it's not like that at all, I personally have met neither one person like that in my life till now. XD But still is interesting and I'm curious how well you'll do with the job to show something more interesting and unique, if you're going to escape from the clichés, or no...Wish you luck! ^^
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#15 Post by poppyrocks » Sun Oct 16, 2011 8:05 am

Alera wrote:*a bit continuation from my comment on DA-with changes*

The main chara looks sweet! I especially like her expression. ^^

The other charas sounds nice too! :'D

The art looks pretty nice, charmy~<3

I read the info, the thingie with the lost memories is pretty often used, a bit sounds like people in real life loose their memories all the time, though it's not like that at all, I personally have met neither one person like that in my life till now. XD But still is interesting and I'm curious how well you'll do with the job to show something more interesting and unique, if you're going to escape from the clichés, or no...Wish you luck! ^^
:') Thank you for your kind words.
Yeah i've never met someone either haha. Only know a few short-term memory peeps.
Yes I personally dislike cliche stories too so I'm trying to make it interesting as possible XD
But thanks for your comment!

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