Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP) updated demo!

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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#16 Post by Aiurax » Fri Nov 18, 2011 10:39 am

I love how expressive your art is.
Really amazing.
I like that you're using this game to promote such ideas. And your first at that. Wow :)

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#17 Post by archia » Sat Nov 19, 2011 6:18 pm

@netravelr: Yay! Thanks. Yeah, the script is kinda silly but it's just meant to be simple stuff for me to test out. Happy you like it so far though (:

@Aiurax: Haha thanks I loved drawing the panicked expressions too. I guess 93 is kinda nervy ;P
It's going to be a really short game!

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#18 Post by unknown5 » Sun Nov 20, 2011 2:40 am

fun story and art =D
i don't know much about the portal series, other than the non-existence of deceitful cake or somethin ...
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#19 Post by Kay » Mon Nov 21, 2011 8:53 pm

Just have to say that I loved the short demo. The premise is definitely interesting, also I'm SUPER loving the art. It's so expressive, I can totally feel his panic. I'm looking forward to the complete story, hopefully including music and/or sound. With the way the interface is coming along, I think it's fair to say you'll have one wonderful debut VN.

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#20 Post by Deji » Mon Nov 21, 2011 11:00 pm

Just gave this a try and I really liked it :D
Loved your writing, loved the color palette and loved your character sprites. I also think your text box is very interesting :D
Keep up the good work, I'll be looking forward to the complete story! ^^
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#21 Post by archia » Wed Nov 23, 2011 3:31 am

Drew a portrait of 93 for the fun of it (:
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@unknown5: Thanks! Don't worry, the inspiration isn't story based, you don't need to play them to get the story.

@Kay: Oh great! It's not going to be a massive VN but I'm working hard on it. Thank you for the vote of confidence (:

@Deji: Thank you very much! I like orange/blue very much as you can probably tell hehe

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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#22 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Wed Nov 23, 2011 10:46 pm

I played through the demo, and while short it has potential. You know I love your art and the emotions were really well done.

My tiny nitpick would be I felt the tone of voice of whoever was behind the camera was a little off? The way they talked about the subject portrayed them as very sadistic, but I'm not sure if I felt that was authentic. Hmmm, I can't quite put my finger on it, but basically I didn't get a strong sense of what type person they would be. Then again, it was a short demo, so maybe more time would be easier for me to get that sense. I felt the subjects panic was done really well though.

I look forward to the finished game :)
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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#23 Post by archia » Thu Nov 24, 2011 7:24 am

Here's a CG as the Operator pushes 93 into the first test ...
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@Auro-Cyanide: Thank you! Yeah, it's short. The whole thing will be short hehe! And you may have already told me you like my art but I definitely don't mind repetition (:

And yeah, the voice is prerecorded, so any sadism you pick up isn't aimed at the subject in particular. I'm not claiming to be any expert in scriptwriting, but maybe that's where the disconnect is? If I do upload a longer demo it would be interesting to hear your opinion on that one as well!

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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#24 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Thu Nov 24, 2011 7:32 am

Oh, the CG is great! Good work on the foreshortening, it adds a lot of dynamics to the image and goes well with the whole 'being watched from above' thing.

I can keep repeating I love your art if you want than ;P

I look forward to seeing it :) I might just be over thinking it as well, haha...

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#25 Post by Aiurax » Thu Nov 24, 2011 7:40 am

The test is just for fitness reasons, right? D:
There's nothing scary in that hole, right?
I'm sure it's just two feet deep and he can crawl back out if he falls in, right?
Right!?

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#26 Post by archia » Thu Nov 24, 2011 7:46 am

@Auro-Cyanide: Haha yes! It's like a view from a camera. I'll upload a new demo once I get to a good point in the story to stop. Because not only is there more story, there's new buttons and stuff and I think they make the game look a lot neater (:

@Aiurax: Oh, don't worry yourself. At the bottom of the hole is a bed of marshmallows for safe landing in a floomph of sugary safety~
Now go on, jump!<3

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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#27 Post by Aiurax » Thu Nov 24, 2011 11:15 am

Ah... I, ah.. Just remembered. I am, ahhhh, allergic to, uhm... Marshmallows... Uh, yeah!
So I think I'll stay above ground...
You know... Where I'm safe from my, ah, allergy.
Thanks anyway~
(On a serious note, that CG is fricken awesome!)

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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#28 Post by PyTom » Mon Nov 28, 2011 12:02 am

As much as Portal, this reminds me of the Paranoia RPG - with the test subject having survived to an unusually high clearance.

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#29 Post by evility » Mon Nov 28, 2011 12:42 am

XD This is interesting! It's a parody, or at least somewhat comedic, right...? The short demo was so fun to go through XD!
I actually kind of like the sprite not being shaded; it makes the whole thing look a bit eerier haha.

Looking forward to more progress from you :)! Can't wait till it's done!

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Re: Subject 93 (A really short first VN) (WIP)

#30 Post by archia » Mon Nov 28, 2011 2:46 am

Have updated demo! Shows my new interface (:
However, the sound for clicking isn't working in the distribution, even though it was working before. Sodes anyone know why...?

@Aiurax: Thanks! I did like drawing that CG hehehe

@PyTom: From the cover art alone I have a feeling I'll like that game!

@evility: It's definitely meant to be comedic. Dark undertones, but I didn't want a completely grim and horrible first game. Thank you!

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