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#1 Post by thedarkdefender » Sat Jan 14, 2012 3:20 am

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#2 Post by fleet » Sat Jan 14, 2012 1:41 pm

Based on your post I suggest you have a native English speaker review your dialog. Also, please post some of the artwork.
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Re: Her Sinister Stare (mystery, psychological, some romance

#3 Post by Chushiki Maho » Sat Jan 14, 2012 9:06 pm

I suggest you add more info for this, like giving the personalities or a bit more info on the characters. Also, you should post some art. Those types of things will determine which people will be interested in your VN. Elaborating on the summary a bit would help too. Other than that, its sounds alright. I'll be keeping my eye on this one.
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Re: Her Sinister Stare (mystery, psychological, some romance

#4 Post by thedarkdefender » Sun Jan 15, 2012 7:13 am

fleet wrote:Based on your post I suggest you have a native English speaker review your dialog. Also, please post some of the artwork.
Umm. I should get someone who'll review my dialogue? Is my understanding right?

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Re: Her Sinister Stare (mystery, psychological, some romance

#5 Post by Chushiki Maho » Sun Jan 15, 2012 11:00 am

Yeah, you should get a proof-reader. Makes sure it's someone that will really catch the small mistakes.
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