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Waxwing[otome, fantasy, commercial] Hiatus

#1 Post by bunbun » Fri Aug 03, 2012 8:27 am

Hello everyone!
First of all, this will by my first serious VN.
I thought of announcing it later on, but seeing I am able to work on it constantly I thought it would be fine to post up already.
This will be a pure otome game without mini games.
development blog : http://w-wing.tumblr.com/ (I update there more often)

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Story

In the realm of magic, Gods, devils and humans coexisted together. The old King of the Gods, Waxwing, had stolen the Spirit of World and fled, scheming to thrust death upon the world. Ten was selected to help; in exchange, she will be granted one wish. In failure, the world will end. Success, in turn, will see her wish come true.

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Ten Lucia
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Ten is the protagonist of the story. She is also the youngest princess of Lucia. She was not allowed out of the castle, making her desperate to see the outside world. She's soft and feminine but tenacious.

Applicable characters (doesn't mean it's 100% romance, some could be friendship)

Taga Medieal
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Taga works as Ten's bodyguard and is the general of the night shift. His job is to prevent her from escaping the castle. He's obedient yet strict, often showing little emotion. He also prefers to be quiet during his job and is unwilling to share about himself.

Rek
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Rek is the first person who does not respect Ten. He is rude and insensitive to people around him. Due to his reserved personality, he prefers to be quiet and not speak out when he's blamed for something he did not do.

Recor
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Rek’s elder brother. He is a flirt and a philanderer. Unlike his brother Rek, he sweet talks to all the women he’s interested in, and always takes the opportunity to get close to them.

Shin
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Shin is the god of information,and he is also the one who gave the mission to Ten. He is able to gain most of the information he needs. He likes to appear and disappear randomly. He's mysterious, yet friendly without taking advantage of his position as a god.

Sheol Lucia
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Ten’s elder twin brother, who is rather attached to her due to his past. He suffers from separation anxiety.


Sub characters
Flez Anstice
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Ten’s fiance, King of Anstice. He is the main reason Ten is forbidden to leave the castle.

Furei Lucia
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Ten’s eldest brother. He is the current King of Lucia. He's kind and fair to all his siblings, treating them well while he leads the Kingdom of Lucia into a peaceful country.

Shira Lucia
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Ten’s eldest step sister. She's someone who Ten respects and admires a lot.

Klyme Griebeck (deceased)
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Legendary magician back in year 222-240W.

Cyrus
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???

Lottero Ranai
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Daughter of Lottero family.

Lottero Herlihy
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Son of Lottero family.

Yinne
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???


Hexlyn(F), Hestilla(F), Ema(F), Rosyme(F), Vise(M)...

Progress :
Word count currently: 223k
Story : 70%
Sprite : 3%
Programming : 3%
GUI : 80%
CG : 0%

Chapters
Prologue - done!
Chapter 1 - done!
Chapter 2 - done!
Chapter 3 - done!
Chapter 4 - done!
Chapter 5 - done!
Chapter 6 - done!
Chapter 7 - done except Sheol's path (I'm leaving Sheol's path until I finish everyone's)
Chapter 8 - done except Shin & Sheol
Chapter 9 - done except Shin & Sheol
Chapter 10 - done except Shin & Sheol
Chapter 11 - Rek & Recor done. Taga ongoing
Chapter 12 - Rek done, Recor ongoing.
Chapter 13 - Rek done
Chapter 14 - Rek ongoing

Staff :
Writing/art - bunz
programming - arowana
Proofreading/editing/art - Synnimaru, Mocochang, Sao, Miles-wings, arowana
backgronud artist - Uncle Mugen
Composer - Lucas King

Previews :
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ps : Feel free to give suggestion ^^ It'll help a lot!
By suggestion I mean something should be fixed, opinions etc and not telling me what you dislike/hate without a reason.
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Re: Waxwing[otome, Fantasy]

#2 Post by Fungii » Fri Aug 03, 2012 8:50 am

Ooh, that GUI looks really nice! Same with the art. Is this VN going to have full screen text on it?

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#3 Post by bunbun » Fri Aug 03, 2012 8:55 am

Fungii wrote:Ooh, that GUI looks really nice! Same with the art. Is this VN going to have full screen text on it?

nop, it'll probably be 90% adv mode and 10% nvl mode
nvl mode will be used during flash back ;_;
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Re: Waxwing[otome, Fantasy]

#4 Post by jeje » Fri Aug 03, 2012 9:37 am

EEEEEKKKK! Consider me your fans already!

Just a little note, though I know you'll redo all the pic. The knight has a... Slightly too long legs...

As for the story, I won't complain anything, as there is still nothing for me to complain about. And you hit me with the genre: otome, fantasy. One thing I'll complain though... WHY the magician isn't a dateable charaa???? ;_;

Your GUI looks neat and polished! I like them! (Hides my own gui...)

I hope this will be completed as soon as possible. And, one question, will this be a commercial project? I hope not... ;v;

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#5 Post by chocojax » Fri Aug 03, 2012 11:13 am

I agree with above, the art is very cool+cute so far! And the story seems interesting. (Is she supposed to help out with the mass murders? loool)
So far, I like Ten and Taga. They both look so cute. :'D
A small suggestion I would give on GUI is to add a small royal-looking pattern onto the red bg. Can't really tell since it's so small, but I'm assuming that it's just a gradient.

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#6 Post by Sabrinyan » Fri Aug 03, 2012 2:30 pm

I love and I'm very surprised it's very professional (it's my opinion)
The story is interesting and the art are fabulous, the color are light I like it. >_<
I completely support you in your project. :)

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#7 Post by tomonkazu » Fri Aug 03, 2012 10:05 pm

somehow I recognized your drawing style--- /A\ *hides*
anyway I love the characters and story <3 Good luck for your first project, bun o/
and no, don't feel embarrassed---it looks nice >v<

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#8 Post by bunbun » Fri Aug 03, 2012 11:26 pm

@jeje : Thank you ^^
I will take note with the knight's body and height when I redraw (and be sure to submit the draft here for critic!)
and good news, this will be a free to play game.
Klyme isn't datable because...their world is currently yeah 854 and he lived in 222-240 year...he would be 600 over years old if he's still alive *cough*
However I might ask for donation to people who liked the game/ want to support

@chocojax : thank you very much OTL
I think I made a huge mistake with the story plot. She's not helping the king of god on the mass murder, instead she'll help with the opposite side of god.(meaning save the world *cough cough*
May I know which red bg you were referring to? They're all red and could you possibly mean all?
I have to admit that the menu and save bg looks very plain
in case you mean the option and data menu, here you go
http://i28.photobucket.com/albums/c208/ ... ptions.jpg
http://i28.photobucket.com/albums/c208/ ... /save1.jpg
I'd like to hear some opinion on how I can enhance it ^^

@Sabrinyan I...am not a professional but thank you *tear*
the color will not be as light as you see in the draft, but I'll balance up the overall coloring and lighting for the characters <3 ^^
and thank you for supporting!

@tomonkazu yo-yoyo WHY ARE YOU HERE
I...watch you and...I know you *feel even more embarrassed now...runs away*
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#9 Post by chocojax » Sat Aug 04, 2012 12:00 am

Ooh, haha. Sorry for getting it mixed up.
Well, I meant all of them. x: I assumed them to just be a plain gradient, but looking at them up close, they look really good. Reminds me of a royal red carpet, or something, haha.
I think the normal text GUI is fine, since having a pattern might be too much.
Maybe something like this, a small but still detailed pattern. Really, I think it's good at the moment, but try to explore with patterns to see if it's better or not. c:

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#10 Post by bunbun » Sat Aug 04, 2012 9:37 am

@chocojax : here you go, I added some flora pattern to the bg ^^
http://i28.photobucket.com/albums/c208/ ... tion-1.jpg
what do you think? If you think it looks fine, I'll add to the others as well.
For me, I'd prefer the earlier one so the font would be clearer <3


Aug 4th - Updated on Shin's draft
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note again : I won't be using them as sprite
I thought of designing their costume when I have time, and only doing the sprite and CG scenes once writing is done.
There's a lot to write and each applicable character has their own story to make the game worth playing a few times.
I don't know when I'll be able to finish writing, maybe half a year or so
art style might change thus I don't want to look at my art half a year back then and decided to redraw.
It'll be a waste of time.
current word count - 20k
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#11 Post by chocojax » Sun Aug 05, 2012 1:49 pm

Ooh, I like it! :9 A lot, makes it look kinda royalty-ish now(?). Try to get a few other opinions too, though!
And, what do you mean about making the font clearer? :v It seems fine so far.

Also, Shin looks pretty neat; I like his outfit. c:
How long are you planning on making this?

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#12 Post by bunbun » Tue Aug 07, 2012 8:18 am

@chocojax : sorry my brain was confused when I replied previously^^
I think your suggestion is good, it makes the GUI less plain.
I'll go with it!

For how long this progress will be, I am really uncertain.
I am typing around 1k-4k words a week, now it's around 22k (which is only 10-15% of the storyline)
The fastest would be half a year. (not to mention I have to draw cg scenes for each applicable character)

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Aug7 update!
Sheol is up
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WIP of in game
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#13 Post by nottiebutt » Tue Aug 07, 2012 8:39 am

I'm simply in love with the GUI.
Will be looking forward to this game and your lovely artistry.

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#14 Post by Nellie » Tue Aug 07, 2012 11:07 pm

Just stopping by to say... Pretty arts! I'm in love with Ten Lucia's designs! <3
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#15 Post by Pecora Z » Tue Aug 07, 2012 11:57 pm

Your art and just everything else looks so well-done and professional, it looks [and sounds] like a commercial game. Thank you for making it free-to-play, it looks absolutely stunning.

There was only literally one thing I could find wrong, and that's that it seems like Ten is a bit generic, but considering I have not seen any story, I can't say for sure. She does look unique (in a very good way!).

Ahh, I'm so excited for this game now! Let me know if you ever need a beta-tester, I'm an incredibly fast reader with little going on in real life. I know this will be amazing when finished. (:

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