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Notes:
1.Everything is a work in Progress(Major rewrite of this thread in progress).
2.HELP ME!(Would you kindly,give a comment?)


Quests,Library and the Nights of the Fightin' Gals! or ,in short,Not Fightin' Gals!
It is a silly game,with the very much Mentally challenged Kandiss Redd being the character you play as and nothing being serious,
and...uh...why don't you read along?


Features:
-Not a single serious sentence
-Ability to perform mid-dialog interrupts
-Moe art style(It's not moe enough,so I will make it more moe)

Well,I would rather allow the characters to “speak for themselves”.

Characters:

Protagonist:

Kandiss Redd

My name is Kandiss Redd,I am uh … con-artist,which implies that I have … clever plans.
They are not like any of the risky,hard to execute plans you see in the movies,I'm not a smartass!
I simply prefer coping scam letters and emails I received and send'em to someone else!
Um...wait...I should be talking about the game for you,right?
I should be saying this,that,it is,well,you'll play as meeeeee!
Although isa bit redundant to say...,I'm Kitsune, a Kitsune,with a single tail, fox ears and...generally being a fox.
That's about it...I guess,this is it,I can't tell you more 'bout that.It'll spoil the fun!
I mean, irredisregardless of that, I … I ... What.I just said something complicated!What did I meant,or should I say “unirredisregardless”?Disre …duh,nevermind,I'll tell you about that LATER.



Supporting Characters:

Feodora Tolstaya

I am Feodora Tolstaya...and...I don't like guns.I'm not happy either,not happier than folks around me,at least.
But...It seems everyone in tis place,I mean in this world,is up to some......thing.
THEY TOOK EVERYTHING FROM ME,BIT BY BIT,AND LEFT ME WITH NOTHING BUT THIS GOD DAMNED RIFLE!
So yes,you see?I am not given much choice...I have to shoot everyone...IF I HAVE TO!
As last,I have an important message for you,let us speak in private...I need more firepower...MORE...MOAR...seriously...do anyone have spare grenade luanchers?Excess hand grenades?Whatever you have!
There is no better pastime than shooting passerbys and blowing stuff apart,especially REALLY BIIIIIG ones!




V.E. Haeston/ Haestack the vampire

V–––,Haes–––, I am,just call me,people call me haestack...I guess you can call me by this name.
And if you are kind,call me Haeston!
I am the receptionist in this library,WELCOME TOCOCKAIGNE MAGIC LIBRARY!...
...there isn't much respected visitors,so I have to practice more... “WELLLLLLLCOME! WELLLLLLLLLLLLLCOME!”...
...but there's a lot of people that I don't have to welcome,all they do is Take Free Meals,Use Our Computers and Sleep On The Ground!
But they say this is a public service building!And! ...... I ... guess so ––– SO WHAT!
Now most of senior staffs are on a Looooooong trip,it's time for me to doooooooo something!Assuming I don't fail...I'll –––
––– HNNNNNNNNNNG!



(There will be additional characters,the total number should at least be 7)

Progress:

Demo:
In progress
GUI: 15%
Story: 60%
Music: 0%
Writing: 15%
Coding(Effects): 5%
Coding(Framework): 20%
Art: 10%

Very Big Note:I am coding much of the functions necessary for a VN myself,(I am using Unity3D not Ren'py),and this is going to take some time!

Overall:
(Some Progress)
GUI:10%
Story: 30%
Music: 0%
Writing: 5%
Coding(Effects): 5%
Coding(Framework): 15%
Art: 5%

Timeline:
Started Thread.[15 October]
Major rewrite in progress[22 October-]

Feedback:
It's all about your opinion.Every feedback matters!
1.What do you think of the game (concept)?Is it good?
2.Do you see any problem about my presentation?Have I made any serious mistake?
3.What do you think about the art?
4.Is it amusing?

Uhmm,Hello...
first,the concept is fine enough if it just for a short game,actually you should start making a short one first before you move on to a big project
second,its good ask people to help and give you advice,so you will get more knowledge and good advices
third,the art is fine,did you draw them with brush tool?great,I've just tried to use brush only for coloring.Why don't you also try to make the characters with vector style?I usually draw them manually on paper at first,I have no scanner,so I take a picture of them,send them to my computer,then trace them with vector tool...what a troublesome way,right? hehe...

and for the fourth,do you think it is amusing to make an OELVN?you should enjoy while making it,so that people will also enjoy your works....,okay that's all thank you...

Asuka Shinota-chi wrote:Uhmm,Hello...
first,the concept is fine enough if it just for a short game,actually you should start making a short one first before you move on to a big project
second,its good ask people to help and give you advice,so you will get more knowledge and good advices
third,the art is fine,did you draw them with brush tool?great,I've just tried to use brush only for coloring.Why don't you also try to make the characters with vector style?I usually draw them manually on paper at first,I have no scanner,so I take a picture of them,send them to my computer,then trace them with vector tool...what a troublesome way,right? hehe...

and for the fourth,do you think it is amusing to make an OELVN?you should enjoy while making it,so that people will also enjoy your works....,okay that's all thank you...

First,I have to say it's not complete!I'll keep adding more content!But actually,I made this post because I have to ask for help from early on,or there's no way I could complete this project.
Second,Agreed
Third,I am mostly experimenting and practicing with the art ,maybe I will draw some of other characters' pictures in vector,I am already quite good at it. And yes,I am mostly using the brush tool on SAI.

And at last,I guess if you're not amused by what I've written for the characters...maybe I am not good enough...but can you talk about why?

Note:I am not lying,my heart beats like hell when I'm writing this whole thing,being terminally shy sure have stunted a lot of my progress.

Welcome to the forum, Numnutz.

If you need assistance with writing, visuals, coding, and so on, then be sure to ask. I recommend that you be willing to give and take -- in other words, help other people, and give credit where it is due. Let people know what you can contribute, and what you're willing to do to assist them.

If you're still plotting out your story, then be sure to think of potential endings and important scenes. Browse a local library or your favorite search engine for writing advice.

Numnutz wrote:...being terminally shy sure have stunted a lot of my progress.

You will benefit by having a story and characters that you are confident in. But don't worry, you are not the only person who's struggled with writing and game design. We all have to learn how to create things. Take it step by step. To use a baseball analogy, remember that even the best players hit the ball and get on base maybe thirty percent of the time.

gekiganwing wrote:Welcome to the forum, Numnutz.

If you need assistance with writing, visuals, coding, and so on, then be sure to ask. I recommend that you be willing to give and take -- in other words, help other people, and give credit where it is due. Let people know what you can contribute, and what you're willing to do to assist them.

You are right,but do you think my writing and visuals need significant improvement?Tell me why,if yes.Comment on it.

If you're still plotting out your story, then be sure to think of potential endings and important scenes. Browse a local library or your favorite search engine for writing advice.

You are still right,but it seem you didn't read through the whole post,it is too long?(Or if you did,is the whole thing pitiful?)

Numnutz wrote:...being terminally shy sure have stunted a lot of my progress.

You will benefit by having a story and characters that you are confident in. But don't worry, you are not the only person who's struggled with writing and game design. We all have to learn how to create things. Take it step by step. To use a baseball analogy, remember that even the best players hit the ball and get on base maybe thirty percent of the time.

Yes,there's no way I can say you're fully wrong.But No,I'm not struggling with writing and game design,I'm struggling with the fear of posting this post and my replies to public.And,well,baseball is a dead sport in many part of the world.(At least it's "dead" enough that I know nothing about it.)