Alice's Revolution [GxB][Mystery][Friendship][Tragedy]

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Alice's Revolution [GxB][Mystery][Friendship][Tragedy]

#1 Post by Daistarir » Wed Oct 24, 2012 2:05 pm

アリスの革命 | Arisu no Kakumei
Story:
Alice is a thirteen years old girl whose parents died in an accident. Alice wandered around the street, shocked by her parents' death. She ends up fall asleep in an alley due to her exhaustion. The next morning, she wake up with a terrible headache and forgets everything. After that, a kind-hearted man sees her and decides to bring her home to take care of her. A few years later, the man who helpped her dies in an accident and so Alice is brought to a orphanage. After months, a mysterious man adopts Alice. He introduces himself as one of her family's close friends.
When Alice is on the way to his work place, she finds out he is actually a gangster and that their boss adopted her.
Alice finds out she was adopted with the intention of taking care the boss' three sons. Alice at first thinks of them as spoiled, rotten, stinking, crying babies. She soon sees how wrong she is.
When Alice comes to the boss house, she discovers that the sons are actually three trouble-making kids. Alice is given the duty to take care of them and doing all sorts of things for them, from cooking to cleaning. Alice must also remember one last and very much important thing: She must to protect them from an assassin, who is constantly trying to kill them, at all costs!

Game Features:
  • Chibi CGs
  • 4+ Future Endings , 2+ Friend Ending , 1 True Ending and 1 Bad Ending
  • The start of a small series with 4+ Episodes
  • 4+ Cute Cute Romance
  • Extra Chibi ++
Protagonist-tan:

Profile No.1
Name: Alice (Arisu) Rijiku
Nickname: Arisu-chan
Age: 13
Jobs: High-class Babysitter who doesn't want to take care of naughty kids.
Bloodtype: O
B-Day: 17/12 (Sagittarius)
Loves: Art and books, then video games and classical piano music
Hates: Everythings she doesn't love
Weapon: Shotgun , Stayr Tatical Machine Pistol
Master Profile:

Master Profile No.1
  • Name: Joshep "Josh" (Joshu) Edmund
  • Type: Calm, Cold.
  • Nickname: Joshu-tono, Josh
  • Age: 14
  • Jobs: Joshi-tono's first child. The Inheritrix of J.K Commercial Corporations.
  • Bloodtype: A
  • B-Day: 19/9 (Virgo)
  • Loves: Political and Ramen, then History Books and Mystery Novels
  • Hates: Military and High-Class Food, then Hard R&R Music and Romance Novels
Master Profile No.2
  • Name: Theodore "Teddy" (Tedi) Edmund
  • Type: Energetic, Funny.
  • Nickname: Teddy-kun, Teddy
  • Age: 13
  • Jobs: Joshi-tono's second child. The Leader of The Tween Rebellion. Leading a revolution against government.
  • Bloodtypes: B
  • B-Day: 10/8 (Leo)
  • Loves: Swimming, Video Games, Fastfood and Music
  • Hates: High-Class People, Government, School and Assignments
  • Master Profile No.3
  • Name: Christoper "Kris" (Kurisu) Edmund
  • Type: Cute, Sneaky
  • Nicknane: Kris-kun, Kris
  • Age: 9
  • Jobs: Joshi-kun's third child. The Next Boss of The Yakuza.
  • BloodType: O
  • B-Day: 23/3 (Aquarius)
  • Loves: Pranks, Children Books, Cookied and Sweets
  • Hates: Art, Vegetable, Horror Books and Blood
  • Houseworker Profile


    1. Gilbert Majiku
  • Nickname: Gil
  • Type: Flitarious, Workaholic
  • Age: 16
  • BloodType: B
  • Jobs: The Edmund's Butler
  • Loves: Work and Roses, Nature and Beauty.
  • Hates: Insects, Farms and just about anything that involves his family
  • Weapon: SIG MG 710-3, Berreta M9
[WIP]

Minor Characters:
[WIP]
Team Kingdom Crown.
Thanks to my great writers and artists aka Great Buddies of Mine.
English Grammar Correction - Iarumas
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Re: Alice's Revolution [GxB][Comedy][Friendship][Tragedy]

#2 Post by gekiganwing » Thu Oct 25, 2012 11:11 pm

Where will this story be happening? If it's set in the real world, then when will it be happening?

It sounds like Alice has access to a shotgun and a Steyr pistol. Why? Was she given these weapons (and trained how to use them) by the person who adopted her?

Unless Alice already has good combat skills, it might be cruel to have her be the one person who can protect the boys from an assassin. I'm assuming that the assassin is a trained adult who will not hesitate to kill a target. Maybe my assumption is wrong...

Making this story into part one of a four-part series is ambitious. Focus on writing and coding this part, and then see if you're ready to keep the story going.

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Re: Alice's Revolution [GxB][Comedy][Friendship][Tragedy]

#3 Post by Daistarir » Fri Oct 26, 2012 12:21 am

Okay *start typing*
Neo talk to me about people like her will start asking question.
gekiganwing wrote:Where will this story be happening? If it's set in the real world, then when will it be happening?
Modern time
Not sure about the country
It sounds like Alice has access to a shotgun and a Steyr pistol. Why? Was she given these weapons (and trained how to use them) by the person who adopted her?
I'm sure that joshi-tono(The Master) provides them with weapons.
Unless Alice already has good combat skills, it might be cruel to have her be the one person who can protect the boys from an assassin. I'm assuming that the assassin is a trained adult who will not hesitate to kill a target. Maybe my assumption is wrong...
Alice has innate combat skills, basically drilled into her from being a mutation. Since joshi-tono knows this, he hired her under the guise as a caretaker, she was NOT aware she would be protecting them in that way. Hiring a little girl for a bodyguard would throw off assassins and think there was a catch.
Making this story into part one of a four-part series is ambitious. Focus on writing and coding this part, and then see if you're ready to keep the story going.
We're focusing in writing. The coding part will be the last.

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