Fatexheart (Fantasy/Action) (Yuri) Update 10/18

[Auro-Cyanide]

It's probably not a great idea to set up a campaign so early on. You should wait until you at least have some finished level art work so you can show what your game is like. You also need to make sure you have perfect grammar in your pitch as it needs to give people a good impression. Your first line has faults in it. You wrote "FatexHeart' is video game whom it's story are broken down to chapters or installments." Expanded it says "FatexHeart' is video game whom it is story are broken down to chapters or installments." That makes no sense. It should say "FatexHeart' is a video game whose story is broken down to chapters or installments."

Basically, you really need to put your best foot forward in order to get people to give you money, especially in presentation. Otherwise you are setting yourself up to fail. It seems lndiegogo gives you the money regardless, just with higher fees. Still it would be better to meet your goal.

*Edit: Had to add an 'a' to my description. And that's why proof reading is important >_<

[eileen]

It's probably not a great idea to set up a campaign so early on. You should wait until you at least have some finished level art work so you can show what your game is like. You also need to make sure you have perfect grammar in your pitch as it needs to give people a good impression. Your first line has faults in it. You wrote "FatexHeart' is video game whom it's story are broken down to chapters or installments." Expanded it says "FatexHeart' is video game whom it is story are broken down to chapters or installments." That makes no sense. It should say "FatexHeart' is a video game whose story is broken down to chapters or installments."

Basically, you really need to put your best foot forward in order to get people to give you money, especially in presentation. Otherwise you are setting yourself up to fail. It seems lndiegogo gives you the money regardless, just with higher fees. Still it would be better to meet your goal.

*Edit: Had to add an 'a' to my description. And that's why proof reading is important >_<

Thank you commenting and offering advice on some issues! I will definitely get a proofreader to double check my stuff for sure. It's not probably not great idea to start it early but we didn't have much of choice. ^^;; Though, we could waited for more finish level work but it will probably taken twice as long as I'm pretty much on my own paying everyone and I think our artist is really busy with college. :/ Yes, we have some people that are helping for free but only one volunteer that is doing some art and that is Character Design/Concept Art. I do want to pay for everyone for their time but at the moment I couldn't. We thought starting campaign could help with some fee and we have not much to lose as it is. We decide to go ahead and ask my friend to do final pieces while we wait for a response from Puro. So, we can at least show progress.

We updated the campaign page with revisions and some rewrites in the front page. So, check it out! If you guys can spread it around that would be wonderful and if you contribute that will rock also. We finally have another final art that you can take look at front page. The profile with the only link instead of image. We also updated the profile with new characters and their images. We decide to add in choices and varies endings depending on the choice.

We also added the game progress for our demo. We have the script done but everything else is coming in slow and nicely.

[eileen]

Update time!

We are still alive and slowly getting more artwork and writing done for rest of episode after demo. We updated the opening post with new pieces of art and character bios for you!

Will place the information down below.

Riveter:



Riveter is Akuma's right hand man and deadly foe for Eloise and co. He is mostly silent character and only most moans and groans can be heard. He is partner with Cynthia and provide power in the team. He is known around the world as fearful tyrant and most iconic person in world.

Male Soldiers:



One of reoccurring characters during the war and part of military defenses to stop the war.

If you have any question about Fxh then don't be afraid to ask. We will answer the questions the best we can without spoiling anything. Feedback will always be appreciative!

[jghibiki]

I like the pic of Riveter, fits the evil henchman archetype really well!

[eileen]

I like the pic of Riveter, fits the evil henchman archetype really well!

Thanks! He really does, doesn't he? >:D

@Everyone else
We took down our indiegogo campaign so we can relaunch it later with more revision and stuff. Though, I'm still confuse about one thing.

Additional Info:

Most people born in god realm has a designated age to when they are fully developed and age much more. The designated age is completely random to everyone so don't be shock if sons/daughter appears older than the parents.

### Will put more here later #####

I have a couple new art pieces to show. Hopefully you like them.

Revision of Akane:



New Characters:

Ace:



A loner swordsmen that roam the lands looking a place to call him. He is one of the combatant as well as veteran member from the previous war. He is known to be big shot and flirt with ladies which usually end badly with perverted attempts.

Rinzen:



Rinzen is head of council and act like representative for both world of earth and the gods. He is known to be passive during his earlier days of his life and later become more determined to see peace. He is close to his family even though, he only one shown aged much more quickly than his parents.

[cladinpink]

The artwork looks stunning thus far, though I would like to see the summary a bit more fleshed out. Such as why there's a competition in the first place, and why people don't just gang up on Akuma in a coup d'etat.

Like many has said before, the incest threw me off a bit as it's never been my cup of tea despite being very open-minded. Which is exactly why I'm still going to give this game a try. I'd like to hear if there'll be other romance options though. Can you, say, flirt and start a relationship with someone other than the mother, and maybe team up with them instead? Or are you bound to her for the duration of the game?

[eileen]

The artwork looks stunning thus far, though I would like to see the summary a bit more fleshed out. Such as why there's a competition in the first place, and why people don't just gang up on Akuma in a coup d'etat.

Like many has said before, the incest threw me off a bit as it's never been my cup of tea despite being very open-minded. Which is exactly why I'm still going to give this game a try. I'd like to hear if there'll be other romance options though. Can you, say, flirt and start a relationship with someone other than the mother, and maybe team up with them instead? Or are you bound to her for the duration of the game?

Yeah, many voice that incest threw them off... This is what I want to write and I want to see out in the world. At least for me to read if I am the only one.

Glad that you like the artwork! Let's say that Lord Akuma isn't the only one that is pulling the cards out of hand Planning a coup d'etat isn't just that easy I'm afraid as he enough power to destroy the planet if he wanted to, influence on the population and no he doesn't live on planet but in between world. He also has an army ready to fight for him that pretty much.

Alastor. Remember that name because he IS the reason for no coup d'etat on Akuma.

There aren't any other other love interest though. Sorry. Everyone WOULD love that so they can get another girl of their choosing and completely ditch the incest. Which kind of makes it pointless at this point. :/ The characters still can flirt with other characters but no other pairings. Every team is set and no switch sides UNLESS a team has empty spot and other team only have one member.

I will shall march on then. We are trying to make Eloise and Yuki relationship more appealing though!

Anymore question?

[cladinpink]

In any way, I think it's great that you're charging ahead with this despite the hesitance towards the incest. No point in making a visual novel that you don't enjoy yourself :3 Besides, if not for the incest I'd find the pairing really interesting, so I just gotta get past that little obstacle~

Thanks, that clears up things quite nicely. Putting that in some form of prologue or something would probably be a good way to start out the game, but you might have already thought about that, of course ^^

Oh well, flirting with other characters is still good though; it makes for wonderful relationship development after all! I'm really curious about their relationship and how you'll present it in the game! Do they start out as a couple, or do they get together in the beginning?

Other than that, I think I'm out of questions to ask for now C:

[eileen]

In any way, I think it's great that you're charging ahead with this despite the hesitance towards the incest. No point in making a visual novel that you don't enjoy yourself :3 Besides, if not for the incest I'd find the pairing really interesting, so I just gotta get past that little obstacle~

Thanks, that clears up things quite nicely. Putting that in some form of prologue or something would probably be a good way to start out the game, but you might have already thought about that, of course ^^

Oh well, flirting with other characters is still good though; it makes for wonderful relationship development after all! I'm really curious about their relationship and how you'll present it in the game! Do they start out as a couple, or do they get together in the beginning?

Other than that, I think I'm out of questions to ask for now C:

Thanks! I hope that we are successful. I hoping people get past that obstacle since everything else is will be liking hopefully. I will say that it's oblivious trap to lure away unwilling people...

No problem. You got me thinking of stuff that I neglected. Thank ya! Yeah, we will put into intro of the game.

We wanted to focus on the story more than dateable characters so that is the reason why. ^_^;; We do have other pairings with different characters to amend that I think. BXG/GxB and Bxb will appear in the game as well.

They start out as a couple and pretty naive with earth standards on relationships which includes incest is taboo. They will be learning as they go. God's Realm is more accepting. Yay for conflicts. They have that overhead while they fight...

Additional Characters:

Ralph:



Ralph is taking tutelage under his hero Rinzen after the death of his folks in an unknown disaster. He is impatient young man with a special eye on Eloise to Rinzen dismay. He is usually is playful, cocky, easygoing and fanboyish about what his master have done.

Kairi:



Kairi is Rinzen's wife and is a nurse at a hospital nearby. She is serene and usually happy person dispite being clumsy. She loves her family deeply and willing to help them out in time of trouble. She appears to be close friends with Yuki.

[eileen]

Update - 3/14/13

Time for another update! The first thing is I have updated the OP with things rearrange and add some picture.(Things that change: Picture of Eloise; Some of description of Yuuki and her name; and Color version of Soldier.)

We have a special treat for you guys today. We finally have BG artist that is willing to work with us. So, we have one background to show you guys.


Created by Davey


Eloise sprite with background

Questions:
Does the background and sprite look good together?

100puro just finish the Eloise sprite and moving on to redo Yuuki sprite. I will post more Art WIP when I get them. The rest of us is slowly getting things done hopefully it will pick more soon. We also making progress on Yuuki's and Eloise's relationship to make less uncomfortable with help with Puro and others.

Stay tune until next time.

-Eileen

[eileen]

*Flail hands around*

Yes, this project is still alive! Everyone is just being slow due to school and such. I can't remember the last time I chatted with them. I decide to not worried about the incest too much since pretty a turn off anyways. Will probably post a new thread under a new name and new graphics.. That is a maybe.

Episode 1 will have 7 characters in total. Eloise and Yuuki are two of them.

[wererat42]

The sprites and backgrounds look pretty good. One question, though. Are all the final sprites going to be of similar design to Eloise, or is there more than one sprite artist? I've found that in games that use more than one sprite artist, the end product looks odd (example: Sengoku Hime by Gesen 18).

Also, I'd say leave the incest in if changing it alters your original vision. You can always just make Yuuki her adoptive mother or something if you still think it will be an issue.

[eileen]

The sprites and backgrounds look pretty good. One question, though. Are all the final sprites going to be of similar design to Eloise, or is there more than one sprite artist? I've found that in games that use more than one sprite artist, the end product looks odd (example: Sengoku Hime by Gesen 18).

Also, I'd say leave the incest in if changing it alters your original vision. You can always just make Yuuki her adoptive mother or something if you still think it will be an issue.

Thanks! The art you see are concepts and design of characters except Eloise and the background. Yes, all the sprites will be done by a single sprite artist and will similar design to Eloise.

Yeah, it's best to leave it. I have been talking about with some people. It give it a little push then normal action ones. Making Yuuki adoptive mother will still devalue it and playing it as fake. It's better to go full on.

[eileen]

Bump!

It's been a while since we posted anything or got response. First, we will be moving the game to WIP forum to get more exposure somewhere in July. It will have a new title, logo, graphics and revise summary. The tournament is now called Martyr Bellum instead of Akuma's Bellum. Demon Lord Akuma still plays big role in the game but he won't be granting any wishing for the winner. Geared near Fate/Stay night with some characters model off it.

One changes is that Yuuki is now younger than what we have before. She is near Eloise's age appearance wise, blonde and gain a sword. You will see it when the new thread opens.

If you have any question of what changes then leave me here. If they aren't spoilish then I reply to thing.

Question:
Is the word length of 15k-30k good enough for episode?

Here is concept to end this post:

[eileen]

Update 10/18

For people wondering we are still working on Fatexheart.

Now then, we have a short update for you and sprite of the redesign of Eloise at the bottom.

New stuff that we added:

We will have choices for you guys that will effect future installment of the series. You can't date anyone beside the canon love interest but you get choices.

Redesign the sprites for the game.

Change from a single story installment to a story arc installment. Though, long story but longer wait though.


We are in the works for the demo of Fatexheart that will be release in early 2014 hopefully then we will be opening Kickstarter/Indiegogo to raise money to complete the work. The demo should contain about 30 minutes to an hour of story for you to play through. We should have screenshots upon when we receive them. I hope you give it a try once release and not be totally turn off by the incest.

If people are wondering what the redesign looks like then we got surprise for you

The redesign protagonist Eloise.

Don't forget to leave comment or question if you have any.