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Posted: **Wed Apr 24, 2013 8:02 pm**

This is my first Ren'Py so please tell me what i should change about my game and could someone please respond to let me know if they can make me a title picture thingy.Before i go on any further, ALL ANIMATIONS ARE FROM BASS AND ARE NOT MINE.

: Chaos-guy to choose from; chaos_blush.gif (31.51 KiB) Viewed 1186 times

: Konnin- guy to choose from; konnin_smile.gif (26.73 KiB) Viewed 1186 times

- Friend

: Kun- guy to choose from; kun_smile.gif (35.05 KiB) Viewed 1186 times

: Haru-your BFF; ari_happy.gif (42.9 KiB) Viewed 1186 times

-Your BFF

: you(Sianah); Sianah_smile.gif (46.47 KiB) Viewed 1186 times

-You(Sianah)

: Rin- friend; rin_smile.gif (48.62 KiB) Viewed 1186 times

- Friend

So I have barley started this yet and so far in my game, i have Seama's dream. I don't want to spoil this so i will only tell some.
Seama enters the meadow and sees a little girl and she looked upset. The girl does not answer anything Seama asks, and the girl leaves. the girl comes back bloody...

: creepy kid; kid_scarybloody.gif (37.39 KiB) Viewed 1068 times

That is all. My point of the game is choosing from these three guys and while doing this, figuring out what this girl is doing in every one of her dreams. Every dream takes place in a different area and sometimes the same. But one time, it is not a dream and becomes reality. Let's see how this ends.

This is my idea so far so check back every once and a while.

Posted: **Wed Apr 24, 2013 8:14 pm**

It's hard to comment on this game if you haven't posted a blurb about the plot. It appears to be in a school setting, but right now that's all we know. Some details about what you're planning on writing would definitely help people give you feedback. Also, who are Kun and Chaos? Are they friends? Rivals? Unrelated to you prior to the events of the game?

The art is very cute, though! I like the player character's expression and clothing a lot, and Konnin's sprite is my favorite out of the male ones. Some of the sprites you've uploaded (especially Kun) look rather pixelated, which I assume is a consequence of the upload? Also, I'm no expert on art, but Chaos' face looks somewhat small, and the line of the blush is extended onto his ear.

Overall, I really like the expressions and art that you've posted. I would need details about the plot before I could really comment on your VN, though!

Posted: **Thu Apr 25, 2013 9:11 pm**

HAHHAHAHHAHHAHHHAHHAHHAHHAHHAHHHAHHAHHHAHHAHHAHHHHAHHAHAHHAHHAHHAHHA KONNIN.. im so excited for this cookie :3

Posted: **Fri Apr 26, 2013 8:34 am**

The characters are already great.. but where's the description/plot of this game? o_o

Posted: **Fri Apr 26, 2013 7:37 pm**

There, i made the description bigger just in case you missed it but the plot is like, every where. mostly out of school though.

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