This is my History Black Knights
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This is my History Black Knights
Well , here's it ^^
Black Knights
This history is original
-Daniel kander is a secundary student. He wants to live in London. One day , his parents decide to realize that wish , but , really it was a very bad idea. When Daniel is for first time in London , his parents are killed by a "Dark Maiden". Dark Maidens are creatures who can to kill people with terrible powers , like the "Bloodstained Darkstar". Then , he's very very sad. But , a Dark Maiden helps him. He don't want to stay with a Dark Maiden , but that creature is different to the others. Is a very beautiful girl , called "Reesa". She's a good person , and she wants to kill the other Dark Maidens , so he asks to Daniel for help herself. Then , they're in a war , the "Crimsom Rose". It's a very bloody war , where is necessary to be a Dark Maiden , a Black God or a Black Knight. Daniel becomes a "Black Night" , and Reesa helps him in magic rituals and all that things.
Character description :
Daniel Kander:
Age: 16
Birthday: 10th of June
It's a very good person. It's really innocent , but , when he's in the battle , is the most terrible beast. He don't like to fight , and he seems is in love with Reesa.
Reesa von Brunhild:
age:16
Birthday: 3rd of December
She's a Dark Maiden , but it's a good creature. She uses her power for good things , not bad. But her true power is the seem of a beast. She is a hybrid , a vampire and a demon. But with Daniel , she's the best girl in the world.
Dark Maidens:
They're terrible beasts. They can use the "Bloodstained Darkstar". It's a very powerful attack.
Black Knights:
They're knights. They know how to fight very good , and they have a lot of magic attacks. Are very powerful too.
Well , this is a "little version" of the history.
Black Gods:
Are magus and alchemists very powerful. They can make illusions and very powerful attacks.
If anyone wants to help me in graphics , backgrounds , music , or to add a thing to the history , post freely
And also I ask that somebody helps me with the character art (Damn scanner , I have no one)
Well , I hope it likes you ^^
Black Knights
This history is original
-Daniel kander is a secundary student. He wants to live in London. One day , his parents decide to realize that wish , but , really it was a very bad idea. When Daniel is for first time in London , his parents are killed by a "Dark Maiden". Dark Maidens are creatures who can to kill people with terrible powers , like the "Bloodstained Darkstar". Then , he's very very sad. But , a Dark Maiden helps him. He don't want to stay with a Dark Maiden , but that creature is different to the others. Is a very beautiful girl , called "Reesa". She's a good person , and she wants to kill the other Dark Maidens , so he asks to Daniel for help herself. Then , they're in a war , the "Crimsom Rose". It's a very bloody war , where is necessary to be a Dark Maiden , a Black God or a Black Knight. Daniel becomes a "Black Night" , and Reesa helps him in magic rituals and all that things.
Character description :
Daniel Kander:
Age: 16
Birthday: 10th of June
It's a very good person. It's really innocent , but , when he's in the battle , is the most terrible beast. He don't like to fight , and he seems is in love with Reesa.
Reesa von Brunhild:
age:16
Birthday: 3rd of December
She's a Dark Maiden , but it's a good creature. She uses her power for good things , not bad. But her true power is the seem of a beast. She is a hybrid , a vampire and a demon. But with Daniel , she's the best girl in the world.
Dark Maidens:
They're terrible beasts. They can use the "Bloodstained Darkstar". It's a very powerful attack.
Black Knights:
They're knights. They know how to fight very good , and they have a lot of magic attacks. Are very powerful too.
Well , this is a "little version" of the history.
Black Gods:
Are magus and alchemists very powerful. They can make illusions and very powerful attacks.
If anyone wants to help me in graphics , backgrounds , music , or to add a thing to the history , post freely
And also I ask that somebody helps me with the character art (Damn scanner , I have no one)
Well , I hope it likes you ^^
Last edited by Blue Bunny on Tue Jun 10, 2008 1:21 pm, edited 1 time in total.
Re: This is my History Black Knights
oO why "daisku konna"? Why not "Daniel Kander"?
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Hmm...Daniel Kander......it seems a good name , and , may be I change the name to "Daniel Kander".Mikan wrote:oO why "daisku konna"? Why not "Daniel Kander"?
Thanks for the idea ^^
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I know it's trendy to use Japanese names, but also consider a broad audience if you can (one that my not be familiar with popular Japanese culture)
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I am also against using that name not because it's Japanese, but because it tries to sound/look Japanese and fails at it.Mikan wrote:I know it's trendy to use Japanese names, but also consider a broad audience if you can (one that my not be familiar with popular Japanese culture)
The main character has an interesting birthday by the way.
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Actually, I think the plot has a lot of potential.
The "Dark Maidens" and such, are they divine beings? Or are they just humans with "Dark Maiden/Knight/God" as an occupation? I only ask because Reesa is conveniently 16 years old. I would think that something as powerful as her would be ageless or hundreds of years old. ^^ Maybe I just need to know more about your world.
Also, make sure that your characters aren't too perfect ... right now they seem flawlessly good.
The "Dark Maidens" and such, are they divine beings? Or are they just humans with "Dark Maiden/Knight/God" as an occupation? I only ask because Reesa is conveniently 16 years old. I would think that something as powerful as her would be ageless or hundreds of years old. ^^ Maybe I just need to know more about your world.
Also, make sure that your characters aren't too perfect ... right now they seem flawlessly good.
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I wonder what Reesa looked like...
Nice idea, Me myself is a huge fan of Fantasy games, YAY!
Nice idea, Me myself is a huge fan of Fantasy games, YAY!
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The Dark Maidens are divine beings , yes. Are like monsters or so. But more elegant than the monsters.The same for Black Knights and Black Gods. About the Reesa's age , I think her age is good , because she's not totally a Dark Maiden , she's a hybrid. About my characters...well , Daniel is too innocent , and Reesa is too cheerful. But , who knows , may be I will change that things in their personalitymaselphie wrote:Actually, I think the plot has a lot of potential.
The "Dark Maidens" and such, are they divine beings? Or are they just humans with "Dark Maiden/Knight/God" as an occupation? I only ask because Reesa is conveniently 16 years old. I would think that something as powerful as her would be ageless or hundreds of years old. ^^ Maybe I just need to know more about your world.
Also, make sure that your characters aren't too perfect ... right now they seem flawlessly good.
I'm happy if my history likes you
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Oh, that makes more sense! She's half Dark Maiden. ^^
I am looking forward to your story (if you need help with English, just ask me), it sounds like a very fun world!
I am looking forward to your story (if you need help with English, just ask me), it sounds like a very fun world!
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so far the history is good and interesting...
can't wait for more...
*wonders what he can help with*
can't wait for more...
*wonders what he can help with*
I'm hidden and no one expects much of me... I just hope I don't disappoint anyone...
I'd rather fail doing something I love than succeed doing something I hate...
I'd rather fail doing something I love than succeed doing something I hate...
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Of , thanks , because my english is bad. If I need help with it , I will send you a PM.^^maselphie wrote: I am looking forward to your story (if you need help with English, just ask me), it sounds like a very fun world!
I read your signature text , and , if you like work with backgrounds , you can help me on that ^^honoreixix wrote:so far the history is good and interesting...
can't wait for more...
*wonders what he can help with*
so far the history is good and interesting...
Thanks for all^^ I'm very happy
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you must've misunderstood what i meant by that...
what i means is that i like to work even no one knows that i am working or exerting efforts... sorry bout that... ^^,
but if there's anything i can help with, i'd be glad to be of assistance...
what i means is that i like to work even no one knows that i am working or exerting efforts... sorry bout that... ^^,
but if there's anything i can help with, i'd be glad to be of assistance...
I'm hidden and no one expects much of me... I just hope I don't disappoint anyone...
I'd rather fail doing something I love than succeed doing something I hate...
I'd rather fail doing something I love than succeed doing something I hate...
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Oh , then , I was wrong. Don't worry. If you want to work in the preoject , send me a PM , or tell me what things you can do or what things you would want to do^^ If you can do anything I need , the drawing art , for example , or other things too , I will sent you a PM. If you have Messenger , you can add me at merchetirado@hotmail.com or send me a mail at mertifri@gmail.com or at blue_bunny_the_master@yahoo.eshonoreixix wrote:you must've misunderstood what i meant by that...
what i means is that i like to work even no one knows that i am working or exerting efforts... sorry bout that... ^^,
but if there's anything i can help with, i'd be glad to be of assistance...
Thanks for all the help , I'm very happy ^^
(Note: all you can to add me to your messenger or send me a mail , if you like ^^)
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