I'm currently writing a story that revolves a girl named Anya.
"New York city is no easy feat for Anya, a 21-year-old girl who escaped her broken home and alcoholic father. With help from her sister, she gets settled into an apartment and sets out to find the perfect roommate, hoping to find some stability in the uncertainty which is her life."
This story is about escaping, and what better place to escape to than New York City.
The story begins with Anya looking to post a listing for a roommate. You are given 3 choices 1)Craigslist 2)Reddit 3)Going through a real estate broker.
Each selection results in a different male character, with a different personality and storyline.
I love the VN's on here, but I don't really see real, gritty, raw emotions being portrayed as much. I want to be able to show that through my writing so there will probably be an age restriction. However, I am open to making some changes and having a censored version.
Here is a scene from a character I really enjoy writing.
Vern - WTF MAN WHATS WRONG WITH YOU
I hide behind the wall, hoping for Vern not to see me. He’s red in the face, yelling at the man that stands in front of him.
Man - C’mon Vern, you know how she was
Vern - YEAH I KNEW SHE WAS LIKE THAT, BUT YOU?? YOU, VIN?? I THOUGHT WE WERE HOMEBOYS MAN
Vin - Look Vern, I’m sorry man. You’re my day 1 and I regret that shit, but I was drunk and she came on to me
Vern - And you let her. You let my girl…my ex..You let Joanna come on to you
Vin - I was drunk man
Vern - That’s no excuse. You’re always fucking drunk
Vin lets out a sigh and sits down near the corridor
Vin - You didn’t love her vern. I don't know why you were in that relationship
Vern looks at Vin, teeth clenched, shaking his head
Vern - You don't know that man..
Vern - You don't fucking get to say who I do or don't love
Vin - You know this wasn't the first time she did it
Vern looks away
Vin - Ask Tommy and Rog down at the pub. They got good memory
Vin - We just ain’t have the heart to tell you that your girls a whore
Vern gets up angrier than ever, clenching his fist.
Make a Choice : What do I do?
A - Interrupt them
B - Don't do anything
C- Call the cops
So..considering this is the first time I'm working on a VN, this project is all over the place, but please let me know what you think so far.I hide behind the wall, hoping for Vern not to see me. He’s red in the face, yelling at the man that stands in front of him.
Man - C’mon Vern, you know how she was
Vern - YEAH I KNEW SHE WAS LIKE THAT, BUT YOU?? YOU, VIN?? I THOUGHT WE WERE HOMEBOYS MAN
Vin - Look Vern, I’m sorry man. You’re my day 1 and I regret that shit, but I was drunk and she came on to me
Vern - And you let her. You let my girl…my ex..You let Joanna come on to you
Vin - I was drunk man
Vern - That’s no excuse. You’re always fucking drunk
Vin lets out a sigh and sits down near the corridor
Vin - You didn’t love her vern. I don't know why you were in that relationship
Vern looks at Vin, teeth clenched, shaking his head
Vern - You don't know that man..
Vern - You don't fucking get to say who I do or don't love
Vin - You know this wasn't the first time she did it
Vern looks away
Vin - Ask Tommy and Rog down at the pub. They got good memory
Vin - We just ain’t have the heart to tell you that your girls a whore
Vern gets up angrier than ever, clenching his fist.
Make a Choice : What do I do?
A - Interrupt them
B - Don't do anything
C- Call the cops
Thank You (: