Work in progress: Heileen - romance VN

[N0UGHTS]

Mmm, I guess this thread could use an update. And I guess since I'm the proofreader, I get to... :gets all excited:

I finished proofreading Heileen chapters 1-4 about nine hours ago before this post. I've sent it to "jackie-boy" (HAH! I call all my male co-workers something ending with boy! Though I'm only assuming jack_norton's a boy here...) several times, because... Well, internet's going spazzo. Totally messing up my blog layout when I was trying to spruce it up, too. But enough about me. It turned out it was a good thing I was paranoid about whether my emails got through or not.

I guess he still hasn't heard from his old proofreader, or maybe he has. I don't know. All I do is sit in my dark room and type, type, type... backspace, type... All-in-all, I think I did a pretty good job, especially considering I haven't actually worked on a collaborative project in a while. Even though I really ddidn't interact with anyone... Type, type, backspace, type...

The characters are really likable. Though I admit, if they were really back in that age, the women would be so ostracised by a conservative community. :laughs: If you've seen Surviving History... Oh, you'll see... As for my favourite character... Cannot choose. (Though I love Lora's hair. Awesome character designer, whoever she is...) However, not all of the characters have been revealed to me yet. And they're changing. So, maybe I'll pick one by the end of the game...

[jack_norton]

I am replaying the first 4 chapters completely with all the various subplot and choices to see all of your work, so far I think you did great (even if I can't write in perfect english I think I can still spot when someone writes in good english). No the other proofreader unfortunately "disappeared" - but you're doing a good job. The only pity is that she was also doing voiceovers! but once the final texts are done can accept Mirielle offer anyway.

If I had to pick a character myself, my favourite one would be surely Lora, for obvious reasons there are still some characters that will appear just on chapter 6, which I'm currently writing.

[jack_norton]

Just a quick update - I've finished the webdesign of the official website http://www.heileen.com (of course the texts is temporary). Nothing new apart for some new screenshots
I've also almost finished chapter6 which is the most important of the game since from it you basically choose your path and a different ending.

[jack_norton]

Last update before beta testing: the story is complete and sent it to n0ughts for a "final review". It's huge, almost 30k words there are 3 different endings and 8 quests total to complete to get a different final score.

The art is all ready except for some backgrounds, which should be finished by next weekend. At this point I think I can safely say the beta version will be ready around 19-20th october and final release for end of the month, not too much delay vs my expected deadline of 15th october.

So once beta is ready will ask some people to test it. That's all for now

[monele]

Neat! I didn't expect this to be ready so soon o_o... Ouh, I'm eager!

[jack_norton]

Well n0ughts help was great. I could write straight in english knowing that someone would fix up everything and also add few extra phrases there and there. Much better than a straight translation and surely faster

[jack_norton]

Someone can please test those:

http://www.didone.com/games/HeileenTrial.exe (pc)
http://www.didone.com/games/HeileenTrial.zip (mac)
http://www.didone.com/games/HeileenTrial.tar.bz2 (linux)

is the beta demo version of the game. I tried on pc and works, on my mac yes but if someone else has a mac, would appreciate if he could try it, since I am not really sure is 100% bugfree.

Full game coming very soon, in 2-3 days max

[monele]

Ohboyohboy! *tries*

Mmm, unless it's a particular style statement, why these pauses when characters appear? Right at the beginning, I was like "uh....... yes?... oh, okay, gotta click uh? :/"

Gyuh, not enough time to check the rest but I like what I'm seeing ^_^. The quest thing is terribly intriguing and I can't wait to see how it plays out

[jack_norton]

Well I added the pauses because when was playing by clicking ( with key works fine) sometimes was skipping the first sentence after character appears. Can always change that since is a global function

[papillon]

The need to click to make dialog show up is a bit annoying, yeah. There's still a handful of proofreading errors here and there but nothing terribly major leapt at me, other than the line about a jaded horse which didn't make any sense.

Aw, man, no event CGs for the kissing? *pout*

[jack_norton]

Ok probably will remove that extra click then
Still some errors? maybe in the quests texts (I realized I didn't sent those to n0ughts to be proofreaded).

Yeah a CG for the kiss would have been cool...could think about it

[N0UGHTS]

The quests? Now that you mention it, I never did see the quest texts...

Just started downloading the demo. I've got a feeling that I should have edited those room variables too... I wasn't sure at first because I was afraid of messing up the game. Oh, and Marco is supposed to speak Engrish.

I'll edit my post later.

[jack_norton]

The quests? Now that you mention it, I never did see the quest texts...

Well I sent them pasted in the last email, but together with the whole script: so maybe they were "lost" in middle of all the text. Not your fault, I can resend those if you want

[N0UGHTS]

They were in the last email? Directly pasted? :checks: No wonder... I saw blocks of text and assumed it was Gmail showing the whole script (attachment) again. My bad.

[monele]

Well I've finished it once and will be exploring the other paths next ^^. I totally forgot the theme of the story and actually got led to it rather smoothly... Interest, disappointment... and then sudden surprise . I was totally in Heileen's shoes there XD.

There are still a few typos and sentences that could be turned better I think. I'll try to note them as I go through it again.

Side question : does Heileen use the new Ren'Py font thingie? (it'd seem quite fast, but who knows)