WIP_Fábula

[clua]

Hi everybody!
Recently i been working on this visual(its the second one using ren py
thanks a lot for the engine...I always wanted to make a vn ;_____________; )
named Fábula..
this small teaser is in spanish..but if i mannage to finish it. there will be an english version

hope you like it!--feedback apreciated
btw those backgrounds are not the finals! ;___;

oh crap i forgot..where i can get cool sound effects for the visual?
i used some of yume nikki.....D:

[JinzouTamashii]

Downloading. I can't speak Spanish but I'll get back to you anyway.

[Lanna]

I'm downloading it now as well. I don't speak Spanish, but I can still read a few things.

If the art you posted is from the VN (I'll just assume it is XD) as well, then that's another reason to download it. It looks really nice!

/edit
Played it right now. The art is absolutely gorgeous, I love the layout and the sound effects you chose are awesome. Great job so far! Can't wait to see more.

[clua]

JinzouTamashii:
thank you!! i will try to post the next demo in english!

Lanna:
haha i have a friend named like you(with one "n")
thanks a lot for taking a look at the visual!
i really like the bell sfx but i took it from yume nikki(since when i did the
first teaser of the visual i didnt have internet so i looked up in my hard disk for
something to use)im searching right now for some sfx simillar to that one

[electric]

Tu teaser es demasiado corto !

The drawing is very cute and beautiful, nice animation on the character's eyes. The music/sound effects are right on, and the whole feels pretty original. Best of luck with your visual novel.

[Mrs. Abject]

I can't understand Spanish at all, but I'm glad I took a look at this. The art is lovely and I really enjoyed the rabbits. Looking forward to the full version!

Also, you're a fan of Yume Nikki?

[ludeshka]

Hi! I do speak spanish, so I can comment a bit on the writing too.

Los dibujos están preciosos! Me encantaron tus colores y diseños. ^^

Mi única crítica:
Trata de no usar abreviaturas como "q" en vez de "que" y recuerda usar los signos como "?".
Cuando faltan esas cosas, en mi opinión hace que se vea como un chat, o un mensaje enviado por telefono celular mas que una visual novel.
Se pierde un poco el encanto que creas con tus dibujos tan bonitos^^
Es una opinión personal, nada mas, no tienes porque hacerme caso

Basically, very beautiful art, and characters that promise to be lovely. (But I'm not too crazy about the use of "chatspeak")
I also enjoyed the bizarre soundtrack XD
I'm really looking forward to play a longer demo (and the complete game, of course!)
Buena suerte!

[electric]

I agree with the above critic.