[WIP]『 black butterfly 』

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[WIP]『 black butterfly 』

#1 Post by lepapillonrouge » Thu Apr 08, 2010 9:23 pm

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What a beautiful voice that sings our future.

『 black butterfly 』 is an otome mystery game series where you play the character of Minami Takeuchi, a withdrawn and shy girl who lives in her cousins’ house after her mother, her only immediate family, became too sickly to work recently. The day before she starts school, she walks her cousins’ dog in the nearby park, when suddenly he runs off and jumps onto a startled brown haired boy near the park’s pond. Though she apologizes, he snaps at her before ordering her away.
However, when they try, they keep coming back to the place where they met.
Giggles follow, and suddenly the park darkens.

What would this chance meeting mean for these two?
Death?
Life?
Or something straddling in between the lines...?

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Minami Takeuchi
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"I don’t even know why, but...I think I might die.
Is this...revenge?"


The protagonist. She’s about 15 or 16 years old.
She always has her hair in the way of her eyes.
Can she see?
Even if she is shy, there are times where she cannot help but speak her mind.

Pomme
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‘Woof! Woof!’
Minami’s cousins’ dog.
He’s about two or three years old, according to them.
He’s quite intelligent, but also very playful.
He really likes Ritsu, a bit too much for his comfort.

Ritsu Ikeda
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"...ugh. I’ve wasted enough time with you.
Just leave already and I won’t say a word. Got it?"


That one boy that Pomme jumped for no reason.
He’s a rather serious boy, with his arms always crossed.
The glasses help too.
He's a bit arrogant, unfortunately.


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"Now now, it’s not nice to hurt a lady."

Makes you wonder who this is with all those question marks, huh?
She’s probably not too important, though.
Though how does she get her hair so curly in the front?

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Other Characters
Emiko Takeuchi - Minami’s mother. Although she’s sickly and can’t really get out of the house often, she’s pretty boisterous and loud. It’s an odd combination! But she loves Minami with all her heart and soul.
She also acts as a surrogate mother for Fuuko and Yuu, since their parents are often out of town for work.

Fuuko Takeuchi - Minami’s cousin, older by a year. A tomboyish girl who plays tennis in their high school. She’s protective of Minami, but gets sidetracked with all her other commitments.

Yuu Takeuchi - Minami’s cousin, and Fuuko’s older brother. He acts as an older brother to Minami as well. He’s often studying for exams or playing video games, in his room. Usually the latter.

Kazuya Sasakura - A random guy, who is in his third year of high school. A rather playful and positive person who likes to play basketball. Usually seen with Shin Amatsu.

Shinji 'Shin' Amatsu - A second year, who serves as Kazuya's 'conscience' of sorts. Somewhat snarky, but always calm.

~ more to come ~

Progress
Currently, I am done with the prologue, and now working on the first chapter. It’ll be a long ride, folks.
The script and programming are all being done by me!
Edit: The character art, on the other hand, is being done by Zanahoria, who has my eternal thanks!

Majority of the BG pictures are coming from Samu-kun. Thank you for uploading so many!
Using yu_eriyama’s wonderful tutorial. Thank you for the tutorial.

Music is coming from free sites. :P
Hopefully you’ll like my choices.

If you know where the quote above comes from, I’ll love you forever. ^_^v
And maybe you can proofread for me.
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Re: [WIP]『 black butterfly 』

#2 Post by Victoria » Fri Apr 09, 2010 10:20 am

Why animals? I like the way you drew a dog =D But this guy, Ritsu Ikeda is troubling me, I seriously wondered did he break his neck something like that, because his shoulder looks... weird (don't take this a wrong way, I'm not artist at all, my drawings look like a 5 year old child took pencil and tried to draw.) I like the way you are doing eyes and hair =D
I'm keeping an eye on this project =)
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#3 Post by dstarsboy » Fri Apr 09, 2010 12:06 pm

It actually looks like you use some pretty advanced coloring techniques (to me, at least). Mixing gradients in with several layers of cell shading. I like the highlights in the hair too. I think you just need to work a bit on your proportions and you'll be golden, however, you have a distinct style so if you like that identity I wouldn't sacrifice it or try to fix it in any way.

Keep up the good work! Can't wait to play it!
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#4 Post by IonicMomo » Fri Apr 09, 2010 12:42 pm

I just have to say...the dog is adorable!! I love the idea of having a (nonhuman) animal as a real "character" in the story. You don't see that often enough. :D I agree with dstarsboy that there are some issues with proportion/anatomy, but I'll shut up now because you're much better at coloring than I am (then again, I don't really color at all...thank you, fill tool). I don't have any art or programming skills, so I can't help you there, but I'll be rootin' for you from behind the scenes. (Maybe I can help proofread when you get to that stage?)

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#5 Post by lepapillonrouge » Fri Apr 09, 2010 3:19 pm

Thanks for your feedback so far :D

Victoria: Oh god. XD;
Yeah, I was unfortunately aware of that...I really need to fix it. I suppose if I move the neck to the right a bit. I guess I just wanted to draw everyone else more. (...I prefer drawing girls, actually, if you can see the mystery girl. She was my favorite to draw so far. XD)
It's a shame that I was aware of it too late.
As for Pomme...well, I don't know. It looks odd.
Not as odd as Ritsu's shoulder though XD;

dstarsboy: ^_^ I usually just find tutorials on dA with an art style that I like, and copy.
Hmm...I wonder if tooaya (the artist for Re: Alistair) made tutorials...
XD Proportions...yeah, I see. Thank you :D

IonicMomo: Pomme's pretty important. XD; ...and I like dogs, so I had to have a dog in this story.
He's actually based on one of my dogs.
I should look at some anatomy tutorials too~
XD Oh sure, why not? I'm planning for the first game to be done before I start college this fall. Hopefully you're not busy during the summer. ^_^;
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#6 Post by Victoria » Fri Apr 09, 2010 4:39 pm

I don't think you have to change other characters XD And why do you think that the dog looks odd? I really like him this way, but of course, you can try to do the other way, so we can tell which one is better =D But yeah, I think you would probably need to overdo Ritsu (maybe, as you said, move the head right and try to change the upper body part? And maybe make neck little bit more... vertical? XD)
I can try to help you with something, but I'm pretty much new in this. Though I could try to learn programming, since I'm kind of interested in that and I'm a quick learner. So, if you need help, I can give you a hand ;D
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#7 Post by lepapillonrouge » Fri Apr 09, 2010 11:52 pm

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Say, is that a bit better?
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#8 Post by Blue Sky » Sat Apr 10, 2010 12:45 am

A LOT better. It's really good, in fact. :)

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#9 Post by lepapillonrouge » Sat Apr 10, 2010 12:48 am

Why, thank you.
His fashion sense improved too XD

There's also a screenshot of the main menu on the first post, photo courtesy of Samu-kun :)
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#10 Post by LVUER » Sat Apr 10, 2010 5:07 am

Supernatural, a girl and a dog... reminds me of a certain game from Capcom...
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#11 Post by Victoria » Sat Apr 10, 2010 6:50 am

Now he's great =D
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#12 Post by IonicMomo » Sat Apr 10, 2010 9:07 am

lepapillonrouge wrote:His fashion sense improved too XD
That was the first thought that came to mind when I saw the new drawing! Great job with fixing the sprite. :D
Also, I really like the main menu image. I think it's really beautiful actually. The colors are great, especially for a photograph.
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#13 Post by lepapillonrouge » Sun Apr 11, 2010 12:33 am

LVUER: Hah? I can't really think of the game off the top of my head...I wonder what it is.
XD Actually, the main game I like from Capcom is the Phoenix Wright/Gyakuten Saiban series...

Victoria: Hooray! That's good!
...I hope the rest of the guys look good too.

Momo: XD; I thought a coat would be more appropriate for him. (He's actually rich, so...yeah.)
^_^ I filtered it a little though. The original portrait was a bit brighter.
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#14 Post by LVUER » Sun Apr 11, 2010 3:46 am

Haunting Ground. It's a survival game where you (a girl) have to escape from a castle. You must play hide-and-seek with your chaser which is practically unbeatable (except when you finally arrive at the boss fight). And in the game, you will depend a lot on your dog. I think it's White Siberian Wolf? Just like Pomme ^_^

The game is like playing Clock Tower, plus a dog training game.
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#15 Post by lepapillonrouge » Sun Apr 11, 2010 4:22 am

Oh wow, it really sounds interesting.
XD I'm not really sure what Pomme is when it comes to dog type.
Though, my dog, who Pomme is based off, is a labrador retriever...mix.
We have no idea what he is either, actually.

XD I called him Potato.
I'm such an AIR fan. XD;
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