Magic Memoir WIP (I don't even KNOW)

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Re: Magic Memoir WIP (I don't even KNOW)

#16 Post by Aleema » Fri Jun 18, 2010 5:28 pm

Starling wrote:Yes! Amelia is a redhead!... ... Red heads UNITE!!! (...okay so mine is dyed but so what D<)
And that still counts ... doesn't it? xD

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#17 Post by Starling » Fri Jun 18, 2010 5:31 pm

Aleema wrote:
Starling wrote:Yes! Amelia is a redhead!... ... Red heads UNITE!!! (...okay so mine is dyed but so what D<)
And that still counts ... doesn't it? xD
In my world yes :) I've also been a redhead so long though that I sometimes forget I'm actually a brunette....
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#18 Post by Showsni » Fri Jun 18, 2010 6:25 pm

Is Micheal's name supposed to be Michael? I've never heard of anyone called Micheal...

Nice work so far! We really are inundated with otome games in progress at the moment, aren't we?

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#19 Post by J. Datie » Fri Jun 18, 2010 7:21 pm

Showsni wrote:Is Micheal's name supposed to be Michael? I've never heard of anyone called Micheal...
Micheal appears to be some kind of variant of Michael. Or maybe it's a typo, I dunno.

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#20 Post by MaiMai » Fri Jun 18, 2010 8:13 pm

@Blue Sky-- Awww, thanks for the love
@Starling-- I think I wished at some point to have red hair, but I am Asian, so I must appreciate straight black hair :B. I'm surprised Micheal and Briar are already getting popular (esp. Michelle-- Micheal o3o)
@Showsni-- J. Datie is right, Micheal is just a variant of Michael. :)

A rough draft of the prologue has been written and Amelia side art continues today.
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#21 Post by playswithtribbles » Fri Jun 18, 2010 8:46 pm

The game looks great, but that Shia LeBouf GIF is rather frightening.

I'm sure it will visit me in my nightmares, along with various clips of Dragonball Evolution
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#22 Post by MaiMai » Fri Jun 18, 2010 10:07 pm

Sorry about that playswithribbles, but that GIF was sitting in my photobucket for a long time and needed to be used.

Annnd Teen Amelia side sprite done! Adult Amelia will be started today :)
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#23 Post by MaiMai » Sat Jun 19, 2010 11:57 am

Question for you LSF people!

Adam with longer hair (to his back), slightly longer (past the shoulders), or just keep it as is?
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#24 Post by azureXtwilight » Sat Jun 19, 2010 11:59 am

I think it's already good to keep him, since long-haired guy is Briar's position. :)
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#25 Post by Aleema » Sat Jun 19, 2010 12:05 pm

MaiMai wrote:Question for you LSF people!

Adam with longer hair (to his back), slightly longer (past the shoulders), or just keep it as is?
He's fine how he is! ;)

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#26 Post by PrettySammy09 » Sat Jun 19, 2010 1:26 pm

I LOVE this concept. And Adam looks kinda hilarious, to be honest. (In a good way I mean!) Sunglasses + Leather Jacket + Dorky Cute Smile = Winner in my book.

And the main character is awesome looking too!

Terrifying Shia LaBeouf GIF is terrifying, k thx. 8|


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#27 Post by MaiMai » Sat Jun 19, 2010 10:10 pm

Adult Amelia is halfway there! After her, the sprite for Briar will be started on next :) Prologue is halfway done as well. Although, after I'm done with the prologue, I'll be focusing on finishing the sprites. And then I will focus more on writing and when writing is done, I can plan event CGs and see if I can finish a demo.

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Here's a small excerpt from the prologue to showcase my terrible hand at humor.

Amelia: "Alright class. The story I want you to work on tonight is the first part of Paradise Lost by John Milton. I expect a response paragraph tomorrow about the setting."

An unanimous groan is heard. I frown and push up my glasses.

Amelia: "Two paragraphs then."
Class: "What?!"
Amelia: "Three for your inappropriate response and bad attitude. Seriously, you kids these days. I try to give you easy work, but you shove it back into my face without so much as a thanks. If it weren't for me and other literature teachers, you kids would be reading terrible teen romances with vampires, werewolves, and goodness who knows what else? A silly story about a magical school? A talking mouse on a motorbike?"
Student: "Uh, Miss Steinbeck, not all of us read Tw--"
Student: "Shut up Jason, or she'll give us more homework!"
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#28 Post by sheetcakeghost » Sun Jun 20, 2010 12:17 am

Your terrible attempt hit a fun note. She sounds (or reads rather) like she spreads her annunciation pretty thickly. Was that something you were shooting for? If it's just your writing style you may want to make sure the people around her speak in a more natural tone. Especially with teens about. Don't be afraid to leave out an article here or there.

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#29 Post by MaiMai » Sun Jun 20, 2010 12:27 am

This is why I need an editor for my writing, you have good advice serenity-blue ;_; Although in my defense, everyone else only has two lines in that excerpt so there's not much to judge the tone on
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#30 Post by Yunome » Sun Jun 20, 2010 2:36 am

MaiMai wrote:Adu Seriously, you kids these days. I try to give you easy work, but you shove it back into my face without so much as a thanks. If it weren't for me and other literature teachers, you kids would be reading terrible teen romances with vampires, werewolves, and goodness who knows what else? A silly story about a magical school? A talking mouse on a motorbike?"
Student: "Uh, Miss Steinbeck, not all of us read Tw--"
Student: "Shut up Jason, or she'll give us more homework!"
Hahaha :lol: Twilight haters of the world unite!! I don't think your hand in humor is terrible at all! I like it =] Also I can't wait for this game :D It looks so nice! And I love your artwork =] The only thing that kinda bugs me is that fact that Amelia doesn't seem to have a nose in her adult picture! I can kinda see it in her teen sprite but not at all in the adult :( Maybe I'm just not seeing it? But other than that i think your art is very pretty and fits the character very well!

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