Starry Night Blues [GxB] (BG help!!)

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Re: Starry Night Blues [GxB] (Recruiting!!)

#16 Post by Ren » Sat Jun 26, 2010 9:51 am

I'd say the first one, personally.

The contrast between the green/grey jacket and her hair and skin (cool against warm colours) helps in making her more interesting. The reason why the third one doesn't work so well: her eyes are too light and don't provide enough of a contrast to actually draw the attention to them (and we all know the eyes are very important!)

Also, on the criticism of the way you draw guys: I wouldn't worry too much for the moment - it seems to me that he perhaps looks a bit younger than he should, but he's till a much better attempt than many guys I've seen in VNs drawn even by well respected artists, here. :3 The chin could do with being less pointy, but you're already off to a very good start.
Try not to polish your lines *too* much, there's something about the sketchiness of them that is very charming and distinguishes your stuff and makes it more interesting.

Perhaps your lines could do with being a bit more "relaxed": try using the kind of drawing you showed here as a base, in your program of choice, and then lower the opacity of he layer it's on and go over the lines again, with smoother, faster gestures, without worrying too much if you get small bits you didn't plan to have. It'll give your drawings an even fresher look than they already have!

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Re: Starry Night Blues [GxB] (Recruiting!!)

#17 Post by SugarlessGiiRL » Sat Jun 26, 2010 1:37 pm

Ren wrote: Also, on the criticism of the way you draw guys: I wouldn't worry too much for the moment - it seems to me that he perhaps looks a bit younger than he should, but he's till a much better attempt than many guys I've seen in VNs drawn even by well respected artists, here. :3 The chin could do with being less pointy, but you're already off to a very good start.
Try not to polish your lines *too* much, there's something about the sketchiness of them that is very charming and distinguishes your stuff and makes it more interesting.

Perhaps your lines could do with being a bit more "relaxed": try using the kind of drawing you showed here as a base, in your program of choice, and then lower the opacity of he layer it's on and go over the lines again, with smoother, faster gestures, without worrying too much if you get small bits you didn't plan to have. It'll give your drawings an even fresher look than they already have!
oh my, now that you say it they really look pretty young... :shock: but thanks a lot for the advises, i'll make good use of them!! :D
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#18 Post by Cain0425 » Sat Jun 26, 2010 9:00 pm

wow this cool i want play it

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#19 Post by machinist » Sun Jun 27, 2010 2:40 am

i like 2 anyway yay another GB

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#20 Post by SugarlessGiiRL » Mon Jun 28, 2010 8:49 am

thanks :D i have a lot of time today, so i'll try drawing guys again, sigh~
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#21 Post by sayuri » Mon Jun 28, 2010 11:06 am

Good luck! I really like your style, the only thing I have to point out is that the eyes seem to be opened really wide. Maybe it's because the entire iris is visible.

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#22 Post by littleramyun » Wed Jun 30, 2010 12:45 pm

Hey SugarlessGiiRL, I've been trying to pm you but it hasn't been going through >.< Please send me your email addy. Thanks!
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#23 Post by Doggy Nino » Wed Jun 30, 2010 5:49 pm

Wow I love the girl drawings! This art style is very cool! Nino-chan supports you all the ways!!!
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#24 Post by SugarlessGiiRL » Wed Jun 30, 2010 11:54 pm

littleramyun wrote:Hey SugarlessGiiRL, I've been trying to pm you but it hasn't been going through >.< Please send me your email addy. Thanks!
i send you a email :D
Doggy Nino wrote:Wow I love the girl drawings! This art style is very cool! Nino-chan supports you all the ways!!!
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#25 Post by celectis » Sat Jul 24, 2010 2:30 am

I like your art and coloring style! : D I like the first but I kind of want to see a mix of the first and third style in coloring. A little darker with the outlines maybe? I love how you did the eyes for the third style really XD but if I had to choose, I'd go with 1 for clarity's sake.
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#26 Post by Lace » Sat Jul 24, 2010 2:45 am

wow this games looks cool ^^

cant wait till this gets out :D

oh and i like the 2nd one of the drawings
pink looks more femenine ;)

i would love to help but im too new ^^
maybe go to photobucket??? (im sorry if this doenst help at all)

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#27 Post by kinougames » Wed Jul 28, 2010 10:29 am

The kanji you have there in the background of your game logo picture: 星夏夜
This doesn't mean anything altogether like that, and also, the middle character is "summer" and I am not sure if that is what you wanted it to mean.

(Altogether, it looks like three different words, or like you are trying to use the kanji for a made-up word. "Star", "Summer", "Night".)
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#28 Post by haruka » Thu Dec 16, 2010 6:27 pm

I can help....
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Re: Starry Night Blues [GxB] (BG help!!)

#29 Post by afu » Sun Dec 19, 2010 1:35 am

Good luck with this, the art (as everyone says) looks great! ^^ Looking forward to playing it!
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Re: Starry Night Blues [GxB] (BG help!!)

#30 Post by WinterFall99 » Thu Jan 20, 2011 2:31 am

i like the sketch on the first one and the color on the third one :D

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