Xai: The Shadow [WIP] [GXB]

[Ominias]

My first attempt at using Ren'py~

Basically, it's an otome game where you are a girl from modern-day Earth who was kidnapped on her way to the store by this sarcastic, annoying, and slightly stoic dude with red eyes. This guy took you to his 'home', which is basically a big castle. The game starts as he wakes you up a week from that time. That guy - named Xai Skia - says he's a demon prince. You both go to the dining hall and see Xai's "slave" named Aero, although he is treated well. He takes you to the road between the barriers of the human lands and the demon lands, as you come to accept that you aren't on Earth anymore. Here you have a choice between entering the human lands until you have to meet up with Xai again at the road, or follow *coughstalk* Xai into the demon lands. Whichever way you took you get to meet some of the obtainable guys. After that, the King wants to see you. He explains that the reason you're here.....

........is because you have to kiss someone.

More specifically, kiss with love in front of a person that's sealed to wake them up.

Who sealed them in the first place? Why did Xai specifically bring you to this other world?

......Who are you gonna have to kiss eventually?

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That's the summary so far. XD

.....And all I have of the script. XDDDD

Obtainable guys:


Xai Skia, Aero Ane, Recon Shou, Cross Ri Alling, Ko Atalo, and Nova Kazuki.

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Story suggestions, art tips, critique, etc. appreciated! ^-^

EDIT: Forgot to add. Most of the stuff is going to be on DA
http://ominias.deviantart.com/

[Lanna]

Ohh, I love being able to choose different routes. Sounds like it's gonna be fun!

Also, Xai is really cute. <3 (Though he probably wouldn't like me saying that at all, haha.)

[Ominias]

No, probably not. Haha...^^

Thanks! I hope it's going to be fun...^o^

[dstarsboy]

Looks great, I love the characters, the only thing I would suggest is being careful with your line depth/width (whatever that's called). There are some general rules (although some vary) about when to use thin/thick lines. If you read up on that, I bet your characters would look really awesome.

Keep up the good work!

[Ominias]

Thank you! ^-^

Yeah, if I can find a good tutorial, I'll try to improve on my drawing skills. Generally, though, it's hard for me because when I try to go over sketch lines on a new layer or something, they turn out horrible and generally not what the sketch looked like. ^^;;

[Lanna]

If you're not already doing so, you can also try drawing on a larger canvas and then resizing the picture afterwards. It'll make everything look a lot cleaner Or if you like your sketches better than your lineart, you could also try experimenting with that - if done right, sketchy styles can look really awesome, even in VNs.

[Ominias]

Hm, alright. ^^ Never actually thought of re-sizing, actually, besides when I sketch too large for the canvas, so I have to resize the drawing (which happens a lot >.>). Therefore, since the head is the first thing I draw, it's always too big and needs to be resized...generally not the body, though.

Yeah, I've seen sketches that look awesome, but I really don't know which way is 'right', per say. Most of the time, I sketch, but places like hands and hair only look right because there's a mass of lines there, and if I try to clean it, it doesn't look like a hand or that lock of hair anymore. I pretty much don't know how it looked like that in the first place. -_-;;

By the way, the characters ^ weren't sketched beforehand - I just went with a basic idea and went with the flow.

[Ominias]

Some screenshots of the game so far. As you can see, I can't draw furniture for my life...-_-

[\Nish/]

Or, you can also ink by hand and scan them in. Sometimes you will have better control of the lines that way, and by starting out with thinner lines, you can gradually increase your line weight in places that need it.

Keep going, the story sounds interesting.

[Ominias]

That's true, but the main problem for me with that is there is no undo button. XD Also, since my parents are always watching dramas when I want to scan or are working, and the scanner's connected to the downstairs computer....plus the fact that anything I scan turns out that you can't even see the lines...yeah. ._. Scanning is a looong process, so actually doing everything digitally is better for me.

Thanks!~ I've got one ending done!!!

.....The go home before anything happens ending. XD

[Pyonkotchi]

Cute. That Nova guy intrigues me :3
the coloring is fantastic, you do need to work on anatomy and making the lines a little better though.
I do wonder, what program do you use for your art?
maybe i can give you some tips o3o

[Ominias]

Intrigues you? XD How so?

Thank you, and yes, I suppose. Lines are a problem for me, coloring for me is generally easier.

I use Photoshop 7,and please do. XD

[azureXtwilight]

I like the premise of the story...
Say, how does the main heroine look like?

[Ominias]

Okay, first...

O.O It's Azuuuuuure!!! Hiii!!!! 8D

*Ahem* Anyways, I think she'll look like this, though if people don't like her I can redo her. ^^;;

[azureXtwilight]

Hiii!
It's nice, although it's better if you make the head smaller

Here's some lineart help:

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=63PR4yxB1jQ
http://wyldflowa.deviantart.com/art/Pho ... l-14354146