Under Lock & Key WIP (ON HOLD)

[Lolita_Soft]

(The title dosn't have much to do with anything really ._.;; )

Plot: Mikuru is an average high school student with no real plans for the future. With average grades and a social life that could use some inprovement, the only thing she stands out in is kendo. Yep, just a normal teenager...except the fact that she's had amesia for the last 5 years. She never thought much about it until she started having a strange reacurring dream where she and three others are fighting shadowy creaturs. But one day, the creaturs apear in real life and start to attak her. A bamboo sward isn't much good when fighting demonic monsters but luckily shes saved by three cute guys! They tell her that shes actualy a princess named Pacifica from (a curently unnamed) ulternate universe and they are her body gaurds. When she was 11, her memories where erased and she was sent to live in our world to protect her from those who would wish her harm. Originaly, her memories and powers would return to her on her 18th birthday, but unfortunently, a dangerous power has alraedy found her. Now She must balance school, fighting evil and maybe even romance.

Lol wut.

Characters
Mikuru/Pacifica


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Pretty much a normal girl. She's confident, opinionated and dosn't take crap from anyone. Shes independent and know how to stick up for herself. Being a very indempendent girl, Mikuru dosn't let others do for her what she can (or thinks she can) do for herself. Despitr being rather stubborn, she is a kind girl that means well. Mikuru is rather petit but that dosn't stop her from being quiet athletic. She is the captin of her schools female kendo team.

Alios


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The oldest of the three body gaurds, he is also the most level headed. Alios is a kind young man who always seems to have things under control. Being the gentle person he is, he dosn't believe in unessisery killing and often tries to save anyone he can. He always seemes to be smiling but it's hard to tell wether it's always genuine.

Valintine


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The most intimidating of the three, Valintine seemes to be an emotionless, stone-faced killing machine. Because of his cold and distant personality, it's hard to talk to him, there for little is known about him. He and Alios often don't get along.

Gabrielle


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Gabrielle is the least experienced and emotionaly imature of the three. He has a short fuse and says whatever comes to his mind without putting a filter between his brain and his mouth. He'll often say this to purposly hurt or anger people. He seems to be constatly trying to prove himself in one way or another.

(Seems as though I have to characters that sound like jerks ^_^;; )

Seeing as though this will be my first VN I'm bound to have problems so expect many questions from me XD;;
Currently, I'm not sure what I will need assistance with because most of UL&K is still in the planning stages...
Although I am thinking of making it voiced, so anyone interested with that is surley welcome XD

Tell me what you think, yes?

[dstarsboy]

I like it. The art looks great (although the guys look like girls, but that's ok). The MC sounds/looks very appealing as well. Keep up the good work.

[Agent-J]

It looks like an interesting project. I'm especially interested in how the story and history will play out in game.
The characters all seem to have a distinct look- I'm especially enjoying the long hair all round.
Once you've done a rough version of the script, you might want to re-read for typos and such of course, but you seem to have a strong idea of where you're taking this.

[LunaVampirePrincess]

KOOOL I LUV THE INFO AND ALIOSSS!!!!!!!!

[Aetheria]

Wow, your art is super cute! The story sounds interesting too... it's sort of an anime cliche, but it's a fun one.

Two quibbles, though:

1) Mikuru has had amnesia for 5 years but she's just a normal teenager and doesn't think about it? That's really really improbable. I'm not sure players are going to buy that. It'd be a lot more plausible if she was just swapped as a baby. Besides, doesn't she have a place to live and some sort of family and so on? Normal teenagers have lives outside of school, so you'd have to account for that somehow.

2) "Gabrielle" registers as a girl's name to most English-speakers. You might want to change it to "Gabriel", the masculine form, or something equally able to pass as a guy's name.