Got it. I'll take a knife to the adverbs, and keep an eye out for them in the future. Thank you so much for pointing that problem out. I'll also try to spice up a few of the "X and then X" sentences, too.
The art in the demo was all sketched on paper, then colored with a mouse, which is probably why it looks so jagged. I just recently got a tablet, so I've been trying to clean up some of the sprites and such recently. I'll probably post some new screenshots for comment soon.
As for the doctor, part of it is supposed to be the Dion is flat out paranoid, if not a little oversensitive about people. He takes offense to things that a lot of people would wave off as friendly teasing. He's really just bad with people. Though, the fact that this isn't clearly stated in some way is probably a problem. I'll try to bring a bit more attention to it, so his behavior toward Jacob makes more sense.
As for paths, I plan to have a rather large number of them. Each character has their own stories and intentions, and you can change the course of things depending on what Dion wants to do. I don't have a completely certain ending count, but I promise more than two.
Nice, I think you're the first person to report doing that on the first run through, actually. I won't say anything about
, but it will be fully addressed in the full version. No worries.
I'm also really glad to hear that I succeeded in making things creepy.
As for the ending:
It's not Marianne. That's actually a major character who otherwise doesn't show up in the demo. I'll probably put some kind of character teaser on the topic for him soon.