[Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#61 Post by Melinoe » Fri Nov 25, 2011 1:01 am

mysterialize wrote:I have to admit, I'm a bit paranoid about people playing the demo as it is, mostly because I've since noticed some of the really stupid mistakes I made during it (The It's/Its confusions are flat out embarrassing), and I think I may reupload the demo with some of the problems fixed.[/size]

Though, do all you can to critique it. I really want to hear what you have to say!
I think that's a little unnecessary... I mean, seriously, who are we to go, "roflmao this guy used the wrong it's I'm never playing this stupid game ever in the world ever screw punctuation"

Do whatever you want, though. It's your game. As long as it comes out, anything's fine by me. (Even though it doesn't really matter if it's fine with me...)
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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#62 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Fri Nov 25, 2011 1:32 am

Melinoe wrote:
mysterialize wrote:I have to admit, I'm a bit paranoid about people playing the demo as it is, mostly because I've since noticed some of the really stupid mistakes I made during it (The It's/Its confusions are flat out embarrassing), and I think I may reupload the demo with some of the problems fixed.[/size]

Though, do all you can to critique it. I really want to hear what you have to say!
I think that's a little unnecessary... I mean, seriously, who are we to go, "roflmao this guy used the wrong it's I'm never playing this stupid game ever in the world ever screw punctuation"

Do whatever you want, though. It's your game. As long as it comes out, anything's fine by me. (Even though it doesn't really matter if it's fine with me...)
I agree, that is what a demo is for anyway :) Plus, I'm pretty shocking with it's and its and their and there, so it's forgivable (in my opinion). I'm sure there will be more important things for me to think about ^_^b

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#63 Post by Kura » Fri Nov 25, 2011 2:28 am

I'm so excited to see that you're working on this again! Sorry to hear about your laptop--as I read that post I thought "oh no, did she lose the VN?!" but I'm very glad it's all backed up safe and sound. Just in case, I'll keep the alpha/beta/whatever I had around.

And I'll have to echo what folks have already said: little grammatical errors in a demo are probably not a big deal.
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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#64 Post by mysterialize » Fri Nov 25, 2011 4:13 am

Okay. I'll take you guys' word for it and try not to let it bother me. >> I suppose time would be better spent on making the final version, rather than cleaning up a demo that won't be relevant once the full game is out. Thanks.

Also, thanks for the offer with the demo beta, Kura. I don't need it now, but maybe one day my everything will explode and I'll need it. XD Knowing my luck, it will probably happen.

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#65 Post by mysterialize » Wed Nov 30, 2011 1:45 am

La dee da, new character art post.

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#66 Post by Kura » Wed Nov 30, 2011 7:52 am

Whoa! New character looks ridiculously awesome. I'm officially intrigued and now extra-eager for the rest of this game if only to find out who this is and why they think bandages are acceptable clothing.
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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#67 Post by Zatch » Wed Nov 30, 2011 8:30 am

I play this a while back. :lol: It was pretty cool 8)

Interesting perspective of the protagonist. still don't like him I'll come back with more comments *places a brb sign on the counter*

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#68 Post by mysterialize » Mon Dec 05, 2011 12:02 am

Who needs clothes, anyways?

I'm glad you liked it, and I'm interested to see what all you have to say about the demo. I'm also really curious about what you dislike about Dion? Is that you feel he makes a bad character, or do you just dislike him as a person?

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#69 Post by mysterialize » Wed Dec 07, 2011 2:53 am

Playing around with possible menu designs. This would be the save screen:

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and a version with some black edges, to possibly make it a little easier on the eyes:

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#70 Post by broken_angel » Wed Dec 07, 2011 3:17 am

Ooh, awesome menu graphics!

I would go with the second one (with the black lines) personally, just to make the save spots stand out more.

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#71 Post by Kura » Thu Dec 08, 2011 4:04 pm

Nice! I really love the background of the save screen. I don't think the black lines are really necessary (though they don't look bad either).
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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#72 Post by Arcanum » Thu Dec 08, 2011 5:35 pm

Ohh everything new is beautiful *_* The save screen is great, though I personally like the first one better because the scraps of paper feel more natural. And sheesh bandages are totally appropriate clothing. I just wish more of those handsome characters were wearing these ;D <- seriously has a crush on every character in this game, maybe with the exception of Marianne for looking too young

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#73 Post by CombatEye » Sat Dec 24, 2011 9:04 pm

I just finished through playing the demo a bunch of times. I think I got most of the endings. The story is really intriguing and the creepiness in some parts is palpable. It looks like the full version will be great!

One weird thing I noticed in the demo (but that's not particularly important):
It's possible to get Jacob to mention details about the abandoned house incident without you talking to Trevor about it. (At the clinic the next day after the ghost? part.) I think it happened after I just went outside and got taken at gunpoint.

Anyways, good luck!

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#74 Post by mysterialize » Wed Jan 04, 2012 8:26 am

Combat Eye: Thank you! I'm really glad you like it. As for the Jacob thing, that's definitely a bug. I'll have to fix that immediately. Thank you so much for pointing it out! No one else has noticed that one.

Arcanum: ... Well, I have to say, that's not quite something I expected something to think about my characters, but hey, I'm not complaining. XD Though I far from consider myself someone capable of drawing attractive people.

Also, I've made a topic in the new Demos and Proofreading section, which also has the announcement that I have, finally, finished the massive fourth chapter, and am now looking for proofreaders. If anyone is interested, I'll give anyone who helps credit, and will also toss in a character portrait of whatever they want drawn.

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Re: [Demo!] The World is Made of Paper

#75 Post by LadyLylalie » Wed May 23, 2012 2:03 pm

Hi, I'm quite interested in playing the demo, but as it's been uploaded on megaupload, it's impossible to get currently. Could you upload a mirror (windows version)?

Thanks

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