~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
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~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
Okay, this is my very first VN so cut me some slack~
It would be great if you guys can give me some advice/suggestions
Thanks
Idol Crush is a Visual Novel game that gives its readers an opportunity to find Saino Aru Academy's Miyuki Watanabe's high school sweetheart. With three gorgeous school idols to choose from, Miyuki has the way to somehow seduce one of them. With fabulous sprites & background pictures from Bass, Idol Crush develops intriguing story for readers to follow.
Sprites: Bass
Background: Bass
Music: Bass
Features
3 Boys with 10+ endings
Progress
Story : 100%
Script : 100%
Programming : 100%
Character designs : 100%
Sprites : 100%
Background : 100%
Music : 100%
(as of 1/13/11)
Characters:
It would be great if you guys can give me some advice/suggestions
Thanks
Idol Crush is a Visual Novel game that gives its readers an opportunity to find Saino Aru Academy's Miyuki Watanabe's high school sweetheart. With three gorgeous school idols to choose from, Miyuki has the way to somehow seduce one of them. With fabulous sprites & background pictures from Bass, Idol Crush develops intriguing story for readers to follow.
Sprites: Bass
Background: Bass
Music: Bass
Features
3 Boys with 10+ endings
Progress
Story : 100%
Script : 100%
Programming : 100%
Character designs : 100%
Sprites : 100%
Background : 100%
Music : 100%
(as of 1/13/11)
Characters:
Last edited by Snowflower on Thu Jan 13, 2011 4:04 am, edited 9 times in total.
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That's a cute logo! Glad to see the story is already mostly done, since that's the hardest part! With graphics out of the way, you'll have this done in no time, and that makes me happy. Jun and Kan look similar, but I'm sure they act differently.
Good luck.
Good luck.
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done and done
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
So far it's pretty alright for a first VN judging how it looks with the characters and background information. With that many endings and CGs, I'm assuming that the character's paths are in-depth? I'll be keeping an eye on this one ^^.
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
Just a few thoughts...
Why are all three guys insanely popular with the girls? It's not necessarily a bad thing, but it does make them all seem a bit too similar as characters, IMO. It also would make the romance seem unbelievable if Miyuki is not only an average high school student, but a shy one at that.
Why are all three guys insanely popular with the girls? It's not necessarily a bad thing, but it does make them all seem a bit too similar as characters, IMO. It also would make the romance seem unbelievable if Miyuki is not only an average high school student, but a shy one at that.
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
selenity136--
Thank you so much. The full game will be on the completed page on hopefully by the end of the month. If not, early next month. Now, I know why people make VNs. I love seeing + responses
Sapphi--
I see your point, (I've added and deleted some stuff from the character info. Tell me if that makes more sense)
but...
Miyuki is best friends with Jun (the notorious player) since toddler days. They've had their ups and downs. Miyuki secretly has a crush on him. The most logical boyfriend in this would be him since he is the childhood friend.
Ichiro is Jun's senior/Miyuki's tutor (later on developed). But he's the kind of person who's oblivious to girls' feelings. That's why he has never had a girlfriend himself. He's actually really awkward around girls if he puts his heart to it fully. The only reason why girls are trailing behind him is because once all his shallow factors are put together, he's all girls' fantasy. If his good ending is achieved, Miyuki and Ichiro would be each other's first relationship partners.
Kan is somewhat of a social outcast. He is extremely anti-social. Therefore, the girls find him unapproachable. No one had the courage to actually speak to him. He's attractive in appearance; so girls, who have the tendency to fantasize themselves with hot guys, obviously talks about him. Miyuki is thesecond girl to approach him (more on this in the story). Kan, having such friend, opens up to Miyuki.
I don't know if this explain some stuff... hopefully
& I think it makes more sense if the game is played?
Thanks for the comment!
Thank you so much. The full game will be on the completed page on hopefully by the end of the month. If not, early next month. Now, I know why people make VNs. I love seeing + responses
Sapphi--
I see your point, (I've added and deleted some stuff from the character info. Tell me if that makes more sense)
but...
Miyuki is best friends with Jun (the notorious player) since toddler days. They've had their ups and downs. Miyuki secretly has a crush on him. The most logical boyfriend in this would be him since he is the childhood friend.
Ichiro is Jun's senior/Miyuki's tutor (later on developed). But he's the kind of person who's oblivious to girls' feelings. That's why he has never had a girlfriend himself. He's actually really awkward around girls if he puts his heart to it fully. The only reason why girls are trailing behind him is because once all his shallow factors are put together, he's all girls' fantasy. If his good ending is achieved, Miyuki and Ichiro would be each other's first relationship partners.
Kan is somewhat of a social outcast. He is extremely anti-social. Therefore, the girls find him unapproachable. No one had the courage to actually speak to him. He's attractive in appearance; so girls, who have the tendency to fantasize themselves with hot guys, obviously talks about him. Miyuki is the
I don't know if this explain some stuff... hopefully
& I think it makes more sense if the game is played?
Thanks for the comment!
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
I like the art. It's pretty and I wish I could draw as good as you do. And I can see that your game is very close to being finished so I'm looking forward to that XD
From a first glance it looks pretty much like any other typical high school VN, though I'm fully aware that this is just a summary and that there's probably more to the story and characters in the game itself. Good luck in finishing it!
From a first glance it looks pretty much like any other typical high school VN, though I'm fully aware that this is just a summary and that there's probably more to the story and characters in the game itself. Good luck in finishing it!
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
icebluehost--
although I would loveee to take credit for the art, it's from bass.
and as I type, I am working on the script to be finished
thanks
& usually, high school VNs are all pretty similar, but hopefully mine can survive?
although I would loveee to take credit for the art, it's from bass.
and as I type, I am working on the script to be finished
thanks
& usually, high school VNs are all pretty similar, but hopefully mine can survive?
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
WOW, they're all really good looking. At first I reacted the same as ice.
Me: *glances at pics* *falls on floor* TEACH ME TO DRAW, VAMPIREZERO-SENSEI~!
Cool that you're giving credit. I need to look into bass, myself!
The characters all have endearing qualities, and I'll be keeping an eye on this.
Me: *glances at pics* *falls on floor* TEACH ME TO DRAW, VAMPIREZERO-SENSEI~!
Cool that you're giving credit. I need to look into bass, myself!
The characters all have endearing qualities, and I'll be keeping an eye on this.
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
haha,
If I had the ability to draw LIKE THAT, I will most certainly teach them to you
However, my powers lack in that department.
What did you think of the characters & their sprites?
I am mostly drawn to Kan because I love a little bit of a bad boy image
but Ichiro has me captivated with his silver hair~
If I had the ability to draw LIKE THAT, I will most certainly teach them to you
However, my powers lack in that department.
What did you think of the characters & their sprites?
I am mostly drawn to Kan because I love a little bit of a bad boy image
but Ichiro has me captivated with his silver hair~
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
oh my god this looks gorgoeus! i love your art very much!!!!!~
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
I agree. I'm also into the bad boy image XD XD LOL Appearance wise though, it's hard to tell for me. They all look good. <3 <3 And it only means that your art fits the story perfectly. Three gorgeous school idols indeed!
Er...this may sound like a stupid question but Bass is a person...right?
Er...this may sound like a stupid question but Bass is a person...right?
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
No, it isn't a person. It is a visual novel creation tool that has free resources like backgrounds and sprites. http://bassnovel.com/
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
Yup, Auro Cyanide is correct.
It's another VN creating program, but it allows creators to find their own stuff within the site.
I personally believe it is an AMAZING place for newbies to get their hands on. It's easy.
I used Bass mostly because i'm new to this programming area.
For my next one, I hope to find artist(s)
Thanks for the love~
It's another VN creating program, but it allows creators to find their own stuff within the site.
I personally believe it is an AMAZING place for newbies to get their hands on. It's easy.
I used Bass mostly because i'm new to this programming area.
For my next one, I hope to find artist(s)
Thanks for the love~
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Re: ~Idol Crush~ WIP [Critic?]
I'll probably try Jun first. I've got a soft spot for the victorious childhood friend.VampireZero wrote:haha,
If I had the ability to draw LIKE THAT, I will most certainly teach them to you
However, my powers lack in that department.
What did you think of the characters & their sprites?
I am mostly drawn to Kan because I love a little bit of a bad boy image
but Ichiro has me captivated with his silver hair~
And the ladykiller in love. He's got both so this should be interesting.
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