[Kinetic Novel | COMPLETE] Soul & Heart

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[Kinetic Novel | COMPLETE] Soul & Heart

#1 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Thu Mar 10, 2011 2:06 am

COMPLETED: http://lemmasoft.renai.us/forums/viewto ... 11&t=12802

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"Feelings are, as they say, forever."

It was once the land of dreams, feelings and happiness.
The nation filled with smiles and joy.
Where each person learns how to dream, and strive for it.
Where tears were an expression of a freedom to express a sorrow long kept in the heart.
Where memories are treasures greater than any more jewel.

Unfortunately, that was a long time ago.

Now, the effects of war and tears in the nation had brought on a world without feelings and memories.
No one knows what feelings are, except for very few people.
No one dared to be sad, to be happy.
No one knows how to dream or reminisce a memory.

Dreams, memories, tears... these things are considered a sin.
A sin which only few people know about and can do freely.

Happiness is temporary.
Dreams will reach nothing.
Tears are a sign of weakness.
Feelings caused despair and hurt.

It was the feeling of singing a one-note song.
And one girl breaks the silence.



Once, when the chance showed up, Sirius risked everything to get once into the records room to get one piece of data she wanted, which is the identity of her parents. This ruined her life, as she was caught due to "stealing" of information and dealing physical injuries. She regretted everything she did in that day. But one year after her stay in prison, she had to be transferred to a different section of the prison area.

In there, she met Cetus, a "woman" who got her gender removed, and Daena Blackstar, a young appointed general who started guarding their cells as part of her training on "discipline". Little did she know they will be part on the next turn of events that will change her life...

As time passes by, her life gets worse as memories of long ago started coming to her, as if a lone spirit awaking from a long sleep. With the medium of dreams she was able to look at other people's hearts at the past... and on her own, which brought on the realization of what is behind her own mysterious past. The stories makes the past more tangling, more confusing... It triggers one event that will break each others' trust to everyone.


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Sirius
A teenager, whom has been convicted of "information theft", and her genetic stature was disrupted, resulting on odd medical conditions, changing eye color and a side of her hair in a different color (her hair is white really). She has been convicted for a year until she has to transfer cells. She usually breaks the prison rules like laughing and cursing. Her body is able to wean herself off the chemical that erases memories, and as a result, her mind reminisces moments of other people from years ago through dreams.

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Cetus
A fellow convict Sirius met during her transfer of cells. She has been convicted of "illegal marriage", and thus almost everything of her femininity is removed, while her husband was killed by lethal injection. She is a bit harsh, and like Sirius, she violates the prison rules a lot. She almost never gives up. She was brought down to position by personal matters, until it came to the point that she does crimes herself. She was never caught, until she got married and the illegal marriage pact was broken when her husband was executed.

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Daena
A general one rank lower than the head general (you can call him a 5-star general), which is her father. She was the replacement for the previous general who was killed by a highly guarded convict. Daena is kinder than the other generals, due to the fact she was trained to be a general by her mother, not her father. She is somewhat different from the other generals in terms of attitude, but still, she doesn't seem to trust Sirius and Cetus when she first met them...

There are a little more characters, but then these three are the main characters.

The whole premise will be in grayscale, due to lack of time / matching-theme issue.

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I'll be referring to myself as Lumen only.

Sprites: Lumen
CGs (Lineart): Nebi, Lumen
CGs (Coloring): Tag-, Lumen
Backgrounds: mugenjohncel
Script/Story: Lumen
Preliminary Editor: night_serenade
Editors/Proofreaders: Shadow, RemnantDream, Wright1000


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Help is appreciated. Thank you! ^__^
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#2 Post by mint-and-chocolate » Fri Mar 11, 2011 11:58 pm

Just a lil' bit of a question.

Is this inspired by The Giver by Lois Lowry?
lol i'm some inactive member here so yeah

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#3 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Sat Mar 12, 2011 12:04 am

mint-and-chocolate wrote:Just a lil' bit of a question.

Is this inspired by The Giver by Lois Lowry?
A little. Only some concepts.
But the rest are kinda developed in my own imagination.

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#4 Post by Kael » Sat Mar 12, 2011 3:46 am

This one reminds me so much of the movie Equilibrium.(So... awesome) Could be interesting in the execution. Don't ask me why, I tend to wield a volatile imagination.

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#5 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Tue Mar 15, 2011 3:40 am

Thank you ^___^

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Daena Blackstar ^___^

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#6 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Thu Mar 17, 2011 7:52 am

Edited Daena Blackstar, and finished the sprite :

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It's supposed to be all grayscale, but then I added a bit of color in it to make it look a bit better. ^____^
I might edit it later on so that the eyes are the only thing that has color.

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#7 Post by Elenakiara » Fri Mar 18, 2011 4:19 pm

Oh my! :3 Your art is getting better every time! :3 Can't wait to play this and I can actually survive the long wait since it's for NaNoRenO! xDD So, not too long! @_@

My homework and assigments are all due by the end of the month anyway...
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Re: [NaNoRenO WIP] Soul & Heart

#8 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Fri Mar 18, 2011 11:22 pm

Elenakiara wrote:Oh my! :3 Your art is getting better every time! :3 Can't wait to play this and I can actually survive the long wait since it's for NaNoRenO! xDD So, not too long! @_@

My homework and assigments are all due by the end of the month anyway...
Thank you so muuuuch~!!! :D
[It looks a lot better because I sketched it first on paper then I traced it on Photoshop.... x)]
and we have just ended our finals... all I have to do is review for the division tests and I can make gigantic progress ^_____^
I'd do Cetus and Sirius next.... they are a lot easier to do that they only wear hospital gown-like prison outfits... They both have weird hair though XD)

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#9 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Wed Mar 23, 2011 10:34 am

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Edited the main menu layout. :D

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#10 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Sun Apr 10, 2011 9:08 am

Finally had a non-spoiler-ish screenshot :

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#11 Post by platonicheart » Sun Apr 10, 2011 9:14 am

The art looks nice! I also like the way your mind works :D i'll be looking forward to this game! Goodluck! :D

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#12 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Mon Apr 11, 2011 10:52 pm

Haha, thank you! I'm happy you like it :D

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#13 Post by pondrthis » Tue Apr 12, 2011 1:12 am

Reading the OP, I was like, "SYNOPSISGASM..."

And then I saw "a girl named Sirius" and I was like "c-c-c-c-c-c-combo breaker".

The strange names broke the mood T.T but that art looks as good as the synopsis.

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#14 Post by Lumen_Astrum » Tue Apr 12, 2011 1:21 am

Strange names? They are constellation / star names LMAO xD
But thank you xD

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#15 Post by pondrthis » Tue Apr 12, 2011 2:26 am

Lumen_Astrum wrote:Strange names? They are constellation / star names LMAO xD
But thank you xD

How many people do you see on the street named Ursa Major or Aquarius or anything like that o.O? They're strange names! I'm not saying they aren't preestablished proper nouns, they just aren't proper nouns which I've ever seen refer to a person.

And you're welcome, it looks awesome!

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