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#16 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Tue Nov 15, 2011 9:55 am

Number 4 I think. I feel the others look like they take more care then that type of character would do, it that makes sense.

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#17 Post by Tag- » Tue Nov 15, 2011 9:56 am

For someone of her personality, I'd say I like number 2 or 4 best :D
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#18 Post by JustAnotherMe » Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:02 am

Hmmm hmmmm... I think number 4 is good too. Maybe I'll use number 4 design then. Still don't know about the clothe she wear. Is it good enough for her personality?
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#19 Post by Auro-Cyanide » Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:07 am

I think she should either wear something soft and feminine, or something really relaxed. That kind of outfit would be annoying to wear if you are trying to do chores or you aren't feeling well. What you wear if you were trying to do what she was doing?

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#20 Post by JustAnotherMe » Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:10 am

I usually just use t-shirt for almost every occasion. Well -me-... ^^
Hmmm... might as well draw the clothes design too, with number 4 head.
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#21 Post by JustAnotherMe » Tue Nov 15, 2011 10:54 am

Well, here it is. Her clothe design. Gah! (I wish I know about fashion)

Annnndd... the other chara. Junichi. Butler (yay!)

And another: Ichiro. Young master.
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#22 Post by Kura » Tue Nov 15, 2011 6:59 pm

For Yukiko, I think the sort of careless charm of the fourth outfit would suit her.

I like the second hair for Junichi. Long hair pulled neatly back seems appropriate for a character playful enough to tease but responsible enough to do his job well.

And I'm afraid I don't have any particular opinion on which hair would best suit Ichiro, though I do just aesthetically like the third one best.
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#23 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Tue Nov 15, 2011 11:52 pm

Hmm....I agree with the short hairstyle. As for her clothes...I also go with the 4th one. Seems to be just right when it comes to cleaning. The shorts would ride up sometimes. (Wedgie of doom) The dress looks too pretty to clean in. Leggings/pants would be annoying to change if they got wet when she goes down on her knees. And long sleeves are usually a bad idea to wear as well since they'd get wet as well.

For Junichi, I like the 1st and 2nd hairstyles. They just scream to me...."angeeeeeeeeeeel".

As for Ichiro...I actually prefer the 2nd one considering his "delinquint past". (Or however it's spelled). 3rd one for some reason reminds me of Kaius from (P)lanets. Then again lots of guys have long bangs covering half of their face. XD
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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please?

#24 Post by JustAnotherMe » Wed Nov 16, 2011 12:42 am

So... the 4th clothe, the 2nd Junichi, the 2nd Ichiro (the third one is called -emo-)? Anyway, Ichiro would suit best with a dyed brown hair, eh?
I'm gonna put more design for the other chara if I have time. Well, maybe tomorrow or tonight (considering it's midday right now here.)

Anyway, thanks for the feedback, everyone!! ^^
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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please?

#25 Post by TsukiShima » Thu Nov 17, 2011 2:32 am

Wow, imaginations, right Jam? I was imagining Yukiko to be those kind of Geisha girl, wearing kimono and with relatively long beautiful hair.. I guess I always got that idea due to those samurai things..
But for me, the style I found attractive is no.3. But the one fits for her is no.4 xD

Beside, if it's really into 'my type' I would for Junichi 1 and Ichiro 2. But what I'm most shocked is that Ichiro had glasses! Gah! I hope he looks pretty handsome behind those things.

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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please?

#26 Post by JustAnotherMe » Thu Nov 17, 2011 4:35 am

Ahahahaha! I want to go out from the stereotypes. But there'll be sprites with kimonos of course, since the setting is another dimention of Japan. ^^
Hmmm... taken into consideration. I'm so confused right now... @_@
And... yeah... I hope he will look so GOSSSSHHH HAWT... I hope...
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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please? (update1)

#27 Post by JustAnotherMe » Thu Nov 17, 2011 2:49 pm

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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please? (update1)

#28 Post by Sunlit-Dreamer » Thu Nov 17, 2011 9:03 pm

Ooh, red and white. A nice color combo. *heels remind me of....Dorothy...curse you Wizard of Oz with those red slippers!* Reminds me of a school uniform. XD But those are usually good to clean in if they're old.
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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please? (update1)

#29 Post by JustAnotherMe » Fri Nov 18, 2011 1:21 pm

Uhm... yeah... I think so too (even though I never keep my old school's uniform /shot)
Wizard of Oz?? @_@ I realized that after I see your feedback!

Uhmmm... might as well reduce the quality of the coloring, because I predict this game will need a HUGE amount of pics... God save the me...
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Re: Help me choose the design of my chara, please? (update1)

#30 Post by Celestine » Sat Nov 19, 2011 1:41 am

For Yukiko I'd pick 2nd or 3rd. Wouldn't care so much about appearance as much as she would comfort in clothes. Since she's sickly.
I'd pick 2nd from last or last set of clothes.

Junichi 2nd or 4th.

Ichiro 1st,2nd, or 3rd just don't feel it for the last.
But the 2nd or 3rd mostly.

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