Critique please? (Characters of Imitation Heart)

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Critique please? (Characters of Imitation Heart)

#1 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Thu Nov 03, 2011 3:15 pm

Hi there. I've posted this picture in the Skills Development section because I want to get some feedback on it. This is a character design of the Main Character of my VN Imitation Heart: Ayaka Fuji. For now it is just her head, but I will finish the rest of her body. It's slow going because I have to scan each picture and re-color them on GIMP or Paint.NET or something like that... Eventually I will have body pics for all the characters posted. Please let me know what you think.

I know my shading is a little shoddy, but I'll try to improve it. I don't really like the shape of the eyes, so I might change that too...

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Ayaka Fuji
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Re: Critique please? (Characters of Imitation Heart)

#2 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Thu Nov 03, 2011 4:52 pm

Finally have Ayaka's picture finished.
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Re: Critique please? (Characters of Imitation Heart)

#3 Post by CosmicKitty » Thu Nov 03, 2011 5:31 pm

Unless she's supposed to be a ghost, there is no color to her skin at all. You used cast shadows okay, but you have no lighting. You need to pick a light source and adjust your shading to it, the hair is just pillow shaded from the top. Also, her eyes need more color and her hand look like it's hacked off above the wrist.

Some tutorials that will help:

Folds:
http://browse.deviantart.com/resources/ ... s#/d37rt9o
http://shattered-earth.deviantart.com/a ... -215670954

Lighting:
http://shattered-earth.deviantart.com/a ... -217101538
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Re: Critique please? (Characters of Imitation Heart)

#4 Post by YonYonYon » Thu Nov 03, 2011 5:32 pm

a little bit about anatomy
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Re: Critique please? (Characters of Imitation Heart)

#5 Post by Scarlet-Kokoro » Thu Nov 03, 2011 11:44 pm

Thanks for the input. I am re-doing the character now. Hopefully the clothes will look better this time.
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