Zephys poetry

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Zephys poetry

#1 Post by zephiel » Sun Jun 29, 2008 4:34 pm

for all the misery n pain,
for all that makes you go insain,
all the sorrow still in side,
from the fear that makes you hide
all the blood you have to blead,
all the graves you have to read

this is for you, all my love so true
if i could, and i would,
do any thing you want
even if id get caught,
no chains can keep my heart apart
from you

and i still wander in the dark,
hoping one day to see a spark,
and a maby your ember of love so true,
cause you know ill love you too,
don't forget me, i wont forget you
ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ
......................ZZZ
.................ZZZ zuu, zenthosa nara verr nehi zunu.
.............ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

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Re: Zephys poetry

#2 Post by skythnir » Thu Jan 15, 2009 11:30 am

great stuff!
can you post more of your poems?

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Re: Zephys poetry

#3 Post by zephiel » Sun Mar 15, 2009 5:03 pm

I seek the end, of what iv become, and wat misery will rend
and if death is the toll, to a broken heart I sold this soul
and now you all will die.
If tears were ice my heart would be frozen in place,
my skin frost biten, my life force smolderd.
If darkness is the way to stay, this fate, this game we play,
and in all hard ships, till judgement falls, hatred tilts and the flames washes away the cold.
and once again you all shall die...

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waves pound on the beach shore,
the sky is dark, it is night,
i step int to the cooll black waters,
never to come out, never, again
down i go, into the water,
till only my head is above the water
than i lie down, down down into the cold
wwashed away, and then i sleep...
ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ
......................ZZZ
.................ZZZ zuu, zenthosa nara verr nehi zunu.
.............ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZ

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Re: Zephys poetry

#4 Post by lordcloudx » Wed Mar 18, 2009 1:14 pm

Are you by any chance an advocate of freespelling?

Also, on your last bit of prose, I can definitely see some fragments of multiple thoughts/messages, but they don't seem to connect with each other very well or at least I fail to see the connection.

"hatred tilts and the flames washes away the cold." I like this line. Flames washing away the cold. Very creative play of words.
How do you make your games? I see. Thank you for the prompt replies, but it is my considered opinion that you're doing it wrong inefficiently because I am a perfushenal professional. Do it my way this way and we can all ascend VN Nirvana together while allowing me to stroke my ego you will improve much faster. Also, please don't forget to thank me for this constructive critique or I will cry and bore you to death respond appropriately with a tl;dr rant discourse of epic adequately lengthy proportions. - Sarcasm Veiled in Euphemism: Secrets of Forum Civility by lordcloudx (Coming soon to an online ebook near you.)

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