Lolita's art! Critiques welcome~

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Lolita's art! Critiques welcome~

#1 Post by Lolita_Soft » Tue Apr 05, 2011 11:24 am

Please tell me what you think!
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#2 Post by CDRW » Tue Apr 05, 2011 7:26 pm

Warning! I know nothing of art theory or the sort!

I love the first one. It's just all sorts of awesome. The only thing I would change is to add a tiny bend in her right elbow to give more sense of movement.

The second one is cool too, but I can't figure out what you were trying to do with the expression and she looks like she's off balance but trying really hard to hold her pose.

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#3 Post by LVUER » Tue Apr 05, 2011 7:52 pm

Not bad, though could use some correction...
One note though... from your username, I kinda hope finding some loli art. But after I opened your thread... "WHERE'S THE LOLI!!!" ToT
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#4 Post by Samu-kun » Wed Apr 06, 2011 1:50 am

I raise a motion that LVUER should inherit my old title of "King of the Lolies"

On that note too, I was expecting loli art as well when I opened this thread... Ya know, for someone who proclaims herself Lolita Soft, the drawing style really isn't what you expect!

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#5 Post by Lolita_Soft » Sat Apr 09, 2011 6:10 pm

More~
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#6 Post by Alera » Sat Apr 09, 2011 6:28 pm

It's interesting to see you're trying a variety of styles.

Maybe soon you'll find the one that you feel most comfortable with and the style will become more constant. ^^

For now you're showing really nice works- keep it up!!!
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#7 Post by YonYonYon » Sun Apr 10, 2011 2:14 am

If you don't mind critique...

Colouring is good. But what happened with anatomy? Especially with their heads

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Also your demon girl at firs post is crying. She is in pain D:

I'm sorry if I was too rude.
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#8 Post by MaiMai » Sun Apr 10, 2011 2:41 am

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I don't mind your first and third critiques, but the second one is Panty and Stocking w/Garterbelt style after all, it IS sort of alien like stylistically :lol:
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#9 Post by YonYonYon » Sun Apr 10, 2011 3:08 am

Select + transorm = much better result

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English is not my native language... So I'll show you what I think is right

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#10 Post by Greeny » Sun Apr 10, 2011 5:31 am

YonYonYon wrote:If you don't mind critique...

Colouring is good. But what happened with anatomy? Especially with their heads

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No offense, but you outlined a part that seems clearly not a part of her head in the picture.
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#11 Post by YonYonYon » Sun Apr 10, 2011 8:13 am

@ Greeny
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#12 Post by platonicheart » Sun Apr 10, 2011 8:56 am

Hmm...first of all, I thought this thread has a "LOLI ART"...but to my dismay there is none.... I guess i kinda misunderstood the thread. The first picture is good, but as for the second one, i think you should consider about the perspecctive that you are going to use. Because from my point of view, it's like she doesn't know where to face. It's like this: Her face, it is either you wanted her to face sidewards or upwards but I think that the way you drew it is quite poor. The face anatomy somehow is incorrect. Then, as for the upper body, *ahem...her breast looks like somewhat weird because of the way you drew the cloth foldings. But i think, if you could fix those corrections, your drawing may improve.

I hope you don't find my criticisms too harsh or take it negatively, i just think that you could do better :D

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#13 Post by Lolita_Soft » Sun Apr 17, 2011 4:18 pm

Same pic, different styles of coloring XP
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Cell shading...
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#14 Post by Alera » Sun Apr 17, 2011 5:57 pm

Ohooo~ Cell-shading VS soft-shading! That's really nice! >w<

Though I think you need some darker shadows on the first one, or it looks like it has some weird lighting.
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#15 Post by Snowflower » Mon Apr 18, 2011 3:34 am

Lolita_Soft wrote:Same pic, different styles of coloring XP

I really like your soft shading picture.

the clothing's colors are really good.
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