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A Day in the Life of Minato Arisato

(4/6/09)

Midnight was not the best time to be stuck in the middle of the streets with nobody to turn to for aid, but Minato Arisato was not like average people. He was able to adapt to anything thrown his way, with great proficiency that was bound to stun even the best in the fields that he would put himself in for whatever reason. Still, keep in mind; however, that he had experienced this phenomenon before in his home in Seattle, but due to the time zone differences, it was at 7 in the morning when it did occur. The phenomenon was where people had mysteriously transmogrified into coffins, even the ones he was staying with in Seattle. He still had yet to see people unaffected other than himself, but he did get an extra hour to do whatever, before going to school at least.

Still, it was a pain to use electronics in this environment, as evident through his MP3 Player not working. He figured that it was best to look at the directions to the dorm that he'd be staying at, head to the dorm, and then figure out what the hell was going on wrong, considering the fact that he never knew that time zones would have this effect on him at all. So, off he went, walking from the train station to the dorm, which wasn't far enough away to destroy the time delay, and found the dorm with relative ease.

It came as a shock to him that the building had electricity running at the time, but it was uneventful to get there, so he discarded the shock and went on inside. It was fully lit, for a time when it was impossible to have that occur normally, which would've left him just mildly interested, while taking off his earphones for his MP3 Player, except he heard a young boy say to him, "You're late. I've been waiting a long time for you."

Minato turned his head to where the voice came from and looked the boy over. He had an old-fashioned jail outfit on, which didn't say much about him other than he wasn't normal. He had black hair, a mole under his right eye, blue eyes, and had mysteriously moved over to in front of him, as with a snap of his fingers, he says, "Now if you want to proceed," he gestures his hand to a red notebook that appears on the desk, "please sign your name there."

The book mysteriously opens, and the boy says, "It's a contract. Don't worry; all it says is that you'll take full responsibility for your actions. You know, the usual stuff." All this time, Minato's eyes were quivering with fear that he might sell his soul to the devil, but after a bit; he calms down and signs his name in the Kanji that made it.

The boy then takes the contract and says, "No one can escape time. It delivers us all to the same end. You can't plug your ears and cover your eyes to the truth." With a gesture of his hand, the Contract disappeared from sight.

Reality seemed to kick in finally, as the shadowy nature of the time made it known, and the boy said, as he vanished into the shadows, "And so it begins."

As Minato was shocked as to what to do, he heard a girl yell at him, "Who's there?" He turned to face the girl, and saw that she wore a pink cardigan, a neck choker sporting a heart, and a black miniskirt. As she pulled out a gun that was on her leg, another girl yelled out, "TAKEBA, WAIT!" The first girl and Minato looked over at the corner and saw a redheaded beauty wearing a white cardigan and a black skirt, with a red bow on her cardigan.

Finally, time kicked back in, and Minato's music came back on in his MP3 Player. The girl addressed as Takeba looked at the other girl, and realized that she should be grateful for this to have happened.

(4/7/09)

Soon, the older girl walked over to them, and said to Minato, "I didn't think you'd arrive so late. My name is Mitsuru Kirijo. I'm one of the students that lives in this dorm."

Takeba asks Mitsuru, "…Who's he?" because she wasn't sure how to handle this particular scene.

Mitsuru responded, "This is Minato Arisato. He's a transfer student. It was a last minute decision to assign him here. He'll eventually be moved to a room in the boys dorm."

Takeba looked rather worried, and asked, "…Is it okay for him to be here?"

Mitsuru looked confident in herself and in Minato, and said, "I guess we'll see." She addresses him and says, "This is Yukari Takeba. She'll be a junior this spring, just like you."

Yukari cheered up a bit at that, and said, "…Hey."

Minato, worried that the people living here were breaking the law, asked, "Why do you have a gun?"

Yukari looked shocked, and said, "Huh?" Then she calmed down and said, "Well, it's sorta like a hobby… well, not a hobby, but…"

Mitsuru picked up on what Yukari was trying to say, so she said, "You know how it is these days… It's for self-defense." Looking pleased with herself, she added, "It's not a real gun, of course." After that bit, she added, "It's getting late, so you should get some rest. Your room is on the second floor, at the end of the hallway. Your things should already be there."

Before Minato could protest to having to sleep so soon, due to the fact that he lived in Seattle for the last 9 years with his aunt and uncle and their family, Yukari said, "Oh… I'll show you the way. Follow me."

So, as Minato got dragged away, he felt that this would be a day in the life for him from now on. He just hoped that nobody would force him to die or anything.

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Xamusel - Fourth Place!

•Creativity Score: 3
•Theme Application Score: 4
•Readability Score: 3
•Comments Score: 3
•Total Score: 13/20
Comments:
- Difficult to follow. (-)
- Phrasing didn't always make sense. (-)
- Good character physical descriptions. (+)
- Good arrangement. (+)
- Decent script, for an introductory scene. (+)