Proofreaders need for CAFE 0 (closed)

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Proofreaders need for CAFE 0 (closed)

#1 Post by Chu-3 »

I need proofreaders for my project, CAFE 0 The Drowned Mermaid.
The game is commercial, but sorry, I can't offer you a payment.
Though, I'll give the game for free for people who helps me.

There are 20112 words for the whole scenario, and I need the proofread to be done within a week.
And..... I need a sample of your proofread. So, can you first try to proofread the story section at my site? the site is http://www.roseverte.net/cafe0/eng/
the text that need to be proofread is attached below.
(I'll ask people that more experienced than me first to decide the proofreader.)

Thank you.

Edit:
Thank you for the applies. PM sent to the proofreader I'll use.
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Last edited by Chu-3 on Sun Aug 28, 2011 4:00 am, edited 3 times in total.

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Re: Proofreaders need for CAFE 0

#2 Post by Desu_Cake »

Here's my edited version :)
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Re: Proofreaders need for CAFE 0

#3 Post by Mink »

Word of advice: you may not want too many proofreaders, because how people read things can vary.

(By this I mean...say you wrote 'I don't feel good'. That's actually incorrect and should be 'I don't feel well'. You might get two different opinions, because while the former is grammatically wrong, it tends to be what people actually say. More natural would probably be the former, more correct the latter. On the other hand, the latter could also show someone has a more proper way of speaking)

TL;DR: It's good to have more than one proofreader, but I'd advise you don't have, say, ten. That could cause confusion.

Also, here's mine. If you want me to explain any changes, I can if you want. (I offer that because I like people to explain changes to me. <x<)

I sat for like ten minutes mentally debating the use of 'drank' VS 'drunk', otl;;;
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Re: Proofreaders need for CAFE 0

#4 Post by Chu-3 »

Ah no, I won't use ten. lol.
maybe around 3 :3 *waiting for more applicants

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Re: Proofreaders need for CAFE 0

#5 Post by OTM »

Well I have some free time so I decided to give this a go.

I made some changes and reworded some things but not too much.

I'd love to help out with a project-got too much free time on my hands and have a writers block too.
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Re: Proofreaders need for CAFE 0

#6 Post by swimmingkoi »

So I drank too much coffee, couldn't sleep, found this randomly, and quite possibly got carried away.

I wrote a lot of notes. It looks really weird in txt, but I was afraid to pop it into word because of compatibility.

I may have also unintentionally overwritten a lot of examples, but that's just the caffeine. I swear. :shock:

edit: because then I thought to myself, "Hey maybe it would be cool if I actually attached the right file."

:oops:
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