As you know (or not. Doesn't matter, hahahaha...) I've been uploading my script for my VN on Fictionpress.com and Readwave.com for some review. And fortunately, some generous souls decided to review them. Hahaha...
And here's the main problem. Almost all of them said that my dialogue scene was rather "clunky" and clumsy. So I hope that someone could help me review my dialogue scene and help me come up with a better one is that particular dialogue is simply bad. And also a little proofread here and there.
For starter, I can't pay you, sorry. I need an unpaid editor for now.
Oh yeah, the story. Sorry, almost forgot, hahaha...
Here's the story :
After receiving a letter, he landed into the island where the clue for the thing he is looking for. But before he can even get his hand on the clue, he must do something.And that is to become a teacher a magic academy. But it seems that his days of teaching is going to be far from ordinary due to the strange chain of events. Starting from a girl that leap out of a window on the third floor to a strange disappearance of a book in the library. His mission, search and tell his students the truth.
Well, PM me or reply if you are interested!
You can read the story by clicking the link on my sig. Fictionpress have more chapter than readwave for now.
Thank you and good luck to you!
