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I've decided to go back to the drawing board for awhile. I would like to say thank you for your various suggestions. I belive that about a month or two should be enough. I'll adimit it may seem rash to suddenly decide to start from scratch, but it's rashness and ambition that messed me up in the first place.So for now 告別 (farewell)

Wait, suddenly decided to end on a good note, my keyboard was fixed recently, and I'm off to read The Thirty-Six Dramatic Situations, by Georges Polti

Actually you SHOULD post the story you have. You don't need to post all of them, just a summary to "tease" reader is enough. Otherwise, people won't interested in helping you, especially if you are new comer (looking this is your first post). Well, if you are veteran here, you'll know that this is what people expect you to at least do (post the summary, I mean).

BTW, by first word of the thread title, do you mean "Desperate"?

I agree, people are more likely to get excited about the story and jump on board if they get a piece of the story. Jumping in blindly is highly unlikely.

Thank you for your advice, I like to learn from my mistakes, so feel free to find any other mistakes, espicially when you see the letter "N" in places it shouldn't be, my "n" key needs fixing.

Firstly: I'd proofread my post, before putting it here, if I was a writer looking for an artist. Just in the first sentence I find:

I can't even use pen and paper handwriteing. However, I've just barely begun typeing the story for a visual novel, in programming launguge. I'd also like to say the more characters an artist is willing nto (forgiving this one, since you said something about it) draw, the better I can write the story.

Dividing your synopsis in easier-to-read paragraphs would help, too.

Generally, the more time you put in your presentation, the more time I'll assume you'll devote to the project. Plus, since writing is supposedly your area of expertise, I won't forgive as many errors and typos as I'd forgive to any other poster here. Several typos, misspellings and stuff like the wrong spaces after or before a comma will really make me wonder whether you can do better while narrating the story and, ultimately, lose interest in your post.

I will leave examples to more qualified people (if they want), but I'd also try to be more creative with the presentation of the story. It doesn't necessarily have to be a list of events - you can let your characters talk, you can use a tone fitting to the story you're presenting and so on.

I think Ren already said most of what I wanted to say...

I'd also like to say the more characters an artist is willing nto draw, the better I can write the story.

Good writing does not necessarily depend on the number of characters... you might want to look into monodrama for ideas (theater by and large has many similarities to VNs anyway... at least IMO).

One character might not work for a VN - if we're counting the player's character, at least! - but two definitely can. (Last year's NaNoRenO had multiple games like that, IIRC.) Maybe even one if you're doing something experimental!

I've decided to go back to the drawing board for awhile. I would like to say thank you for your various suggestions. I belive that about a month or two should be enough. I'll adimit it may seem rash to suddenly decide to start from scratch, but it's rashness and ambition that messed me up in the first place. 告別 (farewell)

*grins*